This was Jennifer Lloyd’s debut novel, and I really tried to take this into consideration when reading. I’ve never written a book, so I give her props…however, I know what I like and this wasn’t it. The first few chapters held my interest, and I was eager to continue on. However, things began to unravel, and quickly.
We have Sandy who is a stay at home mom to two children, David and Lisa. She’s married to Johnny, who has physically abused her for years. The layout and flow of this book was confusing, how the chapters jumped around to different perspectives and dates. Some chapters are in the present, but the next chapter might be a few months into the future, with the next one in the past. Way too much work for the reader, flipping back and forth trying to figure out what’s what. Also, the author has the kids attending public school during the summer. I realize that some schools do go all year round, but if this is the case, the author should state this to lessen the confusion.
A good majority of this book was inner dialogue, which I am not a fan of. I enjoy verbal interaction between the characters to carry a story. I like a story with action between the characters, not just thinking about it. Another issue for me were the run-on sentences. My inner English teacher was pounding her head against the blackboard. There were so many, that it actually pulled me away from the story. A good edit was definitely needed in reference to this.
The plot was missing some major bridging. An example: You have Sandy who was beaten by her husband and ends up in the hospital. The police are involved, but everyone is just chill about everything. They find Johnny on the side of the house almost beaten to death by David, but no one questions it and the story moves on. Sandy ends up staying at the hospital pretty much overnight, even though she has facial fractures with multiple bruising, and then goes to work the next day, with no one commenting on her appearance! To top it off, she’s actually hit on by a male customer. Major red flags, Sandy, run!
Further into the story we have David and Lisa walking to the next town to follow/find their mother. However, the next chapter, Sandy makes it home to the kids waiting for her, and there’s no mention whatsoever of the kids walking to the next town searching for her. Very confusing.
Then we have a side story involving Lisa and her boyfriend. It was sweet watching things progress, until it wasn’t. The sex scenes between them, were pretty cringe worthy.
I could go on, but I don’t want my review to turn into a book in and of itself. I’m truly baffled how this story received so many 5-star reviews. Did we read the same book? Did I miss something? This book does end on a cliffhanger, but I have absolutely no desire to read book two.