I am so glad I read another book while reading this one or I would have just exploded with anger.
SPOILERS ABOUND FROM HERE:-
That's how pissed I am, I am not willing to edit my thoughts.
All we get is he smirked, his muscles, her lithe body, her transparent shift, she swished her hips. Like two horny main characters, too many useless descriptions and no real growth in the storyline. I wanted to spray them with a water bottle like an annoying cat whenever they had sex, because it was annoying smut.
I properly read until the end of Chapter 27 then hit skim town. The 2 stars is because if you take the outline of the story, then I think this is where an editor/beta readers step in and tell you no, you cannot have any and everything in this one book, pick a struggle and perfect it, then it would have been a good story.
1. We get it, they are in Barataria Preserve, Marrero, Louisiana or Garden District, New Orleans, Louisiana. We don't need to be reminded at the start of each chapter! That is just word count the author is aiming for.
2. “Correct on one of three counts, putain...." This is a direct quote from the book, Cole addressing Hesteia. Like girl, you've known this stranger less than 24 hours but you are willing to let him speak like that to the people who raised you?
Mark you I don't stand on tradition but there was a lack of respect that was displayed and Evie just let it slide that made me want to slap her to wake her up.
“Last night, your coven asshole asked me what you were to me.” This I'm guessing was the intended translation, 41% in while the insult was 31% in.
3. "she was his regardless, and he would force a square peg into a round hole just to keep her if she wasn’t. He winced. So much more like his ancestor than he ever anticipated. Fucking yikes."
Foreshadowing ensues. (I was honestly waiting for Cole to double cross Evie, hence the foreshadowing note, but no, he doesn't, instead he ends up being an annoying, over the top (and not in a good way) male lead.
4. I'm just waiting for the scene where he realizes the landline was a set up. Or their helpful cab driver. (I skim read, so I may have lost some of the plot, but what was the reason for him to keep on forgetting Nyx? Being an asshole to his staff generally except for the best-friend/partner? I was right though about the cabbie-neighbour-Than-Thanatos character, but again, plot that doesn't make sense because they decide to make him a "general" in their Underworld army?
5. He doesn't tell her about the prophecy business until the end of Chapter 29! If it ends on a cliff hanger it'll just confirm I should have DNFd. (And it does. All this and there is a book 2 to come, why?)
6. Cole is a condescending twerp. A corporate bro-ski. Then the author needs to pick whether Evie is smart or a naive forest girl who is now in the city. The George of the Jungle-esque dialogue when it comes to Evie describing things was so annoying.
“Private jets cause massive damage to the environment and are hardly ever actually necessary since you could easily fly a commercial airline instead. They certainly aren’t all that much faster. So you’re just creating a huge carbon footprint for something you don’t actually need.”
So, she knows about carbon footprints, private jets, but she calls smartphones telemobile?
7. They have cheesy, earth shattering sex in Chapter 34. And thereafter too often in times that are unnecessary. And I mean, I read smut but this was not smut written well or having any real passion!
8. A mash up of genres with no direction. Think god, witch, mythology, reincarnation, millionaire, sir/bdsm saviour. Too many aspects and not doing them well.
9. Unnecessary OW drama related to Cole's previous exploits, touch her/look at her and die, just to again balloon the word count. Loved Evie turning Mina into a plant but surely, the road to get there was unnecessary. She could have unleashed that power on a better opponent, case in point the later major battle.
10. “Relax, Angel,” Cole whispered into Evie’s ear as they followed Charles. “The only time your heart should be beating this fast is when I’m inside you.” 🤢
11.“You done fucked up, A-aron,” Hayden cackled. “And all because you had to go retrieve your witch!”🙄 And all the millenial, tv show references.
12. So there are basically people within their court (Mina, Hecate) looking to start off the apocalypse but that is just mentioned as basically snippets with a lot of filler in terms of everyone's trip/inner monologue? The Hecate one didn't pan out at the end but same argument still stands as there is to be a book 2.
In conclusion, a proper, severe edit of the book would have done it justice. I appreciated the cover. I actually loved the initial chapters or I wouldn't have gone that far in reading this. I however found Cole to be cheesy+rude/asshole, Evie was the one with the potential but that is squandered in them just fucking and on their annoying pet names. And I mean it with love, someone tell the author, we get it, this is your dream, but for it to have a future, please pick a few things and fine tune them as to what you want your book/series to be about as opposed to write down every iteration your characters probably went through and publish.