This turned out to be a bit of a conundrum.
The writing needs a lot of maturing and refining. A lot. The phrasing and sentence structure are so simple it almost hurts (especially in the narrative) – yet the dialogue is frequently cute, fun and even poignant, despite the lack of polish.
In some ways (particularly in tone) this felt very much like a kiddie book, a circumstance that taints the sexual references somewhat, at least at first. Later on either I got used to the style or the sexual aspects just matched the emotional connection of the guys. Not that this is super steamy. I mean, explicit, yeah. Just not your usual type of sexy.
Either way, this book is a lot better than it appears to be.
I mean, I was irritated with Duncan for quite a while for being so wishy-washy about things with Patrick, and I freely admit that it would have been easy to resent Patrick’s pushiness (much easier, actually, had I known at the time he’d turn out to be so toppy). But then I realized that they in fact made sense as people. It’s strange because it took me a while to see this underneath the veneer of simplistic sentence structures and over-explanatory statements (in the description rather than general repetitiveness or character preachiness, thank god).
Even the side characters were cool in their own ways. Although I am still mystified by the fact that almost (?) every single guy appearing in this story is gay (and everyone assumes this without any clear hints towards that fact).
Wendy, who is clearly more than a side character here, does not fall victim to the plot device puppet syndrome as do so many of kids in fiction. I gather the author tends to go for stories about creating a family around a child or two and that seems like a solid choice, since the one here definitely comes across as quirky and opinionated in the manner I remember from my own childhood.
On the other hand, there’s also the rather large issue of the narrative jumping backwards upon most viewpoint shifts, usually detailing again what we just read but from the other angle – and not in the usual way (i.e. considerably more than just a few seconds or a minute, and in action rather than reference). It makes especially things like sex scenes or emotionally intense scenes feel like they loop backwards and thereby breaks the tension.
And yet? I stand by what I said. This story is a lot better than it presents itself. It’s true that it wasn’t the most exciting thing, and seemed to drag on for a while, and it’s super-happy-mushy-perfect in its message and outcome, and I strongly recommend taking a break with something else after reading anything by this author – but I finished this full of happiness and smiling all over my face.