Inverted Allure: A Dark MM College Romance

by Kat Ashley

Beau harbors a deep-seated dislike for Oliver Fowler, a sentiment not reciprocated by Oliver. In fact, Oliver's feelings towards Beau are the complete opposite. At the university, Oliver is known as the 'Golden Boy', receiving adoration and admiration from nearly everyone. Beau, however, remains the sole exception to this widespread adulation. *** During a tense moment, Oliver emits a stifled chuckle, forcefully pressing Beau against the wall with a hand on his chest. "If I'm really that golden, why am I doing this?" Beau starts to question, furrowing his brows in confusion, but his words are cut short. In an unexpected move, Oliver Fowler's lips crash onto Beau's, leaving no room for further conversation.

181 pages, Kindle Edition

Published December 21, 2023

Reviews

[Shelba · Rating 1 out of 5]

DNF @ 3%.

Six pages in and I am already losing track of the editing issues. There’s a lack of commas, there’s random words capitalized, there’s names not capitalized, there’s incorrect spelling, there’s thought in italics half the time and not the other half. Though the lack of commas is probably the most annoying.

• This is fucking torture I think dragging a hand over my face. - no italics for thoughts, no comma

• He naturally draws peoples attention medal or no medal. - “people’s” not “peoples”, no comma

• It is no secret that Oliver fowler infuriates the fuck out of me. - Fowler not capitalized

• High from the rush of racing In front of such a large crowd. - “in” capitalized

• “I breath once and Fowler is a fucking 3 feet Infront of me” I say, shrugging on a shirt. - “Infront” capitalized and not a words, punctuation missing at the end of dialogue

• “I mean in a race, you shouldn’t skip breath’s.” - Breathe’s?

This is just a sample of some of the issues in just the first 6 pages. There’s over 170 pages left and I can’t do it.

[Sam Clover · Rating 2 out of 5]

The story has a lot of potential. I loved the main characters and their steamy dynamic. The pacing is good. The setting is good. Unfortunately, it is so rife with errors and off-putting authors notes throughout, as well as a number of inconsistent character choices, that it became nearly unreadable for me. I really hope this author gets this book edited—doesn't even need to be a pro, just someone with a decent grasp on grammar and punctuation, because this could be a really good book.

[Jennirella · Rating 1 out of 5]

So I read this. That happened. It totally earns its rating.

The story isn’t bad. I rather like the swim squad captain/underling grumpy/sunshine idea but the execution was a total fail. It’s like this book was typed out on a phone with auto-correct turned off. The word torture was spelled ‘torcher’, koala was ‘Kuala’. The dialog is pretty bad, too. The grumpy MC seems almost unable to string a sentence together.