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280 pages, Kindle Edition
First published June 24, 2025
She nodded. “That would make sense to me.” He looked back over at what she already thought of as the clinic building. He smiled and pointed. “You want to take a look at the most recent progress?”Because this is one paragraph—and the rules of writing dialogue require each speaker to have his/her own paragraph—this appears to be one person talking. That’s possible, of course, except that it’s Tiffany who speaks after the action tag, “She nodded.” And it’s Timber who is showing her the most recent progress on the sanctuary’s buildings. There are several ways to correct this. For instance:
She nodded. “That would make sense to me.”It’s obvious now that not only are there two speakers, but we can tell which one is saying what.
He looked back over at what she already thought of as the clinic building. He smiled and pointed. “You want to take a look at the most recent progress?”