DNF at 20%. And I hate to DNF so soon, but there's no way I can slog through this book any longer. It's the kind of book that takes forever to read because you keep putting it off -- and I have a TBR to get through, so I'm not wasting any more of my time.
What I disliked:
1. Almost everything about the writing. Repetitive, overwrought prose. Paragraphs are devoted to spelling out simple things that the reader can figure out on their own. Too much description is added in scenes that should be tense, making them drag when they should be quick and dynamic. Some of the descriptive bits are just cheesy and cliche. While the prose is technically good, it's bland, so I would've preferred a more action-heavy and less wordy delivery of this story.
2. Cardboard characters. Seriously. It's like this cast is made entirely of stock characters with absolutely nothing to set them apart from any others. I'm on chapter 10 and I still know nothing about the MC except that she's the stereotypical "simple country girl" who works as a barmaid. No personality to speak of. The reason for this is that, so far, she's had almost NO opportunity to take action -- she only REACTS and almost never ACTS. Taking action by making choices is how a character develops, and if they don't get to do that, they fall flat every time. This is a super common mistake amateur writers make, which brings me to my next point--
3. This just feels like a beginning writer's self-published work. And there's nothing wrong with being a beginner OR self-published, but as a reader, I shouldn't be able to tell. I shouldn't be pressing through ten chapters of exposition, thinking, "Oh, god, there's no way this book had an editor. An editor would have cut 90% of this nonsense." It's also full of tropes, and tropes are only good if you do something interesting and new with them. Which this author doesn't. At all.
4. Nothing about this book stands out. The setting is a vaguely medieval blur -- the world-building here is careless, almost nonexistent. Same for the magical system. Same for the plot (what little of it I managed to get through -- like I said, I DNF'd because the exposition was taking 10+ chapters. The main conflict hasn't even been introduced yet). It's just. It's bland. It's a colorless, lifeless mess.
5. Plot and action. I'm ten chapters into this book, and here's what's happened: strange people come to Bree's town. They reveal that her father is an Elemental (think Avatar: The Last Airbender). They force her and her father to leave their hometown and go see the king, because all Elementals are supposed to work for him. And... that's it. It took ten chapters just for them to arrive at the castle; ten chapters of talking (cue cringey, stilted dialogue) and walking through a featureless countryside. I can't.
What I liked:
-MC is hard-working and practical. She's strong, but not the typical badass you see in a lot of YA lately. I mean, I love badass heroines, but some variety is good, too, so I liked seeing a more relatable and realistic protagonist.
-Writing style is technically good. As in, no grammar errors that I noticed, decent prose, etc.
-Uh... Yeah, that's it. *shrug*
TL;DR:
This book needs some serious editing. I can't continue to sit here and try to force down pages and pages of aimless prose, especially when the world-building and characters are so dull, lacking anything to set them apart from the much better books I could be spending my time on.
I received this book from NetGalley in exchange for an honest review.