This is a short book that will pleasantly pass away an afternoon. I liked the plot: it’s “You’ve Got Mail” set in Regency times. Interesting sidebar: I’ve read that the movie, “You’ve Got Mail,” was not only a remake of a previous movie and play, but it was influenced by Jane Austin’s Pride and Prejudice, so here we are, back in Regency times.
Lady Persephone Blasgrove is our heroine who, because of a near-death experience six months ago, has decided to lead a life of her own choosing. There are limitations. She has a limp and experiences immense pain when she overuses her leg – this is after the accident that led to her near death. She has a scar on her chin that nobody seems to notice, except her. She also struggles with weight issues which seem extraordinarily far-fetched since our hero carries her piggyback (oh! the scandal!) without mishap and he finds her memorably voluptuous.
Richard Fairbanks is our hero. He is a self-admitted rogue who loves the ladies up to a point, then he disappears from their lives. He is uninterested in marriage and seems to enjoy his single life. He is an extremely likeable fellow. As a matter of fact, the writer paints a much better picture of the hero than she does of the heroine.
One reason why our heroine, “Poppy” to her friends, is less intriguing might be because the writer can’t seem to make up her mind about how to portray Lady Poppy. During part of the book, she is a fearless heroine, with a bucket list of things to try out because she looks at life differently after meeting and eschewing death – she has a lot of pluck…until…she doesn’t. She seems to sink into her mounting insecurities as the story moves along. I could have done without all that angst; truly, it did not become Poppy.
The letter writing is mostly one-sided, and I would have enjoyed a bit more back-and-forth between the two lovers. Lady Poppy does the writing and dear Mr. Fairbanks gets to react. I’d like to have seem him take a more active role in the letter sending. The one time he does respond, the letter reads like Lady Poppy’s, and the writer is apparent, as well. His letter includes the ellipses the writer is inordinately fond of using.
It does not take long for readers to discover that Mr. Fairbanks is a gentleman in rogue’s clothing. He has a warm heart and he plays on a reader’s heartstrings because his behavior is genuinely charming. He is affable, courteous, attentive when he must be, and aware of others’ thoughts and feelings. He is a creditable hero.
There are some problems:
Poppy’s family is dense as a concrete wall. Poppy’s mother snipes at her to dance and is oblivious to Poppy’s physical pain when she does dance, which is a rare occurrence (and the why of that is not explained very well by the writer). Both her mother and brother leave Poppy alone at the various balls they attend, forgetting all about her. They profess to want her to find true happiness, yet they throw her at a viscount who is after her dowry and who behaved badly when he broke off their engagement after her accident. She tells them over and over and over that she does not want him, will not marry him, and her mother and brother keep thrusting her at him. They appear to have a part in a ruse to force Poppy into marriage with the n’er-do-well viscount. And if they did not have a hand in it, they are amenable to it and insist she marry the blighter. They seem to be a terrible family.
Our hero, Mr. Fairbanks, is interested in Poppy and has spent time with her, yet he does not recognize her voice or her scent (which he finds enticing) when they meet again in the dark. This is in a garden in London during the Season; it would not have been so dark that features could not have been discernable. He would have remembered her voice. The whole scene seemed contrived and unbelievable.
Lady Poppy goes off to a bookstore, looking for a reply from her crush. She goes alone, unchaperoned, and this behavior from a Lady of the peerage would not have been condoned. She is inculcated into Society’s strict rules and would not disobey them when she would be so easily caught. However, the writer needs her to go to that bookstore to move the plot along.
The book suddenly ends. It simply stops. In fewer than two pages, everything is made right, true love is declared, and all’s right with the world. It was unsatisfying.
There are also some intrusive problems that impact the enjoyment of the book:
Punctuation errors irritate. For instance, “And if he did know it was her…, would he be repulsed?” The comma is superfluous and should be removed, or the ellipsis could be left out.
The writer loves her ellipses and inserts them throughout the book. Ellipses should be used discriminately because they call attention to themselves and their surrounding words. They are a handy device, but overused, they become annoying.
The wrong verb is employed: “…[a manor] sitting on fifty acres….” Animate objects (people, animals) sit; inanimate objects (books, manors) set. This should read, “…[a manor] setting on fifty acres….”
A baby seems to have a name change in chapter 7. On one page he is referred to as “Daniel” and on the next page he has become “George.” The names appear only on these two pages without further reference.
The writer uses the phrase, “…much laughter and conversations…” often, but doesn’t show us what the laughter is all about or what the conversations entail. I’d like to know what these cheerful characters are laughing at and talking about.
There is an oddly worded sentence that makes the reader pause: “What have you so out of sorts, Richard?” Perhaps the writer meant the speaker to say something like, “What has you so out of sorts, Richard?”
On occasion, the writer appears to misplace her prepositions. For example, “Persephone wondered which beauty with lofty connection her mother had set her snares.” This sentence doesn’t make sense in or out of context. Perhaps, “…on which beauty with lofty connections her mother had set her snares?”
I believe the wrong verb is used here: “There are too many in society who comprise to force a marriage…” The verb, comprise, means to be made up of; I think the writer means “conspire,” as in “There are too many in society who conspire to force a marriage…”
I rated this book 3-stars. I loved the premise but found the delivery to be a little lacking. The book felt rushed, and Poppy’s character wants smoothing out. There was a wonderful sweetness in the relationship that developed between Lady Persephone and Mr. Fairbanks. The spice was a part of the storyline and did not seem prurient, although I’d like to have seen the sweetness develop into a deeper friendship before sex was brought in. As a novella, there is not a lot of room for development, but it is entirely possible to show a deepening relationship in few words with careful writing and equally careful editing. I look forward to reading a longer book by Ms. Clarke. It may be that the longer format will allow for the sweetness of beginning love to be showcased before sex is introduced. We’ll see…