Good story telling, but needs editing.
As the title implys, I'm enjoying this series, but holy cow do you need an editor! The text is loaded with unnecessary phrasing, and statements that add nothing but word count (i.e. he started to click his tongue, but then didn't.). There is a ton of repetition which is tedious. Then there are just bad word choices. Please don't say Anyways; drop the S. Likewise for forwards... Drop the S. "Open fire" is not a single hyphenated word, ergo "open-fired" is not a word at all.
There is so much more, and I hope you get an editor to help your stories shine. All your favorite stories have been edited for content and grammar. You don't want to lose a reader for something that's easily remedied. You do spin a good yarn, and I wish you all the best.