I don't normally write reviews of great length, but I'd hate to drop a lower rating on an indie book and run. Apologies for a terrible format. I am on mobile and nearly asleep, but if I don't do this now, I never will.
Spoilers to the end ahead.
The positives in Byron's writing had me faltering a bit on how exactly to rate this. Byron has a skill for delivering creepy images and scenes. I liked the watch tower turned radio station. And because the creep factor was well done, it was enough to burn through the book as fast as my time would allow.
I will hope, should the author read this, that they know critiques are meant to be gentle nudges because there is so much potential here.
First off, the characters had me experiencing severe whiplash.
Evelyn, randomly dropping that she was an alcoholic threw me almost completely out of the story. There had been zero hints of her addiction prior, and I sat for a moment trying to make the connection. In the story, she states that her first day sober was the day the story begins, but she has no symptoms of the withdrawals. I could see the author trying to cover a few plot holes here (such as answering the reader question of why she stays in the tower despite it being the bastion against evil creatures; answer is that she is determined to be sober). Without breadcrumbs leading up to this moment, however, I was just left scratching my head on it.
That isn't a huge gripe. The issue is what *led* to her alcoholism. Seeing a demented creature in the forest while enjoying a party with friends. So she returns to watch over the forest and willingly confronts the creatures inside it with barely any fear, even though a glimpse of one years ago led her to alcoholism? I'm not understanding. I would have liked for continuity sake that she would at least struggle with wanting a drink after each encounter, or mention how she refused to let the forest harm her further. Anything.
It's not even mentioned after the big bad creature almost kills her twice. Not even after her eyeball is ripped out. Just, "Wow that was so scary. I have chills. But I'm going back into the forest."
Danny is decided to be a certified scaredy-cat supposedly, but after the angry wailing of a demonic God blows out his eardrums, he returns to work. He later shoots the evil God of the forest???? There's no true hesitation on his part to follow along into the forest to confront the evil horrors literally tearing people in half.
I had no clue roughly how old Finn was either, and was wavering on if he was a love interest for one of the characters or not because I couldn't pinpoint him. I would have liked to see him integrated better into their group. More of why after years of untold horrors he decided to draw the line and turn in his badge. I know a reason was given, but it felt flimsy in the narrative after he threw his weight around the new cop from out of town and made jokes about others throwing up on the scene.
My other serious issue is the setting. Mainly the town. Everyone listens to the radio, hears these odd phone calls. They switch between knowing about the creepy forest and being confused about the disappearances. There is nothing keeping people in this town, yet they all choose to stay in the place that brings literal death and destruction every time it gets a bit foggy? They know what is going on, but they don't? The military just left this forest of untold evil along because people were asking questions? That easily?
The end also trailed off and left no resolution to hardly any of the main plot, which made closing it disappointing.
I believe I read this started as a short story. It reads like a post on no sleep subreddit, which isn't a bad thing at its base. The issue is expanding a creepy pasta or story tends to lead to a lot of twiddling thumbs in the narrative because the author is trying to fill in a lot of gaps needed to stuff pages. The thrills are the main focus in a short, especially on sub reddits like No Sleep, and the characters and setting tend to suffer because they aren't as fleshed out in a smaller word count (obviously). Those elements were abandoned here for the sake of non-stop creepy scenes.
I think this writer can be great and there's a talent for making so many scenes creepy in a novel (Jennifer chasing then gave me the creeps) but a devotion to setting and characters, and then revising to keep the narrative flow smooth would greatly benefit this series.
*edit to add:*
No more italics. Please. It made reading very jarring because so many random words were stressed for no reason and gave 0 positive impact.