Marketing a book as fan based either music or person is always going to be a risky gamble, especially when you use a large fandom. There will be a perception that the characters are in some way based on what you claim. This happens to be the case with The Book of Names, which was marketed as “based on Stray Kids songs”. I have since seen a review from the author claiming it is based on many different things including songs and movies which is fine, BUT it was being pushed primarily on all her social medias as based on Stray Kids.
I went into this book with higher expectations than I should have. I hope that this is recognised for what it is constructive criticism and not an attack on the authors.
The story is full of cliches which in and of itself isn’t a problem and can be well written, unfortunately that isn’t the case here.
The MMC is written very much like the worst of one member’s fan fictions write him, (even if he isn’t meant to be him), and as such he doesn’t come across as dangerous, but charming or whatever the vibe our two writers were going for. He simply comes across as crass, sleezy and lacking any type of depth. The same could be said for all the male characters who were basically the same blueprint in varying fonts. The only thing that made one more “interesting” to the FMC was how he looked. It’s also really hard to buy what he is trying to sell with the “I decided to protect her from myself”, when all of his thought processes are as simple as wanting to rip her clothes off. This would be one of those books where it would be better not knowing what the MMC is thinking. We don’t get the cute thoughts of how he is falling for her slowly, it is purely carnal. Again there is nothing wrong with that if that was the point of the story, but it isn’t, we are supposed to feel empathy for what I considered an unempathetic character.
Our FMC once again has the typical trope of being the girl who doesn’t think she is special but is in fact the beautiful secret chosen one. She is described as a plethora of contradicting things by other characters but is beige… and I use beige because it is also the colour most commonly used to describe her clothes along side grey. She is simply uninteresting, lacking chemistry with any of the male characters and yet everyone wants to sleep with her, primarily for her looks. In short all the characters were vapid, superficial and lacking substance. All only interested in how good looking someone was, and therefore how beddable they are. This is even the full scope of the conversations between FMC and her friends.
The dialogue is basic, and at times if it didn’t mention it I had to go back and re-read to even decipher who was actually the character speaking as there was no true differentiation present in the speech patterns. The constant repetition of events, items and descriptions made me feel like the authors was either trying to up the word count of the book. Or they simply didn’t think the reader would be smart enough to retain the information offered. The random trauma dumping to try and encourage empathy for the characters also felt very much out of place at time, which with a time line that skipped, and jump isn’t massively unsurprising. Leading on from that the trigger warnings also were not correct. “Violence” does not cover some of the scenes used. Cannibalism is a step beyond simple violence as an example and should have its own trigger warning.
The writing as a whole needed to be properly edited. There were large a number of misspellings, grammar challenges and even sentence structures that simply did not make sense. If this has been in the process of being written for 2 years, has had beta readers and been correctly edited, then these simple mistakes should have been caught and rectified. If you are going to put a book in the public domain and expect people to pay for it, the very least you can do it make sure it is suitably proof read.
In summary I wanted to support an indie author and enjoy this, but it wasn’t anywhere near as refined as it should have been to be published.