Unfortunately this missed the mark for me. Many thanks to NetGalley for allowing me to read this and write an honest review. [Spoilers below!]
This had a lot of promise - the concept of a dark academia style fantasy set in a Irish legal graduate scheme was pretty novel, and I saw quite a few good reviews, so thought I would go ahead with this.
I'll summarise a few of my thoughts below, but overall I thought this was poorly written, one-dimensional, with the plot and characters relying on archetypes of the 'romantasy' genre, rather than building anything genuine for itself.
1. Going to strike this one off early, but there are quite a few spelling and grammar mistakes that are just difficult to get past (once is forgivable, but over 3, 4, 5 times and it becomes a problem).
2. Very odd pacing. Most of the time this seemed to be going at a breakneck speed with every single trope imaginable being shoved in - a set of initiation rituals where the apprentices have to complete "tasks" (Hunger Games/Goblet of Fire/Divergent), mystery plot of a missing cousin, starting a legal graduate scheme, induction into a magic legal cult (yeah I know). Then, weirdly, amongst the madness, there are whole paragraphs that drag on as we are told again and again and again about how upset our central protagonist is without much action to back it up. Everything seems to be building to a massive climax, but the moment it actually gets interesting and our characters face legitimate conflict (the missing cousin has a spell over her meaning she forgets who everyone is), the spell is undone in, I kid you not, 4 sentences, and then it's all sunshine and roses and we're onto the next trope. The big "reveal" at the end was extremely underwhelming and in a Scooby Doo-esque removal of masks (yes, masks are actually taken off), the villains seem to have no other real motivation than some absurd child-revenge-career climbing nonsense.
2. Excuse making. I completely get that this genre of fiction may not be for me, but I started losing my patience when some of sentences the characters utter make it so blatant that the author knows the shortcomings of her work. FIX THEM! When you literally write your characters dialogue that tries to redeem your writing choices, maybe that's the point you try to rework a chapter. I'm talking about quotes like "is everyone in Ireland related" to explain away the EXTREMELY convenient fact that every single character you meet in the book will somehow wind up at the denouement (abusive divorced father, landlady/grandma etc), or "it's hard to believe we're only 2 weeks into our apprenticeship" - yes, it is, and you saying that is only furthering my annoyance because you're clearly aware that the pacing of the book is insane. Besides that, all the plot points are just way too convenient - there's always an object/person/revelation that is introduced before the characters experience any sort of conflict or confusion, making the text predictable but also cluttered as a problem is introduced and resolved within the space of a sentence.
3. Flat, one-dimensional characters - every single character in this book seems to have been given traits and emotions like a label slapped onto them. Instead of inferring the kind of people they are from their actions, there is a distinct lack of any real personality, replaced by overwrought phrases like, "my tattered soul" - ok? and? tell us a bit more? The author repeats the same metaphors over and over to describe how ruined the main character is, but it never goes beyond the surface of those words. In the same vein, the villains are nasty and mean, but only because we're told so - it almost feels like the characters react before anything has even happened - e.g. a legal partner is "vitriolic" but other than one sentence of him being slightly rude, there is nothing to back up SUCH a strong generalisation which then becomes a massive plot point without which the story doesn't work.
I think the author had certain plot points she wanted to aim for and knows which emotions she needs to make them happen (e.g. love interest feels betrayed, main character feels upset) - instead of finding ways to get to the plot points organically, the characters just react very bizarrely. Someone will say something pretty inoffensive and our main character will storm out because, of course, that needs to happen so she can realise she needs to hide in the boot of someone's car (it's a very A to B kind of writing).
4. General cringe. There is a whole chapter when the 2 main male characters have a hex put on them meaning they get period cramps. The two female characters spend the rest of the chapter moralising about how this is "the norm" for women - it's supposed to be funny I think, but for me it was just such a poor attempt at a crowd pleaser for the female romantasy audience - "It appears Peadar has come to the realisation that many women in the workplace have to deal with this every month" - YAY FEMINISM!
I don't want to spend too much time on the "spice" scene because, yeah, what was that. BUT. For a "romantasy" branded novel, it really is out of nowhere that our main character decides she fancies this apprentice - who she lovingly calls "swan man" (dying inside typing that). They hook up, and you betcha, she keeps calling him swan man! They seem to have developed this inextricable bond, again, without any evidence to back it up other than being told this. I had to put my Kindle down at the line our dashing young man utters: "I have something important to discuss and, soz, but no snakes allowed" :)
5. Foggy setting and world-building. There ARE some nice moments in this book that will appeal to the dark academia lovers. But it is just so hard to picture what is going on. Focusing more on the affect of her protagonist, the settings and actual movements of the characters in the space are really murky. Other than the mountain episode (which was actually pretty well described), there's a lot happening without much visuals. People do things in spaces that haven't been mapped out for you, and given that world-building is one of the backbones of the fantasy genre, this didn't help rescue the book from its flat characterisation. The magical elements were just...there...and the pace is so so rapid, you are only just familiarising yourself with one location before you are ripped to another.
I realise this has been a pretty damning review, but I unfortunately HAVE to say something as I, too, was led in by the current 3-4 star ratings of this book. Reading this ironically rather than for quality, I can see how this would be a fun and mindless pick, and I did actually find a lot my issues with this book amusing as I read (although I fear this was not the intention).