Good seed, but needs a LOT of work
Man, this book has a really good concept, but the execution is terrible. It REALLY needs to be gone over by a good editor. Hell, even a mediocre editor would be nice. Typos, misspellings, wrong words, repetitive, and needs a good fat trimming. I would like to re-read this some time in the future after its been fixed. It's a really cool idea mixing the tech and magic but it's just hard to wade through.