DNF at 60%
The problem in this book is 100% the execution. The setting and world are super interesting and there's a couple of characters I like but my god this book was so hard to read because of how much it jumps from one thing to another thing a month later with no room for anyone to breathe, to explore any of the lore or character arcs or relationships. Things just happen so fast and then you're told in a paragraph or page at most all the things that happen in-between that really are crucial elements to the story, like y'know… the training for these super serious trials. There is around 20 pages between her first lesson and her arriving at her first trial.. TWENTY PAGES. That's all. Imagine Katniss goes from meeting Haymitch for the first time to the start of the games in twenty pages. For reference it's around 130 pages in the Hunger Games. Honestly the best way to explain this properly is to just go beat by beat where these things happen, I'll try and be somewhat vague, this will be long but there are many points where there were ways to improve and I wanted to express those.
The first bit is fine, Kellan and her adoptive father Edgar must travel to the big city to attend a maker convention, makers are people who use magical crafting to make items there's different types but they are tinkers and use runes and metals to make cool mechanical marvels. This magic system? Super cool. It's also worth noting that Kellan is a nameless, a descendent of a traitor who as punishment for the traitors crime gets their name taken away, oh and it's technically illegal for a nameless to do any making, again cool idea, class divides, love that. Whilst at the convention she has to steal a prototype prosthetic from Madame Mesny, a famous maker, to try and craft a new one for Edgar as he is getting sick. Cool I love heists. But after a workshop where they meet Mesny and Mesny realises Kellan's talents she asks Kellan to be her apprentice, the writing really begins to fall apart.
So Kellan gets taken by her new buddy Lou to Mesny's house, Mesny offers Lou to come to breakfast the morning after tomorrow, sounds lovely. Kellan admires her new room and we cut to the next morning where she's running late for her first lesson with Mesny, she manages to find her way and we get the only bit of proper making training Mesny will do with her apprentice that I saw. During this time Mesny stresses that the competition to become an official maker will be cutthroat and brutal and to not trust the other contestants as they will lie, chest and steal and stomp on her without a second thought, sounds brutal, remember this for later. During this time they are interrupted by important political people for important political subplot teasing, during which it is very clear that the upper echelon do NOT approve of a nameless girl being given a chance to be an assistant and compete.
And now we fast forward a few days to Kellan having a dress fitting and writing to Edgar. Oh wait, you mean you wanted to see that breakfast with Lou? Sorry, out of luck. It would have been great to see another lower class person at a fancy meal with Kellan, maybe Kellan tries to guide Lou subtly from the bits she's learned so far about what cutlery to use. Maybe Lou is unapologetically ignorant and herself and that gives Lou the confidence to do the same and makes her feel reassured, the girls could bind, we could see Mesny interact with Lou and learn more about Lou's background... But alas it's not even mentioned in passing and Lou is s fairly central character so it's extra odd. Even more baffling is what happens next.
After half a page about how she misses Edgar we fast forward again and we're driving to a secret location on Mesny's orders. We arrive and Kellan gives the password we're told Mesny gave her. And bam, we're at the first trial.
WHAT DO YOU MEAN WE'RE AT THE FIRST TRIAL???? We've had so little time for Kellan to prepare or watch her adjust to her crazy new life. We have had around 20 pages between when she was running late to her first lesson to her arriving at her first trial...That's IT There was literally the lesson/political intrigue chapter, ONE paragraph about a dress fitting and her writing to Edgar and we're off to the first trial, it's SO rushed it's insane. Again... In Hunger Games there is 130ish pages in between Katniss becoming the tribute and the start of the games as a point of reference.
Okay so the first trial, each of the contestants make a pitch for why they should be allowed to compete to the council judges. And everything is fine until we get to Kellan and the council are disgusted because it's unheard of for a nameless to compete, especially because it's actually illegal for them to do any making. But luckily one of the judges Atlas, Kellan's bland af love interest stands up for her and Mesny's reputation is enough to win Kellan a place. And now the first trial begins and Kellan gets knocked over by the running contestants, losing her cutting tool in the process, but luckily someone is nice enough to lend her one which is weird given we were told everyone would be cutthroat but don't worry there's a payoff. She then runs off immediately to the copper source and makes her contraption.. no literally that's all. No dilemma about what to do, the only issue she has is at one point her cutter messes up and IMMEDIATLY someone is there to help her and it's fine, again, cutthroat competition here. That's it. That's the super hardcore difficult trial task done. We are then told that whilst she went for the copper, everyone else has been fighting over the gold, would've been nice to y'know see that rather than just be told it happened. It is revealed the cutter was sabotaged which.. Ok fine but so what? It literally poses no problem to her anyway so what was the point.
Let's propose an alternate trial, Kellan's cutter gets taken by this saboteur, she is now without one, what on earth is she going to do? Well, earlier it was established Kellan's make that impressed Mesny was done without a cutter, it's possible but very hard and less elegant than using a cutter, but all these privileged contestants wouldn't know that because they have always had every material they've ever needed. Kellan's strength (as Mesny points out later) is in thinking on her feet and improvising with less because of her poorer upbringing. So Kellan has a plan but will it be good enough to win against these guys? Who knows. And where does she go first for materials? She feels so panicked and overwhelmed she figures to just follow the others to the river, sees them all fighting over the gold and feels like she doesn't stand a chance. But then she spots the copper source in the mountains. Perfect, she can work with copper and no one else has noticed it because they're all worried about the fancy gold, again emphasising that rich vs poor divide. But the mountains are far away, will she have time to get all the way up there and make something without a cutter? Only one way to find out. See how there's actual stakes, tension, commentary on the class divide? That's what we should have had. Now to be fair the time running out thing is mentioned in a throwaway line in the original but it really means nothing because Kellan easily finishes in time so it really means nothing.
But now back to the original. Kellan finishes her make but disaster strikes leaving the contestants to run for their lives. I won't go into details on this bit, it's fine and a much needed dose of action.
We're gonna fast forward a bit to the preparations for the second of these very serious very intense trials. Mesny is apparently only making Kellan work every other day because she feels bad that bad stuff happened in the first trial... I'm sorry what? Mesny… who's reputation has been staked on this illegal maker is like "Oh it's okay honey just take it easy".
Turns out the next trial is one part make one part fancy ball, so now Kellan must learn how to dance. But oh no she's so bad we must ask Atlas to help her. Yes... That Atlas... The judge. So a judge is helping TRAIN her?? What?? That's not favouritism at all. This isn't mentioned or explained at all during the training bit why this is allowed or bringing up that it's favouritism. Until of course we get to the ball where he goes to talk to her and she's like "shouldn't you be impartial" WHERE WAS THIS QUESTION WHEN HE WAS TRAINING YOU?
Now during the preparation for the trial she gets to plan and practice her make until it's perfect, her choice is metal dancers that will spin around the room. Now during the prep for this ultra ceompetitive, cutthroat contest, one of her dancers "chases a delivery boy out of the houses with it's waltzing" or some such which is presented as cute and funny but all I'm thinking is.. Hang on what do you mean? Are you just letting random people see what you're planning for this trial? WHY?? Surely you should try and keep that shit secret? You know.. in case someone can use that information to sabotage you.... Sure enough... Someone uses that information to sabotage her.
Oh and the romance is also trying to romance during this time but I felt nothing.
Suffice to say I was incredibly frustrated with the pacing and the inconsistency in the seriousness of the trial and I just couldn't anymore.