Disclosure: This book was provided to me by Edelweiss free of charge in return for an honest and unbiased review.
A modern retelling of "The Legend of Sleepy Hollow" should pretty much sell itself, right? Right?
Dear Disney,
There is no polite way to say this:
This book is terrible.
Sincerely,
Jaime
I've pondered over this review for a few days, trying to establish where "Raising the Horseman" fails. Is it the plot? Not entirely (I do have some concerns). Is it the characters? Mmm, I mean, they're not great. The writing? Is it the writing? Yes. Yes it is.
Please keep in mind that I am reviewing an uncorrected proof and the final, published book may be differ greatly (let's hope) but I'm just going to leave this here: "Others scattered into the wood, their candles bobbing through the branches like tiny points of light." I mean, maybe the candles were like tiny points of light because that's exactly what candles are. Just a thought.
Alright, slight segue. Before I get back to the issues I have with the writing, let me give a slight rundown of the story.
Our main character, Kat Van Tassel, hates living in Sleepy Hollow. Unlike the rest of the town, she doesn't believe in ghosts or in the legend of the Headless Horseman. All she cares about is reading books, skipping town one day, and becoming a writer. OK, I dig it.
Kat's great-great-great-whatever grandmother, Katrina Van Tassel, is revered in the town. When Kat misses The Longest Twilight, an annual festival held in her ancestor's honor, she is given Katrina's diary to read by her mother, Trina. Yeah...they're all named Katrina or some variation of it. sigh
From here, the chapters alternate between Kat and Katrina. Kat's sections are written as standard narrative, however, they are completely lacking plot, depth, or any real world-building. The characters are sterile and devoid of personality and their conversations are presented either as lame text messages or as, "walls of inane dialogue riddled with exclamation marks!" OK, that's not an actual quote but I needed an example.
Overall, the writing is lazy and repetitive. Instead of actual descriptions, the author (over)uses monikers like The Longest Twilight, The Oldest Tree, The Sleepy Hollow Boys, without giving these things any actual life or meaning. Even the Headless Horseman, the main event, attraction numero uno, is only ever described as (pardon me, this list is long): a "Hessian trooper," a "Hessian soldier," a "Hessian rider," a "spectral Hessian," a "Headless Hessian," a "demon Hessian," and as wearing his "Hessian uniform". Look, I want to hear about his coat, his waistcoat, his breeches (*wink*), the brass buckles on the shoes he's wearing, his cap...OK, maybe leave out the cap - he's headless so that wouldn't really make sense. But, please, describe these things to me. Don't make me Google it! It's just sloppy writing.
The chapters involving Katrina (the ancestor), on the other hand, begin as diary entries that slide into standard narrative. Normally, I'm not a fan of diary entries but I think that I would have preferred the Katrina chapters in this format. By switching to a narrative form, I think that the author forgot that these were supposed to be diary entries written by Katrina and they have Katrina writing about things that she could not have possibly known about. Then, towards the end of the book, I think that the author realized their mistake and, instead of going back and fixing it, they try to use the blanket excuse that Katrina wrote about stuff that people told her about. Nope. Not buying it.
Another issue with the Katrina (ancestor) chapters are the historical inaccuracies. "The Legend of Sleepy Hollow" takes place in 1790, just following The American Revolution. The setting of "Raising the Horseman" is slightly ambiguous. We know that Kat Van Tassel lives in modern day and her great-great-great-whatever grandmother, Katrina Van Tassel, lived some 200 years prior. Even allowing for some leeway, that puts the year somewhere around 1820.
At one point, Katrina's beau greets her, "Hey, Katrina!" SMH. Katrina also keeps begging her parents to go away to school. Sorry, not really an option for women in the early 1800's. And modern day Kat and her friend Isobel find a locket containing a photograph of Katrina. A photograph. Seriously, book, get your <bleep> together. I suppose it could have been a photograph of Katrina when she's older but it's not really explained.
Also, the Katrina chapters were not even necessary. All they did was rehash the plot of "The Legend of Sleepy Hollow" with a slight twist at the end. The problem is that, without the diary chapters, the book doesn't even have a plot since the modern day chapters are just Kat and Isobel texting each other and making plans to read the diary. I mean, there's one thing that happens, but it's more of an event not an actual plot-driving mechanic.
Seriously, this book made me so mad. I could go on but I need to be done. Do yourself a favor and just read "The Legend of Sleepy Hollow."