JUICEBOXERS can charitably be described as more journalism than fiction. Less charitably it might be called thinly veiled autobiography. Neither description really seems accurate since it is probably an equal measure of both.
Starting with the positives, the book is competently written, in swift moving prose that is obviously drawn from either vivid memories or detailed notes, very likely both. As an Alberta based Army reservist myself, the pop culture references all ring true and the behaviors exhibited by the characters are authentic, and often familiar, though I would hasten to point out I have no operational experience beyond a weekend in the 2013 floods nor have I ever been an infantryman myself despite being in and around them for decades. The writing is honest and raw without even the thinnest veneer of glorification. Hertwig is very good at setting scenes, building atmosphere, and giving detailed descriptions of even the simplest people, places and things in a convincing manner. And in places calling for chaos, he conveys that as effectively as a Sam Peckinpah movie, giving just enough information to keep the reader grounded while effectively conveying confusion, whether the troops are waiting for the word, or in the middle of a firefight. The strongest part of the book is probably where the last 90 pages begin and we see the survivors deal, or not, with their war experiences. Hertwig isn't afraid to dig into deeper emotions and motivations, though the characters themselves are rather shallow people who betray no real deep desires beyond basic survival - and that includes the third of the book that takes place before they even get to Afghanistan.
And therein lies why I had a hard time enjoying the book which from a structural literary standpoint is, to put it mildly, a mess. The main issue is that it is never clear who the book is about. Most of the story is told from the point of view of a young soldier named Plinko, and yet Plinko is so passive and unable to alter the trajectory of the story it is impossible to believe he is the hero. There are jarring point of view changes, such as a long conversation by two unidentified female soldiers Krug eavedrops on that has no relevance to anything else in the story. Hertwig would have been better to just stick with a single POV because the infrequent changes do nothing to build tension or create a coherent narrative.
And even in the sections in which Plinko is the focus, which make up the majority of the book, he has no agency. He moans about his parents not coming to his military events (I can relate, to be honest, and these feelings did have an emotional impact on me as I read them), but he never confronts them (I can relate to that too). Worse, when it is time to help his friend Abdi who is being harrassed by other members of the platoon, he balks for no apparent reason and the conflict is left to others to resolve with Plinko as a mere onlooker. Is this his story, or isn't it? Plinko is of the same stripe as Herman Wouk's Lieutenant Keefer - a spineless, literary onlooker whose lack of moral courage consigns his friends to suffering. At the end of the Caine Mutiny, Keefer gets his comeuppance with a memorable glass of champagne and a public mea culpa. Nothing about Plinko's story comes close to climax or resolution.
I am very aware this passiveness bordering on nihilism, and lack of resolution, may well be the point of the book, but with your main character unwilling to overcome adversity, it can't be called a story and by p.228, when we see Plinko go on HLTA and not even be able to talk to a fellow Canadian, I was starting to think that nothing about any of the characters was going to change and the book was really just a loose collection of vignettes. A few pages later Plinko is crying alone in the rain, and yet with what would seem to be a climax of sorts, the kind of revelation to kick him in the pants and take charge of the story and his life, it too comes to nothing and he limps through the rest of the story listlessly.
Those characters that do have agency are aggressively unlikeable, or to use Roger Ebert's description of Battlefield Earth, "unpleasant in a hostile way." Krug, the soldier the younger characters look up to, has no redeeming qualities whatsoever, and is painted as a lost soul to whom the other characters gravitate, precisely because they are so weak and lost themselves. Abdi should have been an exception, and it's never made clear why he continues to hang around losers like Krug, Plinko or Walsh. The gun-crazy Krug meets a kindred spirit in Apfel and they unsubtly plan to become white supremacist revolutionaries. Sort of.
Which brings us to the dialogue. As a one time aspiring novelist myself, JUICEBOXERS reminded me of a vivid passage in Jack Bickham's "38 Most Common Fiction Writing Mistakes." Bickham notes:
"Quite a few (writers I've dealt with) have been military veterans. Many of these guys wanted to write fiction based on their (military service). Inevitably, they brought me copy studded with (profanity) like that which is so prevalent in the military....I have seldom convinced them that dirty talk often looks dirtier on the page than it actually is. I have tried to convince them that such (language)...should be saved for those story situations where a strong word is really needed to convey the emotion. But I haven't convinced many of that viewpoint, either."
I can only agree with Bickham. While I'm no shrinking violet and have often been around worse language than Hertwig uses, I think he is very far off the mark by peppering the entire text with barrack-room crudities. As Bickham discusses, yes, soldiers really talk like that. Unfortunately, it doesn't translate to the page well, and only makes the characters more unlikeable and unrelatable, at the same time as making it that much harder to really ramp up the emotion by a well-chosen epithet when the worst words in our dictionary are splattered across every page. It loses its impact by the end of the first chapter.
And besides the swearing, the dialogue is often stilted and obviously being used to dump information unsubtly on the reader. Krug and Apfel's over the top "right wing whacko" conversations seem like left wing parody. And like the other vignettes, jump out of thin air to lead absolutely nowhere as far as the story goes.
The text is incompletely edited with a few bloopers like Cyprus being spelled correctly in one sentence on p. 299, and incorrectly as Cypress in the next sentence. There are a couple other examples, rare enough not to be a big deal but common enough to be noticable and weaken the effectiveness of some of the prose. The most major gaffe occurs on page 118, where a typographical error that resulted in "women" instead of "woman" appreciably changes the complexion of a sexual encounter until one sorts out the mess from context.
It is very likely I was not the target audience of the book. For Afghanistan veterans, or young men who grew up on the wrong side of the tracks in Edmonton, it may well be a great a vehicle for reminiscences (though one wonders how fond they could possibly be). The pop references - Twix Bars and trips to Boston Pizza - are a treat for this reader unused to seeing Canadianisms splashed so liberally across the pages. But like the characters, they are thinly drawn, never explained, and I think ensure that the book will not stand the test of time. It would be as if I had written a novel thirty years ago and referenced Woolco and the Red Grille, Dollar-Forty-Nine Day or the Calgary Cowboys pro hockey team. Collective memory of these touchstones fade until they are just meaningless names on a page in the absence of explanatory or contextual prose.
Even the last 90 pages, which promised to paint a meaningful picture of the experience of veterans and the context into which society as a whole placed the war, was derailed by Plinko's inability to do a single impactful thing. None of the threads of the story seem to end up anywhere with the exception of one closeted character who turns up - surprise, surprise - with a same sex spouse and an adopted child, apparently the only character to find peace and happiness - coincidentally the character we learned the least about in the first three-quarters of the book.
Despite all these frustrations, Hertwig can be proud of his achievement - he is one of a very small number of writers to publish a novel about the Canadian experience in the War in Afghanistan. And for a first time novelist, he does quite a few things well. I would suggest he invest in Bickham's book about fiction writing mistakes and perhaps get involved in some of the veteran's writing groups that are becoming popular, or even invest in some fiction writing lessons (when I did mine through the Alexandra Writer's Society in Calgary, I loved it, learning at the hands of authors like Dwayne Clayden but mostly just bouncing ideas and support off fellow writers). The author page in JUICEBOXERS says this is Hertwig's "first novel" implying there are more to come from him. One certainly hopes so.