Let me get this clear: I love Caitlin Moran. I think she is, bar a few cringe-worthy mis-steps, intelligent and hilarious.
I don't think I love her as a fiction writer, though.
On the face of it, I am all about this book: it's feminist book exploring abuse of power within the male-dominated music industry. Music! Feminism! Yay! And the general story was fairly enjoyable, the main character was fairly fun to read (mostly because she was essentially Caitlin Moran, who I love).
BUT.
But throughout it all, it seems like Caitlin never really settled into the first-person narration of her main character. At times, it became too obvious that Caitlin-the-outspoken-feminist was writing what she thought 19-year-old-girl-who-isn't-aware-of-sexism would think about things. The sentences that ended "this is just what girls do" felt a little too much like Caitlin was silently adding in parentheses ("BUT THAT'S BECAUSE THE WORLD IS SEXIST") that it didn't feel like a believable inner monologue.
But aside from that, there were other occasions that just felt more like Caitlin than the protagonist. And yes, I get that, despite what the opening page claims, the protagonist basically IS Caitlin. But times felt like obviously Caitlin thought of something witty, and decided to shoehorn it into the book, even though it didn't really feel like a natural observation of a first-person narrator. So maybe... a third-person narration style would suit Caitlin's voice better. It's almost like she's someone who is very used to being a journalist and a columnist, and 90% of her writing has been her writing her own thoughts, and being allowed to add Caitlin Moran's side-comments wherever she wants to.
My final issue with the writing is that the tense didn't always make sense. While mostly written in present tense, there were a few occasions where suddenly something would be described in the past tense - which, again, sounded like Caitlin make a narrator's observation from 2018 about what life was like in the 90s. Which is a totally and valid fine thing to do, if the rest of the book isn't written in present-tense and set in 1994. You can't talk about these being 'the days when people could smoke in gigs' if your narrator is not even aware of a future where you CAN'T smoke in gigs. And your 19 year old protagonist can't have a short paragraph talking about how nice her hangovers are, 'not like the hangovers you get when you're over 30' because... she's not over 30. She has no experience of that.
My one other gripe is the HUGE amount of grammatical errors. I will slightly let this off and hope they are corrected in future re-prints, but good lord there are a lot. There are words missing, there are grammatical errors (like "a enemy") and there are random mis-spelled words, like "sayid" instead of said. And... presumably proofreading is somebody's job? Whoever it was, may I suggest they hire me instead.
Anyway, despite all of these complaints I feel I should clarify again that I did enjoy the story, and I mostly enjoyed reading the protagonist. I just really wish that some tighter fine-tuning could have been done on the narration style - either by removing some elements that were clearly written by Caitlin rather than Dolly, or else just making the book narrated in the third person, and allow Caitlin full reign to give the commentary that is so clearly going on in her head as she's writing.
(Also, sidenote: I haven't read How To Build A Girl (to which this is the sequel) since it came out in 2015. I rated that one 4 stars, and I'm not sure whether I was just less critical for that one, or whether the issues I had with this book weren't very noticeable in that one.)
((Incidentally, I just went back and read my review of How To Build A Girl. Funnily enough, I had the exact same criticisms there - that the voice was basically indistinguishable from Caitlin Moran's own voice, and the fact it was very distracting when switching from present tense to some indeterminate future self 'looking back on those days'. So nice to know that the writing style is in fact consistent between both books, and that my irritation by it is also consistent.))