First reads winner
When Zach was thinking over their relationship and realized they’d only known each other 13 days, 6 of which he was away in Montana, it really brought into perspective how flawed their relationship really was in the first book. This one started out better though, I was really thinking it had promise. I was hoping for more chemistry and description of the love scenes, but alas, that is not meant to be in this book. The sex is brushed right over and swept under the rug. A major pet peeve of mine is romance authors that don’t write the romance scenes. This one was noticeably funnier and sweeter than the first one, like the author flipped on her charming switch and realized she needed to be funny in here. The first scene with J. Dawson Hidgepath the ghost and Enzo was cute. It was also cute how Zach missed her when she left and wanted the smell of her with him, so he wrote a note “Missing you. Took your little bottle. A kiss will get it back.”
Some major annoyances surfaced, some old themes from the first book. The guard at Mr. Laurentine’s house had the same look as Zach so he must be an ex-deputy sheriff. The author tries to force this theme way too much. Let it unfold naturally, don’t hammer it into reader’s heads at every turn that the men are big, they have big shoulders, they’re ex-military, ex-policemen, all the time. We don’t need the character to notice impossible things like being able to tell by the look of someone that they were specifically an ex-deputy sheriff, exactly like Zach. I find it impossible to believe that anyone could look in someone’s eye and pinpoint exactly that someone specifically used to be a deputy sheriff. Made all the more unbelievable because Clare has only been around Zach for 13 days, so she would have to have amazing perception skills to target this guy’s prior profession. It’s these far-fetched, unrealistic things like this that really rub me the wrong way. They’re so stilted and contrived and it’s trying too hard.
Dora, Clare’s niece, calls and they start using words from another language out of nowhere. I didn’t even know Clare knew any words in another language, as there was no indication of that in the entire first novel, and there was no explanation in here. Main character speaks in another language all of a sudden, just go with it! Though there was a little mention of her Gypsy ancestry, there was absolutely no mention whatsoever about her living that lifestyle. Dora demands to know about her gift, knowing that the aunt left a video for her. Dora isn’t likable, I thought she was a sweet little girl and she’s like this bratty, demanding teenager.
The minute Desiree appeared in the story I started disliking this book for all of the old reasons that made the first so unlikable. In order for me to like someone they usually need to make a good first impression, or else I’ve got those bad memories I can’t forget. And Desiree did not make a good first impression. Clare realizes that the disapproving housekeeper, the jealous bimbo Missy and Desiree have all slept with Mr. Laurentine. That’s disgusting, made more so by the fact that Desiree is married to Rick, Zach’s boss. Don’t people realize we think less of the person for having the bad judgment to sleep with the other person, not the other person for being the way they are. Like Mr. Laurentine isn’t likable, he’s cocky, rude, mean, uncaring of anyone else, esp the spirits who need to pass on. He just cares about having a real ghost town and parties at his house. So I think the fault lies with Desiree for sleeping with him.
Desiree having a power of her own was a little too much, and of course Clare’s aura is beautiful. In fact, once Clare fully accepts her gift it’ll be so bright Desiree will have to wear sunglasses. Just once I think I’d like to hear your aura looks like crap. It’s really dark which indicates you’re just a terrible person, something to break up the monotony! And Zach’s is dark which shows old and new pain, and it complements Clare’s. Of course.
It was nice when Zach came up the path and Desiree says go to him, he’d like that. It was cool she could tell that Zach would like it. Though is she an aura reader or a mind reader? Just throw another gift at her. And all the shoulder nudging that Desiree was doing was srsly getting old. She’d say something, nudge Clare’s shoulder, say something again, nudge her again. Can she say anything without touching Clare? So Zach comes and I’ve been wanting them to come together since Clare left, and they’ve been missing each other so I’m hoping for some romance. I should have known better.
Zach gestures for Desiree to leave the room first, and she lifts an eyebrow and says she’s taking care of Clare. Ok, why wud a stranger be taking care of Clare? That’s just annoying. Clare says she can take care of herself, fine words but nothing but talk, and neither Zach nor Desiree deign to respond, Clare’s words not mine, because they’re having a stare off. Perfect. When all else fails just introduce another person, slap her with a power of her own and call it a plot. I wanted Zach and Clare to be alone, not have a stranger getting in stare-offs with Zach and refusing to leave, horning in on their time together.
I HATE having another character, you u don’t like, be better at doing things than the main character. While the side character is risking her life, doing dangerous things, being competent and capable and strong, and protecting the heroine, the main character is needing to be protected, being hurt, weak, needy, following orders, doing as she’s told, and letting others protect her.
A shot sounds and Desiree jumps on Clare. Clare hits her cheek hard on the ground and Desiree, who I’m disliking more and more, says “wow, you really hit your cheek. Gonna have a bruise.” How sympathetic. She didn’t hit her cheek, u tackled her. Wtf?! I think an apology is in order.
Zach is scanning the area, like a freakin machine, not even asking how Clare is. I’m really getting sick of him having to have his right hand free, so he can grab his weapon, and him scanning. When she gets hung up on something she really gets on it and won’t let it go, just keeps saying it over and over.
Desiree tells Zach she doesn’t think the shooter was aiming for Clare because she didn’t see anything. Ok, so now she can read intentions of ppl maybe hundreds of yards away, see the future and see auras? And the powers just keep on coming.
Zach grabs her arm, hurries her down the path, Clare asks to go slow because of her ribs, after her previous fall down the stairs, and he just mutters he doesn’t want her out in the open. Him and Desiree are scanning like hawks for prey, extremely annoying. Zach comments she’ll need the doctor to look at her cheek and Clare, our strong and tough heroine, lets out a moan. There u go, Clare. Make urself look like more of a baby than u already have against the woman that can somehow do all that, save u from a bullet, scan the area, and not even be winded. I am so glad Clare is our heroine! Zach says her cheek needs icing and Desiree says just “sorry” and doesn’t even mean it. Oh great. Another character I hate.
Once they get back to the house Clare comes in the room with Mr. Laurentine, Desiree and Zach and he doesn’t even hold out his hand to her when she comes in. Clare wonders if it’s because he wants his weapon hand free or another reason. Great, more problems in this relationship is just what the doctor ordered, &in case anyone’s forgotten he uses his right hand for his weapon, well the author is going to say it again, he keeps his right hand free for his weapon. Got that? Mr. Laurentine is mocking as usual, saying “fall of the path, Clare?” She says she can give the bones back of Hidgepath back and let him handle them, implying she’s leaving (was that supposed to be her standing up to Laurentine, because that was pathetic) and Zach interrupts her with a warning tone. Not cool. It continues and later Clare just says the word I and Zach cuts her off and speaking for her says she’d like to get changed. They leave and Zach asks her what’s going on, like she’s the problem. Like his behavior towards her hasn’t been cold or rude at all. He accuses her of not being committed, and she says she doesn’t want to be a psychic detective and he says well he doesn’t want to be a private investigator. And Clare just rushes over and flings herself into his arms. That’s all it takes, after the way he’s been treating her she just throws herself at him. She decides to stay, def influenced by Zach. I didn’t like the way he talked her into staying. Helping the ghost was right but him basically manipulating her into staying rubbed me the wrong way.
&don’t 4get that Zach likes puzzles. As was stated, oh about 100 times in the 1st book, Zach likes puzzles. And this one is giving the other one a run for it’s money. It might even outdo it. Zach hunts men &puzzles. Seriously, this man shud sit down every now&then and do a jigsaw if he likes them so much.
The scene at the ghost town was absolutely ridiculous. It was beaten over my head with Zach, Rossi &Desiree. It was just too much. They were scanning, they pulled their weapons out when a man already alerted them to his presence, calling out coming up behind you. Zach grabs Clare, brings out his gun. They call Enzo, Clare talks to him, Zach nods, he heard it too. Rossi relaxes infinitesimally. His steps are less sharp, louder in the dirt, cuz Desiree came out of the shadows on the boardwalk &he trusts her to protect his client. Desiree, does she have military training or something? Let me guess, she was an ex-deputy sheriff too. No? Then how is it that she has training &she’s completely competent and can do everything, while Clare is weak, moaning, &unable to do anything but help ghosts on. Enzo’s running around, causes a cold breeze, Zach grimaces, Rossi flinches. Enzo tells Clare she has to help these ghosts pass on, so she goes to get in the building with the little boy ghost. Zach puts a hand in her arm stopping her, and asks Laurentine if the building& stairs are sound. He scans the area again, his eyes focus on her&then &only then with the permission of Zach does Clare enter the building. Atta girl. Be a dependent, helpless female. It’s so admirable. Desiree had already gone inside, checked the stairs out to the second floor and tells Clare she’s safe. Wonderful. 3 ppl protecting Clare, 3 ppl more capable than her, 3 ppl risking their lives for her. Desiree feels vibrations &energy, no doubt she’ll end up with the ability to see the ghosts, surprised she doesn’t already have it bcuz she’s gotten everything but the kitchen sink thrown at her. Rossi tells her if she goes in a room stay awy from the windows. She kidna zones out &thinks of the town, &Rossi impatiently says it again. Every1 is so respectful to Clare.
Clare tells their story after, that the boy died of influenza, the mother collapses and died at the train station. And for some reason Desiree’s eyes are gleaming as she tells Clare to go on. Didn’t rly get that, seems a strange time for sum1s eyes to gleam as they hear a story about death. Clare says Hidgepath left parts from 2 toes &Desiree’s eyes sparkle. Ok, this is just getting out of hand.
After Clare gets sick from pesticide poisoning in her water, her &Zach are about to leave the room, eat&talk to Hidgepath. Desiree smiles and says I’ll go with you. This is aggravating the cap out of me. Leave them alone. Why don’t u go in their bedroom while they’re having sex&watch them. Desiree says they’re more like her ppl than anyone else there, she’s a good bodyguard. So there she goes, u can’t shake her. She crowds Clare on her other side as they go up the stairs. Zach approves. They weren’t going to let her fall again. This book is so not good for my blood pressure. There Clare is needing to be shepherded up a flight of stairs. She shud b strapped into one of those little carriers for babies.
Clare came off as rude& not genuine with almost everything she said. She would say “thanks,” just that, not she said thanks sweetly, appreciatively, gratefully, no just Thanks and I didn’t believe it. Every time she said something to Enzo or the ghosts she’d say something but the author wouldn’t say how she said it, she uses absolutely no descriptive words at all, just slams the words in quotations and leaves it at that &we’re left wondering how the characters are talking &therefore it comes off short and fake. She also always complained about the cold. When a ghost touched her she’d say she had to buy scarves&robes. That’s rude to me. Just enjoy the moment &be helpful, not complain about the cold&touching them.
Desiree rushes into the meeting her husband Tony is having with Zach&Rossi. Rossi is shocked for some reason, like Desiree is just surprising &a loose cannon, says she’s taken with Clare &I think I’m supposed to care, but I don’t. Clare comes in &I think she’s going along with Desiree& decided to crash their meeting, but no, Clare grabs Desiree, lecturing her on protocol &procedure, frowning at the casual meeting atmosphere. Protocol &procedure, that’s what ou girl stands for. How very, utterly, totally &completely 100% boring. Snooze fest.
The writing is really lazy too, so many instances where awkward wording, esp when the author tries to give them chemistry &fails, stood out glaringly like the sun on the water. “Clare reached out and took his right hand and they linked fingers and it was great.” I’m sorry, did a 5 yr old write that? That is so sloppy. Can I get some kind of emotion, some description besides it was great? The clip from the next book: “Clare sat down next to Zach and even leaned against him a little. He was much nicer than the fridge, and knew about trouble and danger.” Did she srsly just compare him with a fridge? The whole soul-eating BAD ghost in the next book reaffirms my already twice-confirmed opinion that the writing just isn't good, and it's not going to get any better because it's the same told problems. Now the old lady that's Zach's landlord or something Idr has a great-grandson that can see ghosts and there's a ghost trying to eat him, "crunch, crunch, crunch." Yep, that's really in there. I can't take any more stupid talk. First Enzo and now this. I'm so disappointed with this series. I wasn't planning on reading this one at all, but I entered to win before I read the first one and I thought I'd better read it. It's so lacking in the romance department it isn't even funny, they have "fights," she easily forgives him, she's stiff and uptight, worried about getting paid for her services, being professional, still complaining about her gift, Zach is hung up about his past, doesn't want to open up, and tells Clare what to do and is too domineering, all the while their relationship progresses too fast over an outrageously short amount of time.