Hi! If you are the author reading this, please STOP. This review is not positive whatsoever (as you can probably tell from the rating), but if you are still curious, I recommend YOU STAY CURIOUS and leave. I never want to hurt anyone’s feelings and reading this probably will. Please, take care of your mental health first and foremost and if you want any type of real constructive criticism don’t look here.
YOU HAVE BEEN WARNED.
I’m aware this was a prequel novella to set up for the book. But I had issues from jump.
The writing? The only way I can describe it is “cringe”. TikTok phrases were used, weird “cowboy” phrases were thrown in, a “haha so funny” was in there as well, a “ooohh, yummy I rub my tummy” too…I frowned and cringed throughout the whole 63 pages so hard I’ll need Botox. Oh and this man at some point says (after the FMC squirts “it wasn’t a lot like I’ve seen in some of those spice videos” … not even sure how to explain the face I made but yeah, you get the picture.
The characters? Bland af. Sure, it’s just 63 pages, but the way the MCs acted towards each other, as if they’ve known each other for years, made me feel like I, as the reader, should feel that way too, and let me tell you, I didn’t even know why the characters act the way they do, let alone personality traits.
And you mean to tell me, in one single night, well no, not even 8h, NOT EVEN 3h, these two “felt something real”?!?
The setting. Sure, middle of nowhere town with a ranch. A ranch that hires a skinny woman that knows nothing about ranch work…A boss that tells her to “take the day off!” In the middle of the night…A town that after what I believe are 10 years are still pissed with (a teenager when it happened) a guy who fucked up HIS own life, no one else’s, by being a stupid teen… yeaaaah great setting (HUGE S/ just FYI)
And I’m going to stop at that. Han got the live reactions in audio and you guys are lucky I can’t upload those here.