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Luna Lola: The Moon Wolf
"I, Grayson Dawson, Alpha of the Moonlit Pack, reject you, Lola Ashton, as my mate and Luna of this pack," I heard Grayson's voice reach my ear and a single tear ran down my left cheek as it felt like my heart was being ripped out of my chest.
"I, Lola Ashton, accept..." I did not finish my sentence before he held me up by my throat and snarled in my face. His eyes had already changed colors so I knew his wolf was in charge.
"You will not reject me, slut. I am your owner and I tell you what to do and when," he slapped me across the face and threw me on the ground.
***
After being rejected by her mate in the Moonlit pack, Lola escaped on a full moon only to enter the territory of the next Alpha King who also happened to be her second chance mate.
Adrian is the next Alpha King but he hasn't been able to assume his role because he needed a Luna by his side. A rogue that trespassed on his territory, whom he ordered be killed turned out to be his mate leaving him in a dilemma.
Will Adrian reject Lola because she came into his territory as a rogue? Will he overcome what happened to him in the past and give Lola a chance or reject her and go ahead with Fay as his chosen Luna?
What will happen when everyone finds out just how much power Lola wields and how she's supposed to protect her kind in an oncoming war? Find out in Lola- The Moon Wolf!
"I, Lola Ashton, accept..." I did not finish my sentence before he held me up by my throat and snarled in my face. His eyes had already changed colors so I knew his wolf was in charge.
"You will not reject me, slut. I am your owner and I tell you what to do and when," he slapped me across the face and threw me on the ground.
***
After being rejected by her mate in the Moonlit pack, Lola escaped on a full moon only to enter the territory of the next Alpha King who also happened to be her second chance mate.
Adrian is the next Alpha King but he hasn't been able to assume his role because he needed a Luna by his side. A rogue that trespassed on his territory, whom he ordered be killed turned out to be his mate leaving him in a dilemma.
Will Adrian reject Lola because she came into his territory as a rogue? Will he overcome what happened to him in the past and give Lola a chance or reject her and go ahead with Fay as his chosen Luna?
What will happen when everyone finds out just how much power Lola wields and how she's supposed to protect her kind in an oncoming war? Find out in Lola- The Moon Wolf!
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Published April 30, 2024
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October 13, 2024
My God, this was a dumpster fire! If you set aside all the grammatical and spelling errors and the plot holes and the ridiculously bi-polar characters, you still have a cheating, abusive, asshole of a MMC. She keeps saying "remember this and don't just take him back when he apologizes!" and then instead of him actually apologizing, he gets worse and worse until she snaps and does he apologize then? No! He sits back and "let's her come to him" Which really was just he waited until she went into heat, swooped in and was her "hero" because he fingered her and suddenly all is basically forgiven. No sex the entire book, no chemistry between the characters, everybody everywhere is worthless. He sleeps with another woman over and over again KNOWING it will physically hurt her. They keep railing against her former mate like he was some unbelievable asshole and yet, he did all the same things! He never groveled, he never apologized, hell, she didn't even make him work for it! DNFed because I just don't give AF any more, fuck 'em both, they all deserve each other.
December 6, 2024
All I can think is "why did I read that", but I know why. Earlier this year, I spent a lot of time playing puzzle games on my phone while my newborn was napping in my arms. They had a lot of adds and one of them kept pushing a book at me. It was True Luna, by Tessa Lilly. It was the worst book I had ever read so far.
Anyway, now my baby is a bit older, but lately she was on a phase where she had a lot of trouble falling asleep, and a lot of trouble staying asleep, so I found myself once again playing addridden puzzle games on my phone, and what do you know, one of them kept pushing this book at me. Fool me once, etc. Well, I was intrigued. Why do those two books have so many similarities?
In both, the fmc finds out when coming of age that her mate is the pack's Alpha. He rejects her immediately. She turns out to be the prophesied Moon Wolf that's supposed to settle some Big Thing in the wolf world, and also, there's a Rogue King who knows about it and wants her for himself. Is that pitch a whole genre or something? Who wrote the original? Why did it sprung new ones? Well, I'm no closer from finding that out and I feel dumber for having read that.
The writing style is awful. All the female characters speak like teenage girls, the silly kind, or maybe like someone thinks teenage girls would talk? Including the ones who are 50, including the MC's wolf. Yes, because the MC being a werewolf, she shares a consciousness with her wolf. Which means you'll basically read a book worth of teenage bickering, giggling (how does a wolf even giggle? I don't know, but when they do it, they do it wolfishly). It's also full of repetitions. Expect to read a lot about what a character looks like they're thinking just before they say it.
The characterization is awful. Everyone spends a lot of time stuttering, crying for no reason, laughing maniacally, being extremely aggressive for no reason. Nothing seems to have consequences. Mmc threatens the Alpha of another pack? No problem, no one ever stops to think it could be diplomaticly touchy. He decides to torture and imprison the Beta of that same pack along with his wife? Samesies. The MC sees her parents get murdered when she's 10 and spends the next 8 years being horrifically abused? No trauma.
In the same veins, the relationships between the characters seem to evolve not for actual reasons that would make sense within the narration, but because they have to. The friendship between Lola and Lyla doesn't develop, she just arrives in her new pack and this girl is there and decides they're now best friends. Lola and Adrian don't get to know each other, their affection for each other doesn't grow, they just "accept the mate bond". Small things keep getting retconned all over (fmc suddenly reacts to being called "my Queen" by mmc, thinking "that's new", what are you talking about, he's been calling you that for at least 20 chapters, she calls her mother in law "mom" for the third or fourth time and suddenly it's a big deal even though it elicited no reaction before, the beta of her former pack was suddenly Alpha, after all. Characters are suddenly called different names for a few paragraphs).
Everyone is so uncurious. So fmc arrives at her new pack starved, injured, and battered, immediately gets imprisoned for being a rogue, but no one thinks to ask her any question? Like, I don't know, who are you, where are you coming from, why are you here, what happened to you? No? She comes back after having been kidnapped and imprisoned for a week and no one wants to know what happened to her or what she learned when she was there? Lola's best friend who moved before her parents got killed meets her again when he thought she had been killed alongside them and he doesn't want to know what happened to her, how she's even alive?
Well, maybe they're smarter than I am, because my own curiosity led me to read this. It would seem that there are three more volumes of this. I read and watched a lot of very bad fiction because I am a completionist but I'm not willing to self-harm with this any longer, I'm mad enough at myself for even beginning it in the first place.
Anyway, now my baby is a bit older, but lately she was on a phase where she had a lot of trouble falling asleep, and a lot of trouble staying asleep, so I found myself once again playing addridden puzzle games on my phone, and what do you know, one of them kept pushing this book at me. Fool me once, etc. Well, I was intrigued. Why do those two books have so many similarities?
In both, the fmc finds out when coming of age that her mate is the pack's Alpha. He rejects her immediately. She turns out to be the prophesied Moon Wolf that's supposed to settle some Big Thing in the wolf world, and also, there's a Rogue King who knows about it and wants her for himself. Is that pitch a whole genre or something? Who wrote the original? Why did it sprung new ones? Well, I'm no closer from finding that out and I feel dumber for having read that.
The writing style is awful. All the female characters speak like teenage girls, the silly kind, or maybe like someone thinks teenage girls would talk? Including the ones who are 50, including the MC's wolf. Yes, because the MC being a werewolf, she shares a consciousness with her wolf. Which means you'll basically read a book worth of teenage bickering, giggling (how does a wolf even giggle? I don't know, but when they do it, they do it wolfishly). It's also full of repetitions. Expect to read a lot about what a character looks like they're thinking just before they say it.
The characterization is awful. Everyone spends a lot of time stuttering, crying for no reason, laughing maniacally, being extremely aggressive for no reason. Nothing seems to have consequences. Mmc threatens the Alpha of another pack? No problem, no one ever stops to think it could be diplomaticly touchy. He decides to torture and imprison the Beta of that same pack along with his wife? Samesies. The MC sees her parents get murdered when she's 10 and spends the next 8 years being horrifically abused? No trauma.
In the same veins, the relationships between the characters seem to evolve not for actual reasons that would make sense within the narration, but because they have to. The friendship between Lola and Lyla doesn't develop, she just arrives in her new pack and this girl is there and decides they're now best friends. Lola and Adrian don't get to know each other, their affection for each other doesn't grow, they just "accept the mate bond". Small things keep getting retconned all over (fmc suddenly reacts to being called "my Queen" by mmc, thinking "that's new", what are you talking about, he's been calling you that for at least 20 chapters, she calls her mother in law "mom" for the third or fourth time and suddenly it's a big deal even though it elicited no reaction before, the beta of her former pack was suddenly Alpha, after all. Characters are suddenly called different names for a few paragraphs).
Everyone is so uncurious. So fmc arrives at her new pack starved, injured, and battered, immediately gets imprisoned for being a rogue, but no one thinks to ask her any question? Like, I don't know, who are you, where are you coming from, why are you here, what happened to you? No? She comes back after having been kidnapped and imprisoned for a week and no one wants to know what happened to her or what she learned when she was there? Lola's best friend who moved before her parents got killed meets her again when he thought she had been killed alongside them and he doesn't want to know what happened to her, how she's even alive?
Well, maybe they're smarter than I am, because my own curiosity led me to read this. It would seem that there are three more volumes of this. I read and watched a lot of very bad fiction because I am a completionist but I'm not willing to self-harm with this any longer, I'm mad enough at myself for even beginning it in the first place.
This entire review has been hidden because of spoilers.
December 11, 2024
My only 1 star read this year! I save 1 stars for books I really feel shouldn't have been published, and this one is ROUGH. So rough, that for the first time ever I won't be finishing a series I stared. This book wasn't edited, the author was barely coherent and the story didn't have much to offer. This is simply not worth my money.
Don't read, there are plenty of better books out there that are better in every possible way.
Don't read, there are plenty of better books out there that are better in every possible way.
October 4, 2024
poorly written
This book is so poorly written I honestly wonder if it was AI generated or maybe the author speaks another language and her writing was out thru a translation program. It’s so clunky with so many errors the plot line is completely lost. It was all I could do to finish and I definitely won’t waste time or money on the next book.
This book is so poorly written I honestly wonder if it was AI generated or maybe the author speaks another language and her writing was out thru a translation program. It’s so clunky with so many errors the plot line is completely lost. It was all I could do to finish and I definitely won’t waste time or money on the next book.
August 19, 2024
Good story. Tough to read.
The storyline is good. It’s the typical wolf story. The female is unique and alluring the male is handsome and an idiot. A good read, despite the grammatical errors, name changes, and incorrect word usage.
The storyline is good. It’s the typical wolf story. The female is unique and alluring the male is handsome and an idiot. A good read, despite the grammatical errors, name changes, and incorrect word usage.
December 2, 2024
I’ve gotten so many ads with an excerpt from this book…it was exactly what I expected
December 18, 2024
Good story, obviously didn’t proofread
Two stars because of the terrible grammar, innumerable misspellings and parts that she didn’t correct obvious character name changes. It was so distracting that it took away from the story. Dude just hit spell check. Not that hard. Proofreading actually matters.
Two stars because of the terrible grammar, innumerable misspellings and parts that she didn’t correct obvious character name changes. It was so distracting that it took away from the story. Dude just hit spell check. Not that hard. Proofreading actually matters.
May 17, 2025
DNF around 50%. Zero attempts at editing from this author. I originally suspected an AI wrote this but even a basic spellchecker would have been utilized in that case so that leaves me with a very lazy author. Characters' names randomly changed several times in a paragraph. Characters exhibit inconsistent behavior through the first half of the book they read extremely unstable so connecting with them is impossible. It's written as an adult romance but the characters are extremely adolescent in how they think, talk, and act.
I may have finished this book is not for some issues with the reading App which has nothing to do with the author and did not effect my rating of the book. The app called Passion is where I started reading this book. Every 8 hours you can unlock the next chapter for free or you can purchase coins or a membership to read the entire book for "free". Since this book (this past is reflecting poorly on the author FYI) had over 140 chapters it I have the choice of purchasing enough coins to unlock the entire book (approximately at $70), pay for a monthly membership (at approximately $40 a month), or purchase the book outright on Amazon for $5. Since this book is so poorly written and the author is trying to sell the book without basic editing I 100% refuse to buy it. F*** you Park Kara. Invest in a basic spellchecker or ask someone to Beta Test your books in the future at the very least.
I may have finished this book is not for some issues with the reading App which has nothing to do with the author and did not effect my rating of the book. The app called Passion is where I started reading this book. Every 8 hours you can unlock the next chapter for free or you can purchase coins or a membership to read the entire book for "free". Since this book (this past is reflecting poorly on the author FYI) had over 140 chapters it I have the choice of purchasing enough coins to unlock the entire book (approximately at $70), pay for a monthly membership (at approximately $40 a month), or purchase the book outright on Amazon for $5. Since this book is so poorly written and the author is trying to sell the book without basic editing I 100% refuse to buy it. F*** you Park Kara. Invest in a basic spellchecker or ask someone to Beta Test your books in the future at the very least.
November 6, 2024
Ik geef op. Oh my fucking god. Dit leest als een dumpster fire in hell. De auteur heeft geen ENKELE spellingscontrole gedaan, namen van personages worden om de haverklap verwisselt met elkaar of zelfs met namen die helemaal niet in het verhaal voorkomen, grammatica suckt, vocab suckt, alles suckt oké. Het enige da kinda redeeming was en de reden waarom ik bleef lezen was dat het plot kind of interessant was. Als in: er zat potentieel in en ik hoopte dat dat potentieel gebruikt ging worden. I was wrong. Met elk interessant detail dat wordt toegevoegd komen er ook weer 500 plotholes en onlogische brol bij. Also pregnancy trope? Really? Van alle dingen die je kon doen met dit plot is da waar je naartoe gaat???? Also also ik weet dat dit verhaal wss at a certain point smut zou moeten hebben cuz that's what all this shit is about maar de momenten waarop 'horny' comments in dit verhaal worden gesmeten is zo raar en absoluut niet gepast of smaakvol (tot zo ver het smaakvol kan zijn, but you know what I mean). Like de standaard voor smut is al zooooo laag GIRL YOU LOWERED THE BAR BEYOND MY IMAGINATION. Alle personages zijn ook saaie afkooksels van gekende personages uit andere fictie verhalen. Lang verhaal kort: als ik -666 sterren kon geven then I would because this thing belongs in hell.
May 2, 2025
2.5 estrellas
Seré honesta, estaba jugando en mi celular, me salió un anuncio de esta historia, quise saber cómo terminaba y me la leí en 2 horas 🧍♀️
Al parecer hay 3 libros más de la serie, tal vez los lea. No es la mejor historia del mundo pero sí me dejó enganchada.
Como es típico de las historias que aparecen en anuncios, tiene un montón de faltas ortográficas, es súper cliché pero aún así me enganchó lo suficiente para querer saber qué pasaba, se podría decir que es la definición de "es tan malo que es bueno", recomendaría leerla solamente para salir de un bloqueo lector.
Seré honesta, estaba jugando en mi celular, me salió un anuncio de esta historia, quise saber cómo terminaba y me la leí en 2 horas 🧍♀️
Al parecer hay 3 libros más de la serie, tal vez los lea. No es la mejor historia del mundo pero sí me dejó enganchada.
Como es típico de las historias que aparecen en anuncios, tiene un montón de faltas ortográficas, es súper cliché pero aún así me enganchó lo suficiente para querer saber qué pasaba, se podría decir que es la definición de "es tan malo que es bueno", recomendaría leerla solamente para salir de un bloqueo lector.
June 15, 2025
I was scrolling through IG and came across it and thought “why not?” I knew it was going to be awful, but thought I might be in a good way? The book answered that question.
This had to be written by AI, or maybe one of those stories where multiple people write parts but they don’t get to see what the other people write. So many grammatical errors, name changes (one character had 3 different names I think), people saying “durhhhhh”, just awful writing overall.
I refuse to spend any money on part 2 which kills me bc I’m still dying to know what the resolution is.
This had to be written by AI, or maybe one of those stories where multiple people write parts but they don’t get to see what the other people write. So many grammatical errors, name changes (one character had 3 different names I think), people saying “durhhhhh”, just awful writing overall.
I refuse to spend any money on part 2 which kills me bc I’m still dying to know what the resolution is.
December 10, 2024
An alright story, but spelling and name changes throughout story (purchased on amazon) showed story needed another edit/peer review
October 19, 2025
I’m so disappointed in this story. There are errors throughout that make it difficult to read. The author changes names of the same people in the book so you have to guess who she is talking about. And I am pretty sure this is based off of a different story. I made it about half way through before I just couldn’t anymore
December 14, 2025
—3,75⭐
July 18, 2025
This book is very poorly written, but I ended up finishing it and started the second one.
It's a love /(mostly) hate relationship with me for books like this because if I like the plot at all, the completionist side of me kicks in despite the atrocious grammar, repetitive use of words and phrases, and constant stating the obvious via a characters internal dialogue rather than using the character's actions to show their personality and feelings. I do not need you to tell me that that character A is mistrusting of Character B 12 times. I got it. Just make character A act accordingly after you have said it the first time. The book obviously did not have an editor. The character's names are not even consistent throughout.
Beyond that, the lead MMC is a POS. I know he's going to eventually end up with the lead female character and I am just not going to be able to root for them as a couple because of their start. I can think of nothing that would change how much I want to rewrite this book myself to give her a third-chance mate. It's not really a thing in this genre, but it should be in this series.
I don't know how many more times I can read the word "immediately" used with incorrect sentence structure and I struggle to understand how a tattoo can be both under a woman's breast and over her heart. I guess her breasts are on her collar bone. Yet, here I am, trudging along in this series because I want to know what Lola's destiny is.
I am solely in this for the lore. Hopefully the plot doesn't turn out to be as disappointing as the writing style.
It's a love /(mostly) hate relationship with me for books like this because if I like the plot at all, the completionist side of me kicks in despite the atrocious grammar, repetitive use of words and phrases, and constant stating the obvious via a characters internal dialogue rather than using the character's actions to show their personality and feelings. I do not need you to tell me that that character A is mistrusting of Character B 12 times. I got it. Just make character A act accordingly after you have said it the first time. The book obviously did not have an editor. The character's names are not even consistent throughout.
Beyond that, the lead MMC is a POS. I know he's going to eventually end up with the lead female character and I am just not going to be able to root for them as a couple because of their start. I can think of nothing that would change how much I want to rewrite this book myself to give her a third-chance mate. It's not really a thing in this genre, but it should be in this series.
I don't know how many more times I can read the word "immediately" used with incorrect sentence structure and I struggle to understand how a tattoo can be both under a woman's breast and over her heart. I guess her breasts are on her collar bone. Yet, here I am, trudging along in this series because I want to know what Lola's destiny is.
I am solely in this for the lore. Hopefully the plot doesn't turn out to be as disappointing as the writing style.
September 29, 2024
Has Potential
This story has a lot of potential but needs a skilled editor. Names are mixed up with even the male and female protagonists names getting swapped between Adrian/Alexander and Lola’s name getting mixed up with her best friend Lyla. The writing sounds like it was written by someone quite young or with English not as a first language. There’s nothing wrong with that at all but is entirely why an editor is desperately needed. I often had to reread paragraphs as it would have multiple characters speaking without a break to know who is saying what which really messed with the flow and has you going “huh?”
I purchased the whole series and I’m keeping my fingers crossed that the writing has improved with each book that has been released. I really look forward to seeing how the story progresses but I also dread having to read and reread paragraphs and entire pages to follow along which character communication and poor phrasing such as “[…] tomorrow or the next tomorrow”.
This story has a lot of potential but needs a skilled editor. Names are mixed up with even the male and female protagonists names getting swapped between Adrian/Alexander and Lola’s name getting mixed up with her best friend Lyla. The writing sounds like it was written by someone quite young or with English not as a first language. There’s nothing wrong with that at all but is entirely why an editor is desperately needed. I often had to reread paragraphs as it would have multiple characters speaking without a break to know who is saying what which really messed with the flow and has you going “huh?”
I purchased the whole series and I’m keeping my fingers crossed that the writing has improved with each book that has been released. I really look forward to seeing how the story progresses but I also dread having to read and reread paragraphs and entire pages to follow along which character communication and poor phrasing such as “[…] tomorrow or the next tomorrow”.
October 2, 2024
OH 7 WOWs ~ Tissues definitely needed for this Cinderella story❤️🔥
Very early into the book you will need Kleenex while being drawn in to the harshness of her life. I could not stop reading until I finished the book. Lola drew enough courage to run for her life into another pack. You must read to find out what happened in the new pack after she is thrown in the dungeon. Way to go Park Kara. What a great love story.❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥
Very early into the book you will need Kleenex while being drawn in to the harshness of her life. I could not stop reading until I finished the book. Lola drew enough courage to run for her life into another pack. You must read to find out what happened in the new pack after she is thrown in the dungeon. Way to go Park Kara. What a great love story.❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥
May 14, 2025
I don't know where exactly I am in this series, I think there are 200 chapters in total and I'm on 67? Not even sure how much more of this trash I can take. There is clearly no editing whatsoever. The author just randomly changes character names DRASTICALLY out of nowhere, so you have no fucking clue who is who and what the fuck is happening. The fucked up spelling I can still get passed, but the logic I can't.
The book clearly states that Nathan only finds out that Lyla is his mate because she turns 18....Yet Adrian found his former "rogue mate" that killed his sister at 16? (he's 24 and keeps saying it happened 8 years ago) how??? also why the fuck was a 16 year old allowed to just run around and bring a rogue into a pack that his parents hated? What the fuck kind of Alpha and Luna were his parents exactly?? As a matter of fact, his father (Jayden) is the current Alpha King but this dude dead ass doesn't do shit for the pack. Adrian is not even the king yet and bro is running around doing everything?? I dunno wtf the author is on.
Let's not even get into Lola's rollercoaster. This chick doesn't know what the fuck she even wants from life. Her former mate is made to be this huge asshole- and don't get me wrong, he is...but Adrian does exactly the same shit to her but he gets away with it. He doesn't apologize, he swoops in when she's on heat, finally getting his shit together and she just laps it up. She also can't decide what the hell she actually wants from him either. She practically BEGS him to mark her, he refuses because he wants her to actually want it, not just because it will activate her powers. She makes this huge deal of having to activate her moon wolf bullshit, begging for info on how to do it ....then when she's told they must mark each other and he does his part...she won't mate and do her part??? girl??? what the fuck?
So far no sex between main characters, I think he rubbed her clit once or something when she was on heat and now pretty much walks around with a raging erection. idk why I'm even still reading this crap. Nothing makes sense.
Also!!! The Alpha and Luna from her former pack knew who she really is...so why didn't they keep her for their son? why did they demote her to Omega and abuse her? You'd think they'd use the Moon Wolf to protect their pack but apparently not.
Apparently none of these Alphas are shit. Nobody knows what the fuck they are doing and the Werewolf world is stuck relying on a confused and horny 18 year old girl that refuses to mate to save them.
Matter of fact, fuck the Moon Goddess too, she doesn't help shit either. All of these characters are fucked.
The book clearly states that Nathan only finds out that Lyla is his mate because she turns 18....Yet Adrian found his former "rogue mate" that killed his sister at 16? (he's 24 and keeps saying it happened 8 years ago) how??? also why the fuck was a 16 year old allowed to just run around and bring a rogue into a pack that his parents hated? What the fuck kind of Alpha and Luna were his parents exactly?? As a matter of fact, his father (Jayden) is the current Alpha King but this dude dead ass doesn't do shit for the pack. Adrian is not even the king yet and bro is running around doing everything?? I dunno wtf the author is on.
Let's not even get into Lola's rollercoaster. This chick doesn't know what the fuck she even wants from life. Her former mate is made to be this huge asshole- and don't get me wrong, he is...but Adrian does exactly the same shit to her but he gets away with it. He doesn't apologize, he swoops in when she's on heat, finally getting his shit together and she just laps it up. She also can't decide what the hell she actually wants from him either. She practically BEGS him to mark her, he refuses because he wants her to actually want it, not just because it will activate her powers. She makes this huge deal of having to activate her moon wolf bullshit, begging for info on how to do it ....then when she's told they must mark each other and he does his part...she won't mate and do her part??? girl??? what the fuck?
So far no sex between main characters, I think he rubbed her clit once or something when she was on heat and now pretty much walks around with a raging erection. idk why I'm even still reading this crap. Nothing makes sense.
Also!!! The Alpha and Luna from her former pack knew who she really is...so why didn't they keep her for their son? why did they demote her to Omega and abuse her? You'd think they'd use the Moon Wolf to protect their pack but apparently not.
Apparently none of these Alphas are shit. Nobody knows what the fuck they are doing and the Werewolf world is stuck relying on a confused and horny 18 year old girl that refuses to mate to save them.
Matter of fact, fuck the Moon Goddess too, she doesn't help shit either. All of these characters are fucked.
This entire review has been hidden because of spoilers.
January 10, 2025
Struggles to be readable
Spoilers ahead! I picked this book to read because I thought it had an interesting story. I don't normally read paranormal books, but the story sounded interesting, so I went ahead and bought it. I'm still trying to decide if it was money well spent. Structurally, it has numerous mistakes with spelling and grammar. Character names get switched around, Lola for Lyla. I think that English is not the author's first language. It should have had a good editing before it was published.
The pacing is slow. I kept waiting for some glimpse into the past events that led to Lola's circumstances. Why the secrecy about her parents' deaths or why she had to keep her wolf hidden. Why did her pack abuse her? And once she escapes to the new pack, it is nothing but trips to the mall and the ice cream parlor. Our hero of the story, Adrian, thinks she is a rogue wolf and wants nothing to do with her because of some event that happened 8 years ago involving a rouge wolf. (What makes a wolf go rouge to begin with?) The author spends numerous chapters on the back and forth exchange of will they or won't they.
Even with all that, I'm going to read the next book in the series. Just to see if any of my questions get answers. Having read some of the reviews, I'm not hopeful.
Spoilers ahead! I picked this book to read because I thought it had an interesting story. I don't normally read paranormal books, but the story sounded interesting, so I went ahead and bought it. I'm still trying to decide if it was money well spent. Structurally, it has numerous mistakes with spelling and grammar. Character names get switched around, Lola for Lyla. I think that English is not the author's first language. It should have had a good editing before it was published.
The pacing is slow. I kept waiting for some glimpse into the past events that led to Lola's circumstances. Why the secrecy about her parents' deaths or why she had to keep her wolf hidden. Why did her pack abuse her? And once she escapes to the new pack, it is nothing but trips to the mall and the ice cream parlor. Our hero of the story, Adrian, thinks she is a rogue wolf and wants nothing to do with her because of some event that happened 8 years ago involving a rouge wolf. (What makes a wolf go rouge to begin with?) The author spends numerous chapters on the back and forth exchange of will they or won't they.
Even with all that, I'm going to read the next book in the series. Just to see if any of my questions get answers. Having read some of the reviews, I'm not hopeful.
January 13, 2025
I’ve probably said all I needed to say along the way but hats off for a first novel. The pacing improved as the book went on, I would anticipate future novels becoming a bit more concise.
Adrian and Lola ended up a surprisingly good pair. I thought I would never get over Adrian’s behaviour, for a long time I kept going desperate for his redemption, which spoiler has no great moment, but the joy of an epic story read over a long time is I genuinely had gotten over it by the end and thus it didn’t taint the HEA as I had expected. There is nothing like being maltreated, rejected, imprisoned, rejected with a side of cheating, kidnapping, near death experiences and sacrifice to keep you reading.
As I’ve mentioned the lack of editing was super frustrating, if a book will be unedited or read before editing I would recommend giving characters very different names because sometimes it is obvious the wrong name has been put in but occasionally it changes the story and it will be a few paragraphs before the reader becomes aware it was the wrong name which is quite frustrating. New adult often comes with the territory of paranormal, even more so with Wolf shifters but this was very new adult if such a thing exists. There is a reason I avoid new adult, I find the drama and bickering all a bit much, I’m afraid these characters read like teenagers but mostly they are so I guess it fits
Adrian and Lola ended up a surprisingly good pair. I thought I would never get over Adrian’s behaviour, for a long time I kept going desperate for his redemption, which spoiler has no great moment, but the joy of an epic story read over a long time is I genuinely had gotten over it by the end and thus it didn’t taint the HEA as I had expected. There is nothing like being maltreated, rejected, imprisoned, rejected with a side of cheating, kidnapping, near death experiences and sacrifice to keep you reading.
As I’ve mentioned the lack of editing was super frustrating, if a book will be unedited or read before editing I would recommend giving characters very different names because sometimes it is obvious the wrong name has been put in but occasionally it changes the story and it will be a few paragraphs before the reader becomes aware it was the wrong name which is quite frustrating. New adult often comes with the territory of paranormal, even more so with Wolf shifters but this was very new adult if such a thing exists. There is a reason I avoid new adult, I find the drama and bickering all a bit much, I’m afraid these characters read like teenagers but mostly they are so I guess it fits
November 30, 2024
I wish I could give this book a 3.5. The quality of the story is a 4.0-4.5. It’s interesting, exciting, and heartwrenching. The characters draw the treader in. They are better developed than those I’ve seen in other shifter stories. However, the quality of the writing is more a 3.0 or lower. There are many, many spelling and grammar errors. Normally I wouldn’t care, but there are so many here that it gets in the way of the story. Also, the writer, or perhaps it’s the publisher’s editing team, doesn’t seem to notice that the names of the characters get switched around. For example, Lola’s and Lyla’s names are switched around. At one point the Lyla’s name is changed to Chelsea, which is not a character in this book. Aidan’s name is switched at one key part of the book to Alexander. The reader has to oversee this before being able to continue following the story.
So where am I here? I love the story, but really dislike the writing. If I could, I would send it back to the publisher and have them re-edit it.
So where am I here? I love the story, but really dislike the writing. If I could, I would send it back to the publisher and have them re-edit it.
April 19, 2025
I’m giving this one star because putting pen to paper is a feat in and of itself, but my God was this bad.
Like tons of others I got an ad on a puzzle game app and was bored enough to let curiosity get the best of me. Plus, as a genre I’d never explored before, this seemed like a harmless adventure, an interesting side quest. No shame in trying new things, right?
Not wrong, but certainly misguided. This was absolutely TERRIBLE at every level (grammar, characters, plot, pacing, etc.). I’m embarrassed to have started it, embarrassed to have risked my secure internet connection to read it, and embarrassed to have finished it. I almost wish I were busier this weekend so that I’d put it down and DNF’d it. My silver lining is that I will dive into reading with a tenacity that I haven’t had in years just to prove a level of taste and discernment that was so clearly absent in the decision to start and finish this “novel.” Maybe I’ll start by trying to understand this genre in quality and in Black so I can figure out what in the world compelled me to keep reading.
Like tons of others I got an ad on a puzzle game app and was bored enough to let curiosity get the best of me. Plus, as a genre I’d never explored before, this seemed like a harmless adventure, an interesting side quest. No shame in trying new things, right?
Not wrong, but certainly misguided. This was absolutely TERRIBLE at every level (grammar, characters, plot, pacing, etc.). I’m embarrassed to have started it, embarrassed to have risked my secure internet connection to read it, and embarrassed to have finished it. I almost wish I were busier this weekend so that I’d put it down and DNF’d it. My silver lining is that I will dive into reading with a tenacity that I haven’t had in years just to prove a level of taste and discernment that was so clearly absent in the decision to start and finish this “novel.” Maybe I’ll start by trying to understand this genre in quality and in Black so I can figure out what in the world compelled me to keep reading.
May 24, 2025
Good storyline, but horrible editing
I liked the storyline, which was why I kept reading it. The editing, or lack of it, is a different story. Character names kept getting mixed up; there were numerous misspellings and grammatical errors. I sometimes had to read a sentence two or three times to know what it should have been. The publisher is obviously a third-rate hack to publish the story in its condition. I’m glad I bought the Kindle version; I would not be happy if I had bought a physical book with all the errors.
The storyline is worth five stars, but the lack of editing is barely worth two stars. Since I can't give an overall rating of two and a half stars, I compromised with three stars, but that is being overly generous.
Writer, you need to do a major edit job and republish the story if you have any respect for the fans who muddled through your story and lack of editing!
I liked the storyline, which was why I kept reading it. The editing, or lack of it, is a different story. Character names kept getting mixed up; there were numerous misspellings and grammatical errors. I sometimes had to read a sentence two or three times to know what it should have been. The publisher is obviously a third-rate hack to publish the story in its condition. I’m glad I bought the Kindle version; I would not be happy if I had bought a physical book with all the errors.
The storyline is worth five stars, but the lack of editing is barely worth two stars. Since I can't give an overall rating of two and a half stars, I compromised with three stars, but that is being overly generous.
Writer, you need to do a major edit job and republish the story if you have any respect for the fans who muddled through your story and lack of editing!
December 17, 2025
I thought about giving it 2 stars for effort but then realized that we shouldn’t give extra stars just to placate people when they write shitty books.
It wasn’t even the content. (Though the content was also shitty.) It was the lack of editing. The mix up of names. (Calling Adrian “Alexander” or mixing up Lola and Lyla DURING LOLA’s POV CHAPTERS. Jace became Jake.) The tense switching. The details that were revealed, then “revealed” again a few chapters later. The showing and not telling. The god awful grammar, spelling, punctuation. At one point, an entire paragraph/ line simply said “LO P” and that was it.
I would say it read like a wattpad story, but it was arguably worse.
As for the story? The first mate was trash. The second mate (MMC) is also trash. He sees her hugging a childhood friend and gets violently angry, calls her a slut undeserving of love, then goes and fucks another girl. So unredeemable.
I’m not gonna bother with the next one. 🚮
It wasn’t even the content. (Though the content was also shitty.) It was the lack of editing. The mix up of names. (Calling Adrian “Alexander” or mixing up Lola and Lyla DURING LOLA’s POV CHAPTERS. Jace became Jake.) The tense switching. The details that were revealed, then “revealed” again a few chapters later. The showing and not telling. The god awful grammar, spelling, punctuation. At one point, an entire paragraph/ line simply said “LO P” and that was it.
I would say it read like a wattpad story, but it was arguably worse.
As for the story? The first mate was trash. The second mate (MMC) is also trash. He sees her hugging a childhood friend and gets violently angry, calls her a slut undeserving of love, then goes and fucks another girl. So unredeemable.
I’m not gonna bother with the next one. 🚮
May 12, 2025
I genuinely can't rate it higher than this bc it's really not a very good book, but I love it? Her mate is flat out abusive. Which one? Both of them. Adrien is *terrible* and I cheered out loud when she decided to focus on her own happiness instead.
I actually think I should rate it lower because the writing isn't very good as well-- and not because there's minimal editing and the author's first language isn't english. It's poorly written because everything just. happens. Regardless of logic. And there's hardly any description of Anything, they are floating in space for most of the book as far as description is concerned. Characters names will change randomly and every character except Lola is flat as cardboard.
However. I really did have fun reading it and I can't wait to continue the series and find out all about her mysterious moon wolf powers.
I actually think I should rate it lower because the writing isn't very good as well-- and not because there's minimal editing and the author's first language isn't english. It's poorly written because everything just. happens. Regardless of logic. And there's hardly any description of Anything, they are floating in space for most of the book as far as description is concerned. Characters names will change randomly and every character except Lola is flat as cardboard.
However. I really did have fun reading it and I can't wait to continue the series and find out all about her mysterious moon wolf powers.
June 3, 2025
looked interesting in the blurb, and I needed something to read when I didn't have my actual book. it was ok ish until she got to the new pack. then, like another reader said, it's extremely repetitive, and even the adults talk and act like their teenagers. young newly minted ones at that, so think silly 12-13 years old for EVERY SINGLE CHARACTER. the writing itself isn't great, and the lack of punctuation will have you rereading a lot to ascertain the actual meaning. I stopped at chapter 68 on one of those per chapter apps. it's not worth it. I tried because I hate DNF-ing a book. I may come back to it just because I pride myself on finishing every book I start, but I just can't right now. please, author, if you read these, know that punctuation is your friend and a varied cast is much more entertaining than a single-minded group of essentially the same person.
October 8, 2025
The story was getting good until Adrian gets a quick fix with Fay (knowing fully well that it would hurt FL) Proving he is just as bad as her old mate.
He also abandons her for 4 days in a clinic because reasons and punched dudes for no reason and he didn't even apologize and continuously blames his Wolf Daxon.
Also the side characters have no depth, as much as I love the drama, I'm getting sick of Adrian treating her like trash. And she's too easy on him given the horrible things he's done because of his pride and stubbornness.
Are we forgetting the age gap between Nathan and Lyla🤮 Lyla pouted her way into his heart and still treats him like a second class boyfriend.
Also the Chelsea, Alexander, Dalia names are so confusing, I almost thought they had double identities but it turns out author has trash inconsistency.
He also abandons her for 4 days in a clinic because reasons and punched dudes for no reason and he didn't even apologize and continuously blames his Wolf Daxon.
Also the side characters have no depth, as much as I love the drama, I'm getting sick of Adrian treating her like trash. And she's too easy on him given the horrible things he's done because of his pride and stubbornness.
Are we forgetting the age gap between Nathan and Lyla🤮 Lyla pouted her way into his heart and still treats him like a second class boyfriend.
Also the Chelsea, Alexander, Dalia names are so confusing, I almost thought they had double identities but it turns out author has trash inconsistency.
November 27, 2025
I don’t like the ML AT ALL, kind of rooting for his downfall (even though I know it won’t happen). Like I know these kinds of books are full of toxic behavior, but holy shit, some of it’s just irredeemable. Going to keep reading because the MC is really interesting and I want something good to happen to her at least once in her sad little life.
The grammatical stuff doesn’t bother me much, as I can correct most of it in my head as I’m reading, but why tf do the names change randomly. Like Lyla and Lola getting switched all the time…. Okay, but randomly calling Lyla “Chelsea” And “Tracey” for several pages was wild and it seems to be a recurring thing. I also briefly thought I was losing it when the book kept calling Rogues Rouges. The visits to Selene are really pointless and underutilized as well.
The grammatical stuff doesn’t bother me much, as I can correct most of it in my head as I’m reading, but why tf do the names change randomly. Like Lyla and Lola getting switched all the time…. Okay, but randomly calling Lyla “Chelsea” And “Tracey” for several pages was wild and it seems to be a recurring thing. I also briefly thought I was losing it when the book kept calling Rogues Rouges. The visits to Selene are really pointless and underutilized as well.
October 12, 2024
Although there were a lot of grammatical errors, and some plot inconsistencies, the story was so good that I thought they were forgivable…until I got to chapter 25 when the MMC did something unforgivable. I read 9 more chapters hoping to find something to redeem him, but nada. I cannot bring myself to finish the story. I am not sure if I am more disappointed in the MMC or the fact that I won’t be finishing it.
IF, and that’s a big IF, the MMC was a bad boy, MAYBE I could forgive him, but he was NOT portrayed as a bad boy. I loved him and his desire to find his mate from the first moment we met him, until chapter 25. And I legit felt like crying because I felt so let down. (I like stories that bring me to tears but not when a main love interest does something unforgivable.)
IF, and that’s a big IF, the MMC was a bad boy, MAYBE I could forgive him, but he was NOT portrayed as a bad boy. I loved him and his desire to find his mate from the first moment we met him, until chapter 25. And I legit felt like crying because I felt so let down. (I like stories that bring me to tears but not when a main love interest does something unforgivable.)
December 18, 2024
Good story, desperately needs an editor
So the storyline is actually good. I'm not normally a fan of these kinds of books but this one is actually quite good. However, there is a clear and desperate need for an editor. I'm not an editor by any means but even I could happily go through this book and correct mistakes and plot errors. At some point in this book, it comes out to her new pack she had a previous mate but then two chapters later, two of the four people that knew she had a previous mate, suddenly didn't know and it was new information again. This is a good book but I can't help but get the feeling that the authors original language isn't English. Still a good read nonetheless if you can skip over the obvious mistakes
So the storyline is actually good. I'm not normally a fan of these kinds of books but this one is actually quite good. However, there is a clear and desperate need for an editor. I'm not an editor by any means but even I could happily go through this book and correct mistakes and plot errors. At some point in this book, it comes out to her new pack she had a previous mate but then two chapters later, two of the four people that knew she had a previous mate, suddenly didn't know and it was new information again. This is a good book but I can't help but get the feeling that the authors original language isn't English. Still a good read nonetheless if you can skip over the obvious mistakes
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