not a lot happens
The plot is interesting, as are most of Daniel’s books. That’s sadly where most of my compliments end. So much of this story is the same couple conversations repeated, sometimes verbatim just to a different character, that it gets old quickly.
I understand that the trauma these characters went through would take years to recover from, that doesn’t mean it needs to be brought up every couple of paragraphs with the same words. Either the MC is being self-deprecating, worrying about being a perfect ‘nice guy’ gentleman, or the FMC is agonizing over how perfect the MC is except for his recovering trauma, while also hating herself and her reactions from her own trauma. Or the third option of one of the few side characters getting a little bit of info and feeling sympathetic towards the MC. These three conversations, either spoken or internal monologue (or both) happen at least every couple of paragraphs.
If there is more than two pages in this book without one of those three things happening, I would be shocked. Even in the middle of a combat/action scene, the MC or FMC become filled with self doubt and self hatred at the most random things, when realistically they would be so focused/distracted by what was happening they wouldn’t have the time to think about other things until it was over.
A repeated criticism I have for Daniel’s books is that he brushes past so much of the actual action. His books are unfortunately tell, not show, which is the opposite of what they should be. You’ll have whole scenes of nothing more than the main group talking back and forth about nothing more than the fact that the MC always loses in video games (a fact that is brought up every single time the group takes a break and plays games). I wish the author would describe more of the scenes than just the FMC’s clothing of the day. It feels like the only times we get descriptions of what is happening is to tell us the dress/tights/sweater/hair and eye combo of the FMC.
The last book covered the first semester. This book covers the break between semesters. Which feels like such a short period timeline wise. If you took out the scenes/conversations that were repeated again and again, this book would be at least half the size, if not smaller.
My final critique is that sooo much of this story feels like a copy of Paths of Ascension. They even introduce something called Heaven’s Path, which seems to be a government sponsored way to advance, just like PoA. Combined with outer, inner, and core skill slots, adventuring into ‘pockets’ (rifts in PoA) and even getting a rift reward of essence and items/stones. So many similarities. Yes, there are differences, it’s clearly not a carbon copy, but it has definitely been extremely influenced by that story. Even the MC who is orphaned, and essentially operates as an unstoppable tank/defender and pairs up with an FMC who comes from an important family is the same. It’s hard to read this after being current with all PoA chapters, and not see the many, many, many similarities.
I really enjoy the ideas behind Schinhofen’s books, but am always left disappointed by the actual execution. If they were not on Kindle Unlimited, I would most likely not read them.