I would like to arrest this author for crimes against literature, fashion, history and linguistics, including but not limited to the following:
1. Using the æ ligature on the word “fae”
2. Front-loading the book with backstory and then cutting away to the current plot instead of beginning where the story actually begins
3. A grammatical error in the very first sentence of Chapter One
4. Using “stay” as a singular noun when referring to a pair of stays
5. Thinking that medieval gowns can be commissioned in the morning and completed by that evening
6. Men wearing jerkins without shirts underneath
7. Thinking that garters are singular and optional in a world without elastic
8. Reinventing running water for medieval settings just because
9. A Queen of the realm having nothing on the schedule for her first full day as queen, to the point that her spouse has to hand her off to random courtiers to babysit her so she doesn’t get in trouble
10. Forgetting when the FMC had last seen her parents, making for an odd reunion where the parents act like they had not seen her since before they found out she was chosen even though they definitely have, and the emperor invites them to stay at the palace as though they hadn’t already stayed there the night before
The FMC is decidedly TSTL; her plan to assassinate her Emperor did not involve learning the layout of the palace nor having foreknowledge of the man’s appearance nor planning ahead to circumvent the man’s vampiric strength and speed by some means. She tried to stab him, he took the knife away easily, and there’s no plan B, so she starts obnoxiously insulting him, calling him a despot, and then running around trying to escape without knowing where to go, making herself look like an utter fool.
Even more foolish is that her entire raison d’être is avenging her brother, whom the MMC did not kill, and he could’ve told her that on Day One if she had just said something, but she refused to. Communication? Not in my romance novel!
Nevertheless, the “touch her and die” energy is strong with this MMC, even though FMC literally wants him dead. He threatens people way too much to be taken seriously; I mean, why do you have to tell your loyal palace guards TWICE not to lay hands on your queen?!
The “jealous witch who wants the MMC for herself” stock character is over-the-top psychotic and her betrayal could not have been less surprising.
Also, more proof authors cannot do math: One of the kingdoms in the realm is ruled by the MMC’s great-nephew by his late elder brother. We meet him and his two Fae sons a couple times in the novel. A joke is made that they have “forgotten” exactly how many “greats” implying many generations between the 1100 year old vampire/fae MMC and his late brother. However, in the epilogue it’s casually mentioned that one of the king’s sons is eighty and therefore of an age to settle down—I take this to mean his human-age equivalent would be 20-30, which means the fae’s expected lifespan must be around 300 years, so the MMC’s extended vampiric life still amounts to less than 4 normal fae lifespans. MMC’s brother, then his nephew, then his first great-nephew make three generations, spanning probably 600 years of time, and then the king is already an adult with grown children of age 80, so that’s at least another 160 years accounted for. There couldn’t have been that many more generations in the other 340 years. MMC is probably his 3x great-uncle or 4x, tops.