I really did not like this book. Every time I was reading it I wanted to stop and write notes so that I could do a full review about why I disliked the book so much. The story, although badly done, was not compelling enough for me to actually take the time to write notes on why I disliked it so much.
I will say that I paid .99 and I thought I was significantly over charged for what this book gave back.
Some of the major annoyances with the story were
1. The cast was too big and too full of unimportant characters.
2. The long, drawn-out narrative
3. The paint-by-number fantasy aspect
4. The ineptitude of the Abby.
5. How overall unlikable the story/characters were.
Some stories thrive with a large cast. This series did not. There were too many characters that were either unimportant, useless or should have been introduced in another book to make this one flow better.
The entire 5 islands priesthood was just too much and convoluted as an example. The gardener, and the extra races. They were not given enough space to be important in this book so they just diluted the story.
This story was incredibly slow, even with fights and 'adventure' at every turn it was all slow. It offered nothing to the overall story and took away the interest in reading another word but I have already picked my DNF for this year, so I kept trudging.
There is, fortunately, an overall story but it got lost in so much BS that I couldn't care less what the actual plot was I just wanted it done.
I think the story started off with a good, strong idea but the author had a checklist of what he thought was necessary for a fantasy book and he made sure that it was cookie cluttered it into the story.
Deadly monsters [check]
many races [check]
Religion [check]
horses [check]
monkdom [check]
warring kingdoms [check]
rape scenes [check]
food scenes [check]
magic [check]
easily fixed 'character flaws' [check]
and so on. None of it felt organic to the story, it just felt like so much dead weight.
The monks that were supposed to be protecting the Dragon Sphere seemed to be made up of the stupidest people in all of the kingdoms.
They decide to have their sacred items watched over by 2 monks. Not 2 per day, 2. So that the one that was supposed to fight off intruders would always be exhausted and neither of them would have anyone to cover them if they got sick. That made no sense, none. No one can be at their best with only 3 hours of sleep a day. Also, what about if one of them has a heart attack or an allergic reaction to something and dies suddenly if they don't have replacements? Why would they leave their most sacred treasures in the hands of teenagers?
When they chose Donovan for their musician they must have just chosen someone walking by rather than someone that was raised by them and that they monitored the training of because Donovan could not have been a child by the time he arrive at the Abby, let alone been chosen.
These monks also didn't take notice of anything happening inside their Abby. Calderon had a sleeping disorder and fell asleep at inopportune times, how did no monk notice that? How?
Velkyn, maybe he was sly enough not to get caught, but as a young man with no private time or space, that would not have been likely if the monks gave one iota of their attention to those in their walls.
All of the characters were badly written and hard to get to know any like, even their way of speaking was grating, but the three main characters were the worst kind of people.
All three of them were supposed to be intent on taking care of the sphere and none of the three of them gave a damn, they were just bad people.
Velkyn knew his goal in life was to be the protector but he kept leading his woman on, a woman I might add that had no use to the story other than to be a 'flaw' to the monk and to get brutally raped to give Velkyn a reason to stupidly abandon everything, even though he wasn't willing to abandon it for her while she was alive.
I mean when Nydel was dying after being raped Velkyn tells Caulderon not to tell Donovan because he'll be kicked out of the Abby and then he fell asleep while he was supposed to be watching over her.
Then there is Olric, the big bad orc that comes back weaker than a baby that anyone anywhere can kill, even someone that supposedly abhors violence?
I just can't even get into words how unlikeable any and all of these characters were.