Disappointed but not surprised.
I don't usually read romantasy but the concept seemed really interesting I made an exception.
I read this for the cool premise:
Hell as a corporate company and the forbidden stealing of souls
....but barely made it to the end.
I slapped this book against my forehead out of frustration too many times to count.
The characters are shallow and under-baked from the same dough used by most other YA authors: 2 parts horny, 2 parts "misunderstood", 1 part reckless. But devoid of filling, the inner goals, wants flaws and ambitions that makes a person real.
I PRAY for the day "mysterious" hot and cold, predatory interactions are no longer heralded as the quintessential love story.🙄
the plot:
An angsty and fiery girl (Jenny) makes endless stupid and unsafe decisions to follow a confident "handsome" guy (sound familiar?) claiming to be a demon (Luc) into hell to reclaim her soul that was stolen from her.
> The imagery is cool but the writing is underdeveloped at times. Told from 3rd person POV but worded strangely (including clunky teenage lingo) like it was written by the 16 year old FMC herself - numerous examples below this review
> This is the authors first published novel so she has time to grow and improve and I did LOVE the ideas of the dark world of All Hell that she tried to create.
>I felt her world building was solid and original but the characters were stereotypical and one dimensional. It would have been better to focus on realistic revealing dialogue and conceptualised characters with real goals/direction instead of:
A forced, angsty teen love story between two trope-ridden strangers to conform to the wattpad-esque, problematic romance prevalent in most fantasy fiction published nowadays.
* also I would like to give credit to the brief mentions of 2 gay couples (side characters) in the book and non-binary Ferry creature. It would have been nice to see some more diversity within the main characters though.
EXAMPLES FROM THE BOOK
WRITING THAT FELT WEIRD TO ME:
" she marched smack-bang, nose-first, glasses-ouch into the sternum of a demon."
"this wasn't a LARPing kind of party."
"She was leaving. Not running away, exactly, because where would she be running from, but she was leaving this city"
~okay? We get it, she's leaving.
" stop calling me that or I will gut you, you phallic object"
~ Who says that?
" She held her hand out for Lucs credit card, which was black, obviously."
~ Why is this obvious? Jenny does realize credit cards come in black for normal people too right?
"Her phone buzzed in her pocket. She pulled it out and stared in surprise. Vee. Well, duh."
~ I guess the author did well to really voice the "teenager attitude" of her FMC but I rolled my eyes every time, the snarkiness made me want to just skip to other chapters with different character POVs.
"The ferrier stood at the back of the boat, overlooking the salmagundi of humanity seated on the wooden benches."
~Human salad. That's what this description evoked: A caesar of lettuce people.
THE CHARACTERS:
👉LUC: A.k.a Lucifer, the "bad boy", cocky, troubled, sulky/broody, bad tempered (nasty to knight in shining armour in a blink of an eye), DADDY ISSUES
"He switched the full beam of his pleasure on her and next time he spoke his voice dropped lower, intimate"
~NOT 'sparks fly' material given just before this he had grabbed Jenny by the wrist to restrain her and she hit him on the side of the head trying to get away.
"You've got meat in your teeth' Luc told the attendant calmly, masking the smile that wanted to emerge as she frantically tried to pick it out with one pointed foreclaw. Luc allowed himself that victory"
~Victory?
Seriously how old is he?
Luc's actions are reminiscent of a pubescent boy in class "accidentally" dropping pens and asking for girls to pick them up to get a sense of power or scrap of attention.
" Jenny couldnt help shooting a grin at him then, and he returned it, kicking her gently under the table until she giggled."
~ My case in point.🤮
And readers are supposed to feel bad for him because of his father's disappointment in him which he unrealisticly and weirdly states out loud at one point to his face,
" you know I've always considered you a disappointment, don't you?"
👉JENNY: The FMC, angsty, impulsive, judgemental, terrible taste in friends, trustworthy bordering on naive, MOMMY ISSUES
" Apparently all it does (not having a soul) is make one tenacious....and annoying"
~ The author knowing Jenny is an annoying MC but making her not having a soul as the reason feels like lazy writing.
" Directionless and angst ridden with a chip the size of black burn on her shoulder"
~Yep. the author seems to enjoy making a point of knowing how angsty, aimless and stereotypically teenager she is for the readers.
"She thinks she's unlovable"
~Classic. The only kind of inner turmoil or fear a young white woman can have.
"Maybe she'd have had more friends, invitations to sleepovers and shopping trips, instead of spending so long in her room reading Choose Your Own Adventure books"
~In case you haven't noticed, she's weird. She's a weirdo. She doesn't fit in. (sigh)
"if he was offering her drugs she might even apologize for hitting him"
~?????
Girly has 0 survival instincts.
"he wore a suit that reminded Jenny of guns and armoured vehicles."
~Huh? what? is it made of kevlar??
" None of the demons moved or spoke; they just stood there, an endless sea of horror.
An army, her brain unhelpfully offered up."
~Is the author intentionally writing Jenny to sound not smart?
"I (Jenny) sleep on your sofa and everything I own fits in a bin bag at one end of it.
Forgive me if that doesn't feel like a stable home environment."
"Auntie vee was letting Jenny stay at her house for free. It shouldn't be a surprise that she was curious about The Fight".
~Vee is letting her niece (Jenny) crash on the only place she has to offer (the couch) in an already packed house with 3 younger kids and a new partner because Jenny had a "The Fight" with her mum and fled from home. Auntie vee was villanised for questioning her dangerously stupid behavior and simply wanting to know what happened in the dramatically named"The Fight".
~ Jenny is dripping with the "I'm so misunderstood and I hate my family" trope seriously? No nuance whatsoever?