1.5
I didn’t like that she had kissed his brother, and almost ruined his relationship with Abby, the girl he just got married to. I’m not a fan of the woman liking his brother, and this went farther than that because she kissed his brother which was taking it too far. I decided to look past it though because of Zane’s feelings for her, and I knew her feelings for Zach obviously weren’t real. It was proven when she hadn’t felt anything from their kiss.
At the wedding Zane said her dress matched her blue left eye, like her eyes are different colors. I didn’t know if it was a typo or if she had two different colored eyes. It wasn’t said until later that she had one chocolate eye and once ice blue, and I think the main character’s eye color should be dispensed with sooner than that, esp the oddity of having eyes that are two colors. While reading I definitely felt like I was coming into the story in the middle, like maybe this was the second in a series and I had missed out on a lot.
There was a good set-up to their relationship, tension, her noticing how good-looking and muscular he is when she hadn’t before. I did think they went too far though. It went from dancing together to going outside for some air, to kissing and then he’s touching her and bringing her to her peak, and his brother is looking for him and they duck into the rock wall to hide. It went too far too fast, way too soon in the book, but I looked forward to the sexual tension and how they were going to act around each other after he touched her intimately. I was let down in the respect as it took quite a while for them to touch again and all of the romance was gone as the shyness and problems came in where she didn’t want to open up. Her style was way different from mine, the tattoos and the nose ring and the platinum blond and black hair. Not the usual character I read about, and the language and bad attitude really put a damper on it. I thought she was going to be likable but she had an abrasive personality.
2 months earlier she’d kissed Zach thinking she’d liked him, but hadn’t felt anything. I’m wondering if she knew that Abby liked him, or he liked Abby, because it seems a little homewrecker to me and it would’ve been nice to know that she didn’t know about them and their feelings for each other, but that wasn’t said so it left the impression that she was trying to come between them and get Zach for herself, which didn’t make her likable. Zane had wanted her for three years, so there were some deep feelings on his side that I liked. He had always asked her out on dates and had tried harder since their kiss at the wedding, a dozen times over the years, six since the wedding.
I liked when Zane was jealous when Keelie went on a date, and when he came to the tattoo place where she works they dropped their phones and got them mixed up. He got all of the reminders that her friend Anais had put into her phone, about having a drink on the date and to not expect anything, and Zane is thinking that she should expect a lot. She should expect someone to be nice to her and everything. Then he gets the reminder set to tell Keelie not to give her a date a blow job no matter how hot he is. He’s jealous and mad and wanting to punch the guy, has to keep his emotions in check. When he gets to the restaurant he hears fear in her voice as she’s standing in the parking lot; he hurries and she’s kicking a guy because of course he got physical with her, thus giving Zane a chance to get all masculine and come to the rescue to finish the guy off and protect her. Keelie says “I had it under control, you know,” which wasn’t the reaction I was expecting her to have after he sort of saved her. It’s the personality coming out again; she did a lot of things the opposite of what I thought was the appropriate reaction.
I really liked the part where she goes to the loft later that night to apologize for it. She wraps her legs around him and he takes them off, saying he doesn’t want it to be a quick f***. She’s hurt at first, rejected, then she asks how much he can see without his glasses. He tells her not much unless it’s in front of him and she takes his glasses off and kisses him. She tells him she’s never had casual sex, then puts his glasses on the counter and leaves. He goes to get them and trips over a barstool. That was funny how she’d heard it and as she’s walking outside he opens the window and says you’re a brat. That was a cute scene, and there were some humorous statements and things to come, but I must say I got very tired of them together. Zane says he wants five minutes of her time, they go out on a date, all very boring, nothing happening. All Keelie does is look down, blush and get all embarrassed and shy. Fine, because I’m the same way but even I got impatient and wanted her to stop being so embarrassed and make some progress with him. She can kiss him and come onto him strong one second, then she’s acting the little bashful girl that can’t take a complement or hear him say anything sexual without getting too embarrassed.
I didn’t like that Zane takes pictures of women and models look at his body and he’s used to it, and he even took naked pictures of Abby, his brother Zach’s wife.
It was cute when Zane was talking to Anais, the woman who works with Keelie, and he figured out the reason she suggests the men get their crotch pierced and everything is just to get a rise out of them. She says Zane is onto her. Keelie says “onto her, huh?” and he says “I’d rather be on you.” She ruined it by saying “you’ve been around me long enough to know how mean I am, right?” He grins and she says “Good. Don’t start. Not here.” She could’ve just left it at the blush and not said that to shatter the romantic moment.
Any time he did or said something sweet she was pulling away, saying something mean or rude and putting him off. I just didn’t like her and it got so much worse as I read. Near the end of the book she’s still got a bad attitude and getting onto him when he’s doing nothing wrong. She gives him a key to the house she bought and doesn’t think he understands, says he’s making it hard on her and she’s trying to say she loves him and all that. What a winning personality and sunny disposition. It’s no wonder he likes her…wait, why does he like her? I know he made a comment about the first time he met her, his brother Zach had wanted him to let her practice a tattoo on him and he didn’t want to, because he knew having her hands on him would affect him, then he’s mooning over her for 3 years despite her constantly turning him down. I just didn’t see the attraction, mostly because I wasn’t attracted to either one of them. I didn’t like her clothing style, appearance, language, attitude, disposition, personality, anything. And Zane just became kind of pathetic to me, not manly and just letting her make all the decisions while he watched from afar. Not an attractive couple. Gone was all the promise of chemistry in the beginning. The last or whatever of the book was dominated by her horrible, life-altering problem that didn’t even need to be in here. This wasn’t the story of them falling in love, this was the story of Keelie confronting her past and pushing away Zane. Not romantic at all.
The way they touched in the beginning of the book would imply things were going to get a lot hotter and sexier, right? Wrong. That was the hottest they got. She pictured giving him a blow job for precisely one second after he walked into the shop after Anais mentioned the subject, so I’m like, okay, something to look forward to. Nope. Zane mentioned things he wanted to do to her, positions, touching her, even taking naked pictures of her. Heck, taking any pictures of her, maybe a hot photo shoot was on the way. Wrong again. No photo shoot, he never even snapped one picture of her. They didn’t do any of the things that were mentioned; it was such a tease. And the very first time she goes to the loft to see him she stays the night with him and they shower together! Except the author cut it off right after he said he wanted a shower with her and didn’t give us any details at all about it. Who does that? I thought this book was going to be explicit about sex, but that was sooo not the case. It was lukewarm with nothing but drama about the past that wasn’t even that bad. So she saw someone get raped, tried to help but let adults talk her out of it. It’s not like she was the one that got raped. By the way she was acting I thought her stepfather or stepbrother had raped her, not that she walked in on her stepbrother raping her friend, hit one of his friends with a vase and took her home. And Zane, the one that used to get beat up for being gawky and wearing glasses, who went around taking pictures of everyone else being hurt and picking fights with the bullies, then egging his brothers into fighting with him to account for the bruises he’d gotten from other people. Like, that is why they’re emotionally scarred?? It’s not even that bad to me! Then Keelie is telling him to tell his family, which was bossy to me and not her business, but anyway, that promised some emotional element to this book, but he never told them in here. It was left off that he would. Another letdown, one of many.
The book had a steady downward slope. It got worse and worse until by the end I was so ready to be done with it that I hurried through. They never had sex again after the night she stayed with him, great idea for a romance book that’s supposed to have, you know, romance. Her friend Victoria that had gotten raped puts in an appearance, but she wasn’t likable either and the scene was just disappointing and no emotion. Keelie had asked Zane for one of his prints and she had sent it to the rape center that Victoria is running and had donated money. Keelie was already done for a long time ago in my eyes so none of this had an effect on me, and their relationship was so utterly boring I didn’t care what happened.
Finding out at the very end that Keelie had tried to come between Abby and Zach, and that she hadn't liked Abby and I remembered she had called her a name, something about being spoiled or girly or something at the wedding I think, just made her that much more unlikable. Who tries to break someone's relationship up by kissing the guy knowing another woman loves him? Talk about messed up, and a home wrecker. I never understood the appeal of wanting one brother and then getting with the other brother. Seems like a lot to me to get over, knowing the woman originally wanted your brother and kissed him. But to each his own I guess.
They got someone with the blonde hair and even a nose ring on the cover, but got a guy that didn’t wear glasses that were so much a part of Zane. There were so many mistakes in this book, words repeated, the wrong words used, heck, even one time Zane was called Zach. Pg. 52: “Zane let himself into Zach’s old loft. The place was empty since Zach and Abby had started living together. Collapsing against the door, Zach pulled of his glasses.” Actually, there’s two mistakes here. That’s supposed to be “off” not “of.” And how does the main character get called by another person’s name? Who is reading this thing before it’s printed that didn’t notice the main character was called by his brother’s name? There were dozens of mistakes all throughout this book like this that were glaring in their wrongness. All it would’ve took was for one person to read through this thing once before publishing it so readers can have something correct to read. This was riddled with typos that took away from the reading as I had to re-read and try to make sense of things and figure out what it was supposed to have said. The conversations were also hard to follow and it was difficult to tell who was speaking. She would have one person say something, and then break to a new line, so I’m naturally assuming it’s another person speaking since we’re on the next line. It was the same person speaking, she just broke off to a new line, Idk why. I never understand why people do that. If one person is speaking put their entire dialogue together so we don’t think another person is speaking and then have to go back and re-read after realizing it was the same person talking all along. Bad typing and just bad writing killed this book. Idk how many times one of these characters sent another a “dark look.” It was used over and over. And Zane and Keelie touched each other the same way all the time. She’d put her hands in his shirt, he’d run his lips over hers, put his forehead to hers. I got so sick and so bored with all their little touching. Like, use some synonyms or have them touch each other in a different way. All the same feelings, all the same touches, all the same ways of saying things. Synonyms, people, synonyms are our friends! They prevent things from being repetitive and monotonous and boring! Use them!