Achievement: Tentacle Lust

by N.K. Layne

**This story has been heavily-revised and republished under a new title and ISBN**
Achievement: Tentacle Lust (Redux)

Genres: M M Romance, Erotica, Fantasy, Romance, Paranormal, Short Stories, M M M

17 pages, ebook

First published January 1, 2014

About the author

NK Layne sees the world through queer brushstrokes, infinite rainbows, demonic cartoons, gory afternoons, and a veil of moss.

Reviews

[Exina · Rating 2 out of 5]

I've never read anything like this before, but it is very short, and I was really curious.

Though the revised version is much better and more followable than the version published in the Love's Landscapes anthology, it is still weird at best. There is squid-on-man action, then a threesome with two squids and the human one of them kidnapped, forced seduction with aphrodisiac "crimson ink", followed by a fight between the squids because of breaking the rules of the Fertilization Dungeon...



The relationhip between Cadia and Squalo was not clear, and honestly, I couldn't follow the movement of all those sixteen tentacles either.



Two stars because it was weirdly interesting, but I don't think I would ever be a fan of this kind of erotica.

[Optimist ♰King's Wench♰ · Rating 2 out of 5]

Can you get fisted by a squid?

"Man, by the time I squirm all eight of my arms inside of you, it's going to be straight up supersonic."

So... Yes?

Did I enjoy this bit of tentacle porn?

I giggled and made weird faces.

We come (sorry) upon Tente fucking Alec in the fertilization dungeon with his beak? Tente's the Dungeon Master and his tentacles expand and vibrate when he gets esssssssited. Next thing you know Squalo swims (?) smack dab into the middle of their sexy times.

He was the fantasy that humans expected when they got kidnapped by Squids.

Really? This is a thing humans fantasize about?



Alrighty then. I stand corrected.

So the more the merrier would seem like a WIN!

Wrong.

Tente's a jealous Dungeon Master Squid who doesn't take kindly to Squalo horning (again, sorry) in on his territory.

Cat fight!!! Er, I mean Squid fight! doesn't have the same ring. And a butt hurt Squalo. Do squids have butts?


Tentacle porn ménage is on tap for those who dare enter Achievement: Tentacle Lust which is seemingly exactly what the prompter requested. Thanks to the author and their team for this addition to the LL event.

Did I like it?


Kinda.

[Nemo ☠️ · Rating 2 out of 5]

shoutout to my GR friends for not unfriending me despite me adding stuff like this

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i don't know why i read this so don't even ask

[Kristan · Rating 3 out of 5]

I read: "smoking hot tentacle hottie looking for his mate" with a content warning of a giant pile of smut and thought: "I have to read this"

I did.

I have no idea WTF I just read.



I'm rating this 3 stars because I have no idea how to rate it, honestly. I've never experienced this level of tentacleness before ... I think I liked it? Can there be too many tentacles? I don't know. Kudos for the author providing exactly what the prompt suggested and for the good writing.

[G.R. Reader · Rating 1 out of 5]

Why is there suddenly so much tentacle erotica? Are we being groomed by aliens? My friends at SETI assure me that the answer is no, but I wonder if I can trust them.

[SheReadsALot · Rating 3 out of 5]

I felt just as clueless as a Sean Michael MC about this story before reading, Achievement: Tentacle Lust. Read awesome Cupcake's review. Figured what the hell, let's do this shit! I love tentacles.

I still feel even more clueless like a Sean Michael character. So, um, like yes? Um, somebody was needing? I think. I'm not sure.

What I am sure of is that this is P.W.P. And if there is anything Baby knows about, it's PWP.



So there's this fuckslut human named Alec. Alec likes tentacles in his fuckhole, don't you Alec? *grabs Alec's hair and shows his slutty mouth to the reader* Let's leave Alec back to getting his holes filled with squirmy tentacles...he doesn't discriminate. Right, slut? *slurps and moans can be heard quite sluttily*

*snaps fingers* He's busy tentsexing, excuse him, folks.

Anyway Alec the slut was kidnapped by a tentacled monster with a beak named, Tente, who is in fertilization heat and has a list of tent fucking that he wants to go through. He thought he grabbed a woman (because who can tell the difference in a scuba suit says Tente) and was looking for "tight pussy" but settled for asspussy instead.

Enter Alex, the newfound tentacle slut who can't stop fucking those buzzing tentacles.

Now the prompt picture is this piece of cephalopod candy:



Before you start flinging your knickers off...that's not Tente. That's the dastardly, inker and tentsex-blocking, Squalo. Squalo joins in with his tentacles that changed the eight appendage fuckfest into sixteen.

Tente's more on the homely side with a beak, slimy, buzzy tentacles, fleshy mantle and octopus like bald head...basically he's Zoidberg without the claws, add a beak:



Doesn't that just make you...slime?

*cringes*

So the tentsex turns in menage because hello Alec's a slut and wants those tentacles DEEP. Tentaclesex menage happens...and it wasn't that bad. I was tingly at a part, maybe? Possibly? I dunno? I'm confused.

The story is not the best tentacle sex story, I've read but it was full of fun. So...2.5 stars rounded up.

Um? Yes?



Thanks to the author and the team for this story. :)

[K]

very short fantasy piece
the prompter asked for I’m in for some hot tentacle porn and I’m okay with dub-con. If you get a whole story out of it, that’s cool but good piece of PWP is alright with me too. and this is what they got. Tente is the Dungeon Master at the Squd Fertlization Dungeon and has captured a human, Alec, to mate with. They are interupted by fellow squid Squalo, who like Tente is also in heat. Squalo joins in in to make this a threesome but then pushes it too far and gets thrown out the Dungeon. Vibratring tentacle cups included!

[Emma Sea]

Not sure how to review this one.
Possibly more porny tentacle gay erotica than porny tentacle m/m? Not that that's a bad thing.

[Neyjour · Rating 1 out of 5]

I LOVE tentacle smut, but this story did not work for me at all.

My main issue with it is that the author did not fulfill the prompt request. Well, to be more accurate, he/she only got 1 out of 3. PWP? Yes. Dub-con/non-con and mates? No and no...

Alec is an "abducted" diver, but in regards to the sex, there's no dub-con/non-con here. In fact, quite the opposite... Alec is extremely enthusiastic about it all. And while there is some "mating" (sex/fucking) going on, Tente certainly doesn't find himself "a mate" (lifemates, soulmates, bonding, etc.).

So, if you've read the prompt and are expecting a hot, sexy, forced seduction scene with a tentacle monster going "mine, mine, mine!" and making his human mate submit, you're going to be very disappointed.

The whole "Dungeon Master" thing was also really bizarre and jarring. Same with the introduction of the third character, Squalo. It was just so... weird and random/confusing, as was the arguing/fighting between him and Tente.

When I first saw the word count for this story I was sad that it was so short. But after reading it, I'm glad that it was. Any longer and it would have been a DNF for me.

[Jenna · Rating 1 out of 5]

I'm pretty sure I just got punked. Like, I think it was purposely written to make no sense. It was all over the place and I could hardly follow what was happening. This was my facial expression the entire time I was reading:



This was the first tent-sex story I've read where I was not turned on in the least. Thank goodness it was short!

[Vivian]

Unique mashup.

You don't often see tentacle porn and BDSM protocol paired, and I have to admit, that I found the beginning way more enticing prior to the dungeon derailment. Coitus interruptus for DM rules?! One thing that really worked for me--there's never too many tentacles.

[Adrianamae · Rating 2 out of 5]

This isn't a story, but a drawn-out tentacle sex scene.

[atmatos · Rating 1 out of 5]

Was hoping for a hot short but it was kind of boring.

[Samantha]

This was a pretty unique story of tentacles and such. Not my cup of tea, so I'm not going to rate it, but thank you to the author for their time and story!

[Matthew · Rating 4 out of 5]

A surprising amount of plot and world development for what seemed like essentially non-con porn without point. The sex is pretty light, not as detailed as you would expect and there are outlines of a story, but it was far too short to be anything. Reminds me some of K.A. Merikan, Playing with Food. Very short, porny but with a beginning of a world that could be a future story.

[Liz (Bugetta) · Rating 2 out of 5]

WTF did I just read? And not because tentacles were involved. It was just odd. The writing wasn't bad but the structure was weird. I almost felt like I feel when I accidentally start at book two in a series and I have no idea what's going on or who all the characters are or what the world building rules are.

[Ayanna]

(prompt pic:)

...is that period blood???

[Michelle Grant · Rating 3 out of 5]

This was more amusing than hot.

[Anomaly · Rating 2 out of 5]

That's for the meme, not to be taken literally. However, it perfectly sums up the gist of this tale. It's PWP at its core with some confusing and mood-ruining attempts at vague plot tossed into the middle. There's not much in the means of actually hitting the requested targets, but it's unique and at times rather steamy.

I kept thinking that the Dungeon Master stuff meant these were the characters of some twisted, drunk guys having a tabletop gaming session, and I thought that added some comedy and charm. Yeah, it was also annoying once the squids began bickering over who'd get to fuck the kidnapped man, but overall it was quick and quirky enough I didn't feel like I wasted time reading it.

It's my opinion that, despite being far from a work of literary genius, this book is superior to the redux version. At least this one is bold enough to admit it's just smut and doesn't make pretentious attempts to turn itself into a layered universe.

[Feloidae *The Bookworm* · Rating 1 out of 5]

Damn you curiosity!!

[Sarah☀️ Somerville · Rating 1 out of 5]

Just... no.

[Anomaly · Rating 1 out of 5]

Pretentiously Boring "Worldbuilding," Purple Prose, and Inconsistent Consent Issues

Look, I get it, the original was just smut for smut's sake. That can be embarrassing for an author. But you know that saying about not fixing things which aren't broken? Yeah, it applies here.

The original version of this story was a bit comical and confusing at times but had a decent balance between WTF moments and dark tentacle loving. This version doubles down on arguably the worst aspect of the original and weaves an inconsistent narrative about consent, lacking consent, Dungeon Masters, and two squid-creatures who seem to be confused whether they hate each other, want to bang each other, or want to fight over the same human.

At one point, the human is basically disregarded as trash. Soon after, they're fighting over him again. It's an endless, boring squabble. And, worst of all, what used to be lukewarm smut has been turned into horrible, cringeworthy, purple prose full of pretentious thesaurus soup.

I'd give this version a zero if I could. It took a quirky piece of PWP and turned it into an incessantly droning, annoying, often-contradictory (the author can't even settle on whether Cadia uses he/him or they/them pronouns) snooze-fest. Were it any longer, I'd have DNF'd this version.

[Serena Yates · Rating 2 out of 5]

My first attempt at seeing what tentacle sex is all about and I have to admit, I am confused. Not necessarily about the mechanics of it, but the motivation eludes me. Alec, the human in the equation seems more than willing (and must be a size queen), but Tent, the squid, makes less sense. Possible because he is in heat and gets interrupted by another squid trying to move in on the action. The thing that got to me most is that there is no clear ending, making this seem like more of one long scene rather than a full story.

If you like your stories a little strange, and if you're looking for a brief introduction to tentacle sex, then you may like this free short story.

[Serena · Rating 2 out of 5]

While this book did have a few redeeming qualities, due to a lack of editorial contribution I would not recommend.

My Rating System:
* couldn't finish, ** wouldn't recommend, *** would recommend, **** would read again, ***** have read again.

[Jeanne 'Divinae' · Rating 2 out of 5]

A very quick short story about a human and Squids(human/squid) during the squids breeding season. Tente is in charge of this particular breeding ground and his getting it on with Alec, the human. But we have a party crasher, named Squalo who comes and tries to get in the middle.

[Sandra]

Offered for FREE from the M/M Romance Group's Love's Landscapes event. Thank you too all the amazing authors who participated!

[Dawn · Rating 2 out of 5]

Ok, my first tentacle book and I have to say I had been curious why everyone was loving them, but this wasn't the story to learn that. This one is just tentacles and more tentacles with what I guess was sex, sex, sex.

[Regencyfan93 · Rating 2 out of 5]

I felt like there were a lot of ideas here that were never completed. I felt rushed from ticking one box to ticking another. Poor Alec having sensory overload yet no pleasure, not after the beginning.

[Alessandra · Rating 3 out of 5]

First time reading tentacle porn. I'm giving the writer three stars because, firstly, I applaud the effort, and secondly with the prompt and what she was working with, it wasn't a bad story. Will I read more tentacle porn after this, I'm not really sure.

[jenTed · Rating 2 out of 5]

Thought i'd give it a try but turns out it's just not my thing, but you might like it.