I was excited for this book but ultimately I was kinda disappointed.
First and foremost, I did not like the writing. To me it was clunky and a lot of the descriptions were a little odd. Most of the dialogue was stilted and unnatural, and quite a bit of it was extraneous and didn’t really need to exist. My least favorite thing though, was the telling. So much telling. Of everything. Not only was every little moment in between significant events given a sentence but every movement, look, dialogue tag was over explained. It made me feel like the author thought I was an idiot, and made the story much clunkier than it needs to be. For example, you do not need to tell us he—an athlete who just returned from practice—showered because he wanted to be refreshed. We understand why he showered, that is the purpose of a shower. There were countless others like that and it continuously took me out of the story.
In theory, I liked both of the characters, but the fact that I didn’t like the writing threw the metric off. I also didn’t feel like we got enough cohesive time with them as they became friends which made every part of their relationship feel rushed and unconvincing to me. There also wasn’t much development for either of them besides getting together.
I think in the end I liked Ethan better even though I thought the way he went back and forth about the level of his crush at the beginning was frustrating—presumably some amount was a missed copy edit but it was odd.
James was over the top in everything. He was overall a nice guy, but his level of physical closeness and flirty speech was excessive, worsened by the fact that he added a “bro” or “dude” to everything he did and said. He made a lot of moves that were very uncomfortable to me without precedent or conversation.
And then he had a realization and they immediately had sex. That is so wrong to me on so many levels, and I lost a lot of respect for the novel when it happened. Figuring out your queerness is a very vulnerable place to be in, and Ethan at least should have known that. Personally, I don’t think it’s an emotional place you can consent from, and even if it was, they needed to have a conversation first and foremost. It was made worse for me when they didn’t have a conversation about that at all. They talked about their relationship, but not about James, and I think that conversation really needed to happen, even just for James to have a chance to talk about this new important thing.
I did actually enjoy the mini plot that put pressure on the relationship. It wasn’t a breakup and it felt very realistic and pretty well done.
The second mini plot, because neither of them were truly a third act conflict in my opinion, was more Ethan centric, and that one I wasn’t fond of. It was nice in theory but there was so little time spent on it that it was overall rushed and unfulfilling. I think it should have been introduced much earlier and could have run through the second half of the novel as a background that culminated at the end. Or there should have been mention of it after—it was supposed to be a big step for him. Or it could have gone differently, and still there should have been shockwaves.
Overall I think this book needed another round of edits, and I don’t think I’ll be picking up another one by this author because of the writing.
Thank you to Gay Romance Reviews for the eARC in exchange for a honest review