I'm not going to spend a lot of time on this review other than to confirm that this is now a candidate for my own "Worst Book Read in 2024" listing. And the only other book on my list so far was B-A-D in every way! Sadly though, "One Eye Open" was an absolutely boring and unengaging collection of what I can only label middle-age grade suitable "spooky" stories, none of which came even close to anything resembling horror. In fact, I was keeping notes up until about Chapter 8 but because each one of my summaries was a repeat - "amateurish writing style, not even slightly interesting, abysmal editing" - I quickly decided to just save my time. Which was a smart decision as these aspects just got worse and worse as the pages slogged by. What a shame to waste such a great cover (the one shown on Amazon, not here) on such a poor collection.
My proposal would be: first, have someone who knows the difference between "your" and "you're" as well as how to punctuate and capitalize correctly when someone is speaking re-edit this entire book. This means getting someone with a grasp of (as a few examples only) what a fragment is, how to avoid the random use of commas, and where to look for the dozens of missing fullstops to clean things up. Quite bluntly put, a book should not be released in this form whether from a major publishing house or from someone using Kindle Vella to try and gain an audience. Secondly, remove any excessive violence and/or the presence of other bodily harm, then replace all curse words and finally, repackage this as a collection for kids/young adults. It's a LOT closer to that already than it is to being a book suitable - and interesting - for adults.