I gave this book 2/5. For, me, that’s “eh, not a waste of time if it’s free.” I will say up front that I don’t think it was a horrible book. I think the premise is really interesting. I think the magic system is really interesting. It is not contrived, and is easy to understand, and logically flows. I think most of the main characters are interesting and written well enough. The bones are good. I think maybe some more critical editorial input would have really churned this from a “eh, not a waste of time if it’s free” to “I’d pay $10 for this book.” I really think the author could have done a better job, so in short, my suggestion is: “ehh, pass on this book. But I might check out some of her stuff in a few years and see if she got better.”
Adar Finch is admittedly cliché after cliché. Honestly, not something that hurt the book. I love the tropey “grumpy investigator with a painful past is forced to warm up when someone needs him” stuff, and I don’t know that these sorts of books work without that archetype.
His little precocious assistant, however, was about as grating as they come. Honestly, this character did more damage to the book than anything else inside of it. She is not believable as a twelve year old that just faced a very traumatic event (and faces a few more over the course of the plot). Her interactions with the world bounce between what you’d expect from an eighteen year old, and what you’d expect from a six year old. She’s either pretty dumb or very observant and quick to pick up. She’s got a major soft spot for every creature or she’s a borderline sociopath. Characters can singularly occupy all of these points on a spectrum – if they’re written well enough – and Bree is, bluntly, not.
I actually loved her little spirit companion. I think at first it was an eyeroll, but the little critter's shenanigans really add a lot of affable charm to the story, and bridge a nice gap between the two main characters. Maybe some of the jokes were a bit too much, but they fit in well with the character, and honestly never got to the point of causing friction with my read. If I was rating this character, 4/5. Big fan of the little mischief spirit. If Ms. Stovall becomes prolific, I hope to see a series of children's books with the spirit companion.
Magic systems in books like this range from "unnecessarily convoluted," "really stupid," "logical but too much," and "goldilocks, just right." In a book like this, I don't think anyone wants to have to constantly remember the source of magic, how it should work, etc. Complex magic systems also lend themselves to complications when an author wants to execute something with magic, but has confined themselves so much with a complicated system that they've written themselves out of a compelling moment. Ms. Stovall did a great job with her take on this. The 'sources' all make sense, the properties of warlocks vs. witches all make sense, the differences between them all make sense. They were very easily communicated, and add enough interesting layers of complexity without being abstract. And, most importantly, the 'sources' and how those sources affect the magic itself were important to the marching of the plot. She did a really great job on that front.
The second biggest weakness of this book is some of the major events throughout the plot. Spoiler ahead: one of the things that really took me out of buying into Finch’s ‘expertise’ was the scene in which he found the stored pistol, and took it. Author writes that Finch knew it was given to him because… there was a loaded magazine and no boxes of ammo? Does this author have no idea as to how reckless gun owners store their guns? Very simply, the evidence pictured here does not inevitably lead to the conclusion that Adair was so confident in, and that bugs me. This example is an “author needs to communicate information to us, and just kind of phones it in.” Really takes me out of the ‘investigator’ story line when things are true because they need to be, vs. when things are true because the author took the time to lay the trail in such a manner that only a good investigator would catch on.
Big pet peeve, maybe more subjective than objective: the constant references to things like TikTok and even Pornhub. Yes, we get it, Bree is a kid and Adair is out-of-date. This just comes off as wonky, and I have complete faith the author could have done better.
A smaller pet peeve: “FBOI.” The author is a law school graduate and taught criminal law. She ought to know that the FBI doesn’t just add syllables to their divisions/directorates, and that they all have fairly mundane names. This really doesn’t help to ‘build the world’ in a convincing sense, and felt more like a brainstorming session where someone tossed an obviously ridiculous idea that was actually adopted.