The reason Lord of Blackthorne likely has so many positive reviews is because it was written by Jason Kingsley, a popular medieval YouTuber. The audience for this book is primarily his fans, and because of that, many of them are predisposed to like it. I am also a fan of Kingsley’s YouTube channel; I think his is one of the best in the genre of medieval history. However, that doesn’t erase the fact that this book is one of the worst I’ve read. There was seemingly no quality control involved in its writing or release, a hypothesis strengthened by the fact that it was published by a breakoff of Kingsley’s video game company. It doesn’t appear to have been professionally edited, and I’d be hard-pressed to accept that it was even proofread by the author, or that it went through more than one draft.
(Be advised; spoilers follow)
Weak Characters
The characters in this novel have no growth or real motivation. The protagonist, Lord Blackthorne, isn’t even given a name. He spends the first hundred pages being called: The Young Knight. It isn’t until he moves to his new castle that the narration refers to him as Blackthorne. His primary personality trait is that he is noble to the point of parody. He believes in chivalry so strongly that he forbids himself from lying or behaving in any way less than honorably. Like most of the modern people who read the novel, he holds a very anti-medieval worldview that all people are equal and that nobles and people in power should aid and protect those under them. However, we never learn why Blackthorne has such a modern viewpoint. He simply does because the novel was written by a modern man who (presumably) didn’t want his protagonist to think he was genetically superior to everyone else. However, in a story, characters need to have their worldviews challenged, and nothing ever happens to challenge Blackthorne’s worldview. From the beginning, he knows the way he needs to act, and he solves every problem placed before him. In the end, he realizes he was put on this earth to nurture others and help them grow, but that realization ultimately means nothing because he was already doing that throughout the whole book. It would be one thing if he started as an irresponsible youth and then grew into a paternal and protective figure, but that doesn’t happen.
The only other character worth mentioning is Osga, the wild, unkempt man Blackthorne meets in the ruins of the castle. Osga has no other function in the story than to be Blackthorne’s sidekick. He follows him around and offers advice, but he never takes an action that alters the trajectory of the story. In the end, it’s revealed that Osga is the bastard son of the old Lord of Blackthorne, which is supposed to explain why he had a noble bearing throughout the novel despite his “wild man” appearance. The only problem is that this actively enforces the medieval idea of the superior nature of the nobility, which fundamentally subverts Blackthorne’s whole reason for existing.
The villain, Gorstone, is such a one-dimensional character that I wasn’t even going to include him at first. His entire villainous plot happens off-screen, so the readers don’t even realize what he’s doing until about 300 pages into 460 page novel. We get no reason behind why he’s a villain other than the fact that he’s the embodiment of medieval noble superiority and believes he’s better than everyone else. He has no real quarrel with Blackthorne other than the flimsy argument that Blackthorne destroyed his castle at the beginning. Is that really worth wiping his army out on Blackthorne’s defenses, though? I wouldn’t think so.
Lack of Drama
I was taken aback by the novel’s complete lack of drama, conflict, or any sort of physical or emotional stakes. Here are some examples:
Part 1:
The first hundred pages or so are taken up by a long, dry description of a siege. Most of the action is viewed by Blackthorne from a distance, creating a disconnect between the reader and what should be intensely distressing, frenetic action. He sneaks around the walls and climbs them with his helmet off. While he does so, he thinks about how dangerous it is and how much trouble he’d be in if someone spotted him and started throwing rocks at him. Had Blackthorne actively been in danger during the climb, having rocks strike the wall near him, or having arrows ping off the stones, the reader would have been put into a position to worry about him and cheer for his success. As it stands now, Blackthorne ends the siege without any major trouble or danger to himself.
Part 2:
The next section of the book details Blackthorne’s arrival at his new castle, meeting the villagers, and beginning the process of fixing the place up. Aside from a slightly shaky start, the villagers have no problem with Blackthorne arriving and announcing himself as the new lord. It would have been far more dramatically interesting for some of them to vehemently oppose Blackthorne. That way, he would have been forced to choose to stick with his worldview of equality or revert to a more tyrannical medieval style of rule. His ultimate choice to continue respecting his people despite their lack of respect toward him would have actually told us something about his character.
Part 3:
This section details the preparations for and the engagement of another siege, this time with Blakthorne on the defending side. Like before, his villagers have no issue with following him into battle against an enemy they know nothing about. They might have been expected to be scared of dying, but in the end, it doesn’t matter, as the battle goes relatively smoothly for Blackthorne, complete with groups of friends he made along the way arriving at various points to help turn the tide. Only a token few villagers are killed, and none of the ones who are ever got anything more than one or two lines of dialogue. The important villagers all make it out okay.
Lack of Editing
Despite everything else, I feel that this is the worst sin this novel commits. The pages are filled with grammatical errors and typos. There are far too many to list in this review, but the most common are comma splices and run-on sentences. There are also several examples of words with letters missing or even sentences with missing words. The lack of a copy or line editor is apparent.
But more than that, the novel is entirely too long, filled with superfluous details and asides that serve no purpose and should have been cut. Kingsley’s greatest strength, his deep knowledge of the medieval period, becomes his biggest weakness as he grinds the story to a halt to give the reader history lessons—which, it should be noted, ultimately don’t matter to the story. Personally, I think a good editor could have cut about 40-50% of this book, leaving nothing but the bare minimum required to tell what little of Blackthorne’s story there is, and it would have been stronger for it.
Conclusion
As I stated earlier, I am a fan of Jason Kingsley’s YouTube channel, and it brings me no great pleasure to write such a scathing review of his first novel, but unfortunately, I have more respect for myself, my time, and my money. This novel wasn’t worth any of them. A good editor or a trusted beta reader should have explained all the problems with this novel to Kingsley before it ever saw the light of day. Like other authors, he then could have taken those criticisms to heart and come up with a much stronger work. Instead, we are expected to pay $30 for what was clearly a first draft, and it isn’t worth it, no matter how you feel about the author.