Frankie and his team love playing football. There's always time for a game. And now that they have their magical football they're playing against teams they never imagined! Now, a paper dragon transports them to the country where football was invented - China! - where an ancient warrior comes back to life. He is determined to destroy The Great Wall of China. Can Frankie and his team save one of the wonders of world?
My 6 year old would give it 3. He liked it when frankie got the football in the tiger's mouth. I would give it 2. You can tell it's been written like a teacher would tell their class. Make sure there's fronted adverbials... Reported clauses... Well done. You're now a writer 🤦🏼♀️