Tried to enjoy this, but too many holes and gaps and random elements thrown together, in negative environments with negative messages.
About half-way through I realized the part I liked best was the cover art and the promise it gave, which the story does not deliver on. Not one great being, but endless fantastical characters, most with no introduction and little development. This is like walking through a huge toy store quickly. Oh, look! What does that do?
Written as a magical folklore adventure story, where typically self-destructive choices are repeatedly rewarded. (Getting into a stolen car with a stranger, driving into solid objects...but its magic!) This becomes a disjointed adventure, with lessons spelled out in heavy-handed prose.
The premise is lacking - a 12yo single child, with a single mom who is an actual Goddess, but never sees the need to tell her child? You know, that magical creatures might come after her? Staking the child's safety on the hope that trouble will just not happen?
The excuse for mother not sharing knowledge is, "I was forgetting", and also that her young child said she didn't want to hear after a while. So parenting doesn't include managing children who want to push off lessons? Maybe if Momo had been told the stories were actually about her life, that would have changed? As to forgetting, wasn't writing developed to record stories and information to share?
So many lessons I would not want a child learning from this story - breaking a promise to a deathly ill mother minutes after making it (leaving on her adventure.) Walking into stolen cars with strangers they've been told to stay away from. Getting a ton of gift cards from an unknown source and going out alone and spending them all? Sounds like a trap for something besides 'magic'. Really, a 12yo has that much freedom with that little sense? Even more fundamental, would a bullied kid be dumb enough to go to the mall, the biggest cool-kid hangout, alone after school?
The setup seems false to me, the characters not likeable, the scenes barely sketched out, and what was the reason Danny can understand and speak the magic language? Why, 8 years AFTER they were friends, is Danny 'coming along for the ride'? Encouraging Momo into danger?
The setups begged envisioning alternate approaches that could have been used in this tale - what if mother HAD told Momo about her heritage? What if mother HAD told Momo who the creatures she saw were? A child can go through a huge adventure and convince another God to change his curse...did her mother, the God's daughter even try that?
Kept noticing the bad parenting, and didn't find it significant to the story beyond serving as setups for situations. Danny's are absent and don't correct his being mean, grandfather banishes daughter and grandchild, mother doesn't explain the magical creatures Momo sees, or teach her how to keep them secret, or why, etc. Does this tale offer any role models for YAs to aspire to?
Why not use the story to teach YA readers how to make allies of the adults in their life? Instead the adults in this story are limited to being neglectful, inadequate, causing harm, or at best changing their minds to cause less harm, or sending envoys to help out. Here adults don't take adult roles protecting children, they are not partners.