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So, first off, I want to say that I’m a huge fan of Gem’s work. I adored Stag & Hollow Chronicles and The Faerie Guild Trials, which is why I went into this book super excited. But while there were definitely parts I enjoyed, this one didn’t hit quite as hard for me, and I think it could use a little polishing to reach its full potential.
Let’s talk about Olwyn and Altair. While I loved their chemistry in certain moments, I couldn’t help but feel a little thrown off by how Olwyn seemed to focus on Altair’s looks at the most inopportune times. Like, girl, the stakes are sky-high—maybe save the daydreaming for later? And Altair is an undeniably compelling character, but some of his traits felt a bit too similar to other popular book heroes (hello, one blue eye, one black eye, and a scar). The little twist with his eye color was interesting, but it wasn’t really explained, which left me wanting more.
I also couldn’t ignore some ACOTAR parallels—they popped up a lot. Altair being shot with arrows, the cave scene, the inn room tension, even the council chair moment. While I appreciate a nod to beloved books, these scenes felt so close to their inspirations that they pulled me out of the story.
The eight-month time jump was another tricky spot for me. It feels like we skipped over so much, and major events like Olwyn and Altair getting married were dropped into the narrative after the fact. It threw me off, especially when paired with some inconsistencies. For example, Olwyn commanding respect in one scene, only to call herself a captive in the next—it didn’t entirely make sense in the context of her role and actions.
The pacing also slowed down at times due to info dumps. There were sections where Olwyn would go on about vampires being monsters… then not monsters… then monsters again, and while it might have been meant to show her conflicted feelings, it ended up feeling repetitive and made the narrative drag.
Speaking of the world-building and magic, this was an area where I really wanted more. The details felt a little scattered, and it wasn’t always clear how things worked. There were also a few timeline questions that I couldn’t wrap my head around, like how Olwyn grew up hearing about Altair’s “merciless rule” even though he didn’t take the throne until he was 18, and they’re both 27 now. Small things like that pulled me out of the story. Another thing that didn’t fully land was his backstory. We’re told that before Altair became king at 18, he was a general, but… how? It doesn’t make sense for a teenager to hold such a high-ranking position in a military setting. Who puts a 16-year-old in charge like that? It stretched plausibility and made his backstory feel less grounded.
The relationships, too, felt underdeveloped. While there’s definite potential in Olwyn and Altair’s dynamic, the overall chemistry felt uneven. How are we supposed to believe in these deep connections if there’s little relationship building and only one perspective? Sometimes it felt like everyone was inexplicably obsessed with Olwyn without much to justify their feelings. Iolas’s POV, in particular, would have added more depth, especially since he’s present for most of the book but doesn’t get a voice.
By the end, I could see where the story was going, but some of the big reveals felt a little predictable. Moments that should’ve hit harder didn’t quite land for me—like the reveal about Casian calling her “Winnie.” While I appreciated the effort to tie things together, it just felt a little too telegraphed.
That said, there are things I did enjoy. I liked the banter between Olwyn and Altair, and you can tell there’s potential for something great here. The story has a solid foundation, and Gem’s talent for intriguing character dynamics definitely shines in parts. It just felt like there was a lot of filler and not enough focus on deepening the relationships, world-building, or big emotional moments.
I’m still hopeful for the sequel, though! Gem’s books are always full of potential, and I know she’ll bring the magic back with some tightening up of the pacing and a bit more balance in the storytelling. Definitely some good bones here, but I’m looking forward to seeing how this series evolves!