I was so excited to read this book.
As a non-binary person who hasn't had the strength to fully come out of the closet yet, I really, REALLY wanted to identify with Clair, but I just couldn't.
There are great parts of this book, like a definite through-story that relies on plotlines other than Clair's transition. I am so tired of queer books that focus solely on the character's coming out or their transition. These are stories that need to be told, but I've read so many already that I want stories where the trans character is just living and dealing with other stuff! We NEED more queer-centric stories like this, and I'm so glad to see this author willing to do what other authors--even other queer authors--won't do.
Which is why I wish there weren't so many problems with it.
First, if you are put off by anime terminology in writing, this book is extremely heavy with it in a very campy way. "Magical girl" has always seemed way too on the nose for me. Too specific. This, along with the hyper-specific attack names just gives me a lot of second-hand embarrassment. It felt to me like the author really wanted to write an anime or manga instead of a book, but this sort of language has never really worked with an english-speaking audience. It's all just a little too hokey.
It also leans a little too heavily on the main character's self-hate. While this is generally okay as a plot device, in this book it is extremely repetitive, hammering home over and over again that Clair is awkward, not doing well emotionally, and insecure. There are ways to show this rather than telling it, but the story tells, over and over.
This makes me think that the author doesn't trust the audience to remember a very important thing about her characters. And while I'm always a fan of "telling" in a story when something needs to be told, I felt like I couldn't be trusted to remember this particular trait. What's worse is that the author does SHOW Clair's discomfort in very effective ways, but then also explains it. It got frustrating.
There are also pacing issues, both too fast and, in other areas, too slow.
The overall arc moves EXTREMELY fast. Clair goes from not knowing she's a magical girl to being on the Magica Riot team, to knowing all their songs to the point where she can play a gig, to her first fight... And there's still two and a half hours left in the book. There is no internal conflict. The other members of Magica Riot immediately accept her without the awkward introduction phase that would come from entering any new group of people. And it's entirely possible that this group of girls is 100% accommodating, but "awkward" doesn't necessarily mean "mean" or "catty."
This could have been a phase where the reader could get to know the other members of Magica Riot, but it was glossed over so quickly that the story that followed felt hollow to me.
But then there's parts that take too long. In the action scene where Clair first changes, there is a lengthy back-and-forth between her and Nova that drags out to a comical degree. It feels like while all this was going on, the two monsters who'd shown up were just sort of casually waiting to attack until the two girls finished their conversation.
I usually don't notice stuff like this, because sometimes you really have to get conversation out to make things make sense. But this really seemed to drag.
I think the most major issue with the book, though, is the dialogue.
Overall, it's very unnatural and nothing ever flows like a real conversation. I am writing this review at 38% at a point where I'm considering DNF'ing, and up to this point I have not seen a conversation I feel would happen in real life. It almost gives Stepford Wives vibes, not in the sense that the girls are docile, but that they're all programmed to be happy all the time. It's a little unsettling.
While this is a trend among all the main characters, it is especially true with Nova, who speaks with an excess of exclamation points and always seems to be verbally excited to the point of shouting. Even the most upbeat people can have a normal conversation without this much excitement. It felt forced.
Nova also gives Clair language warnings for words I've been using since I was in grade school. A teen- or twenty-something shouldn't really be saying "language" to a friend who says "hell" and "ass." Since Magica Riot is meant for a young adult audience, this really comes across as unnecessarily infantile and puritanical, and really put me off from Nova's character. It's weird no one--not even Clair--questions her on this. I get the feeling there's a reason, but it needs to be addressed earlier in the book, if there is. Even someone saying "Nova's just like that," would help. As it is, I kinda feel like the other characters are on board with this... unique... trait?
And speaking of the other characters, at this point in the book, they feel like props. I don't feel a connection to any of them, and by this point in the book, I feel like I should have a good grasp of their individual voice, their goals, and shortcomings. I only barely know Clair and Nova, and I'm not sure Nova's perceived personality is necessarily what the author wanted me to take from the narrative.
Altogether, Magica Riot feels a lot like self-fulfillment. If you're okay with that, you might like this book. And even though I share some of the same heartaches as Clair, reading this gave me a lot of second-hand embarrassment, which is ultimately why I considered DNF'ing in the first place. Had this book been written for the 8-12 year old crowd, it might work a little better.
If I do go back and finish this book, I will update my review if there's anything to be updated. Right now, though, I'm just not having fun with it, and while I do feel it's very important for books like this to exist, I am sad this isn't written better. I recommend supporting the author anyway, because it's so, SO important for books like this to exist, and that's one of the reason I'm giving this book three stars instead of two.