DNF 85%. Rewrite the end!!
Was desperately disappointed with this one.
I’ve struggled with the beginning of each book. The cruelty, arrogance, and entitlement of all the MMC’s.
But by the middle I always forgive and start to care.
Then the angst gets strong, followed by a betrayal, and then thankfully a decent and heartfelt grovel.
It’s definitely a formula I love and enjoy.
This time though, at around the 80% mark, it totally FAILED!!
Instead of having the guys (justifiably) grovel, the author has the FMC have to go to them (again), and in essence throw herself at them.
Repeatedly throughout this one, the FMC has had to make herself vulnerable, give more, be braver, kinder, better.
(While thee MMC’s did end up revealing better parts, it never really matched their words and actions from the beginning, so never truly made up for it. Further,, their continued words, that she was an afterthought connected to the male love, seriously grated.)
After all her sacrifices, pain, and betrayals by everyone who should have cared… Nope, too much!!
I was waiting for the payoff, the moment when the FMC would get her recognition, her moment of justification and chance to be wanted so much that someone was willing to fight for her, to make THEMSELVES, vulnerable!
Epic fail!
I almost have to say skip this one if you loved the others, despite the links and info shared by all of them…
Lastly, it’s a character betrayal by the author.
Considering the FMC’s backstory, the continued reinforcement of the negative beliefs, and her pain, it just doesn’t make sense that she would keep throwing herself at them, when they have done nothing but reject her.
She even says to herself that they obviously never really loved her…
So WHY, would she go chasing after them again?
Why would she daydream about the good moments, and not the cruelty of the last moments?
This ending was not only an epic fail in satisfaction, it made no sense!
REWRITE.