I wish I could write a more positive review, but this did not hit for me. It had a lot of ideas and promise but didn’t realize them.
This is the first in a series of four books that are being released a month apart, and they were clearly written as a single story, as the author describes in the beginning. I knew that going in, so I wasn’t surprised, and yet still there is some disappointment. When you serialize a release there should be at least some self-contained element in the story, even if it is basically setting up for something larger. There is nothing like that here. This is clearly the first act that doesn’t even try to feel like a fully formed story, even one setting up for something else. It literally feels like a random page number or chapter count was reached and that is where the story was split apart. Again, I knew going in that this wasn’t a complete story, but I didn’t anticipate just how abrupt it would be. If you this going in, that the ending point feels arbitrary and that you really need to read all four in the series to have a single story, then I imagine it won’t be a problem.
Let me start with what I enjoyed, because this might be enough to bring some folks to the title(s). The author takes a very bird’s eye approach, moving all around this small town, which is a very nice way to develop the environment and pace the story. It reminded me of some vintage Stephen King in that way. We dropped in on more than a handful of different characters and would flit about, following each for a while before moving on, and seeing how this singular event in their town is spreading and affecting everyone. I also like that, even in this opening act of the story, there is no hesitancy to start the body count. Lots of stories will body a random person in the prologue and then thread you along until you’re about 2/3 of the way through before the bodies really start falling, or, less euphemistically, before the characters really start experiencing the effects of whatever antagonist they’re facing. That’s not the case here, and it is refreshing. It raises the stakes and that is compelling. Lastly, the ancient evil seems interesting enough. We don’t know enough about it, it could still fall into boring/unimaginative territory, but for now it seems to be a few different mythological ideas put together and it is exciting. (Really, the development in the later books will determine how fun this ancient evil really is as the story’s big bad).
So, what’s less than awesome? Firstly, and this might be the kind of fundamental difficulty, was that the writing itself felt somewhere between clunky and uninspired. We moved between so many characters that the style of prose felt like an author’s bio at the back of a book. It was kind of plain and didactic and felt like it was from a technical manual. There are a few occasions where it got more stylized, but this just felt out of place, in context, it felt like it was effortful, or trying too hard. I generally would rather err on the side of stripped back prose than purple prose, but here it didn’t inspire any real excitement or feeling. Added to that is what I felt were rather generic characters, and a lack of narrative focus. We met a lot of characters, and many of them were given random assortments of facts that served as their backstories, but ultimately they felt like the archetypical expectations of who would populate a small town. None of them felt particularly genuine or lived-in, but just there to meet the expectation of the role. This is where the writing style and the constant movement between characters didn’t do the story any favors. If the prose was more stylized then we might have felt more emotions in relation to these characters, we may have had more to grab onto when exploring their lives. But the dry delivery combined with almost biographic explanations meant I wasn’t drawn to any of them. And, seemingly, neither was the author, because it is hard to pinpoint who is the central, or central-adjacent, character. Even when the story really is about the whole town, and jumps around, we need at least one person that we can really identify with and experience the story along with. In this kind of story, it would usually be the local sheriff or the young child at the beginning of the conflict, and we do spend time with both of them, but not enough to distinguish them as more central than anyone else, really. I never felt like I was going on a journey with anyone, because the characters all felt flat and none of them stood out as audience surrogate (or as being anywhere adjacent to audience surrogate). Between what felt like flat writing, uninspired characters, and a somewhat absent narrative thrust, and add in maybe just a little racism (when this ancient evil is released it muses to itself that the humans in the world now are much more “intellectually evolved” than the ones who had locked it, presumably the Lenape indigenous peoples, who are frequently mentioned throughout the story) and I came really close to DNF’ing this story. The only thing that stopped me was it did move quickly, and given the pacing I was interested to see how this part of the story would end to set up for something more in book two (only to find out this part of the story doesn’t really end, as I mentioned already).
It is hard for me to recommend this. It is following a tried and tested trope; an ancient evil is accidentally released and wreaks havoc on a small town. There is a lot of gold to mine there, and Manx has definitely shown that he sees that gold, he knows it is there, I just didn’t feel like the story was particularly successful in taking the next step to mine any of it. It might be the case that reading the other parts redeem this one, but that would just go to show that it wasn’t wise to split the story into various publications in the way it was split. If you really like “small town in distress” vibes then you might have fun here, it just didn’t come together for me.
I want to thank the author, the publisher Last Waltz Publishing, and NetGalley, who provided a complimentary eARC for review. I am leaving this review voluntarily.