Initial thoughts:
Liked -
1) The usual camaraderie of the guys, that is characteristic of the series
2) Nikolai - He just sounds yummy. I love his relationship with Vince, love how they openly say they love each other, and love how badass he is.
3) Devin - He is bad ass and no nonsense and I LUVVS him.
Didn't work for me -
1)Vince - Vicious Vince. The problem I have with Vince's character is exactly what I feared I would have when he was presented at the end of the last book. We are presented with two sides of his character that never really knit together to create the vicious character he should be. The main problem with Vince is that there is entirely too much telling and not enough showing. We are told that he dismembered his parents' killers, we're told that he's cold and unfeeling and we're told that his heart has been closed for years, yet the Vince that the reader sees on paper is funny, flirtatious, teasing, a good team member, a good friend and a loving father. Who exactly is he cold and unfeeling with?? His enemies?? He should be!!
Vince was continually telling us he was an asshole and it just sounded like he was being self-important because we never saw it! It took everyone else to keep pounding it into our heads that he was an animal, he was cold, he was uncaring, he's fallen in love, he's in love, did you know he's in love, we've never seen him so in love. We get it!! Everyone else was telling us what was going on with Vince. Vince himself was literally telling us what was going on. Someone with as many issues as Vince had would never tell Keegan his whole life story in a matter of days, or say stuff like, "My heart has been closed off. I haven't felt anything in years...blah blah blah." Would.Not.Happen. What needed to happen was that we needed to see Vince be an asshole to other people so that his treatment of Keegan would be monumentally different. Instead, we're supposed to be moved because he's upset that Keegan's hurt and there's Nikolai to drum it into our heads in case we missed it the first fifty million times someone else said it, that Vince never feels anything for anyone. Who are we using as a comparison?? Are we really to believe that if Lorenzo had been shot Vince would have just shrugged his shoulders and said, 'Tough'? It seems like we're only reminded of how vicious Vince is when there's a point to be made. The second night he sees Keegan in the club, he 'rescues' him from another guy by taking him into his arms and dancing closely with him, but when Vince gets hurt and Keegan wants to look at it Vince says, "I don't allow just anyone to touch me." Vince, sit down, zip your lips and let Keegan look at your doggone wound. It just felt like all the characters were running around saying, "It's storming outside! It's the worst storm we've seen in years! Board up the windows!" But then you decide to look for yourself and find yourself thinking, 'It's really only partly cloudy." The character just didn't live up to the hype.
Was he a skilled killer? I guess. He didn't really do anything that isn't done in the everyday life of every other mercenary character/assassin/special ops agent I've read. Actually, clearly, I've read some pretty sick characters because he didn't even come close. It's all in the details and everything that supposedly makes Vince vicious is done off page. On page, he shoots out some knees, stabs someone in the lungs and in the hand...Okayyyy. I actually feel that Devin was more vicious than he was...and I'm really getting a vicious streak in Nikolai. Yummm Nikolai.
So now, we're at the love story. The key to buying into this love story is in believing that a) Vince is really vicious and emotionally stunted and b) Keegan somehow penetrates the wall he's surrounded himself with. Sigh. First of all, Vince is so flirtatious and fun with Keegan that it throws the first theory out the window. I know (from fanfic, yes I did read it) that he's supposedly a jokester and male whore, but that image doesn't add up to a vicious character. Ok, so Vince wants Keegan in bed and Keegan has been in lust with Vince for over a decade. Vince and Keegan share their first two kisses and some frontage and all of a sudden Vince is thinking relationship. Uh, what?? It just wasn't believable, nor was the fact that Keegan finally decides to have sex with Vince after he slams him into a wall and beats the crap out of him. Really?? Keegan is a lovesick schoolgirl because he's inexperienced and Vince 'has never felt this way before' and is practically willing to die for Keegan in all of a week. It was just way too quick, cliched and clunky and didn't work for me.
Then, we have a 'Zero At The Bone' moment and all hell breaks loose. Devin comes in, THANK GOD and so does Nikolai. THANK GOD SQUARED.
The rescue takes all of one-two pages and the violent showdown we've all been waiting for takes place, you guessed it, off-page. Then we're subjected to a whole bunch of unrealistic sappiness and hive inducing, groan-worthy dialogue that I was forced to bail on to keep my sanity.
2) Keegan
I was a bit worried about Keegan being the match for Vince because he was 'small and pretty' but, physically, he ended up being fine. I just didn't expect him to be so....inept. He kept saying that he could take care of himself and we're told he has a vicious right hook but, really, I think Vince was just being kind. It's not enough that Keegan is small and pretty, he had to have a stuttering problem and a nervous condition that made him sprout spontaneous erections. Really?? Could we make him anymore ridiculous? The best scene in the entire book between Keegan and Vince is when Vince body slams him into a wall. I was like yes!! Vicious Vince is here! Then he gets all corny and lame and blows the whole thing to smithereens. Keegan tells Vince exactly why he was chosen for the assignment and, really, I can see why everyone was worried about him because...did his hand actually shake when he aimed the gun at Vince? Ugh.
So, those were the main things that didn't work for me - the main characters. As usual, there was a bunch of giggling and snickering from grown men. Vince actually snickered once and I almost drop-kicked my kindle. It's not that 'giggling' is a particular trait of ONE character and makes THAT character that character *rolls eyes*. It's that they ALL at some point giggle and snicker. I just auto corrected 'giggled' and 'snickered,' with 'smirked' in my head while I was reading because I can more see that happening. They are FBI agents, assassins and more importantly, adult men. It just doesn't fit. Except Riley, who's a big kid. I expect it, and I find it endearing. Riley's so cute. For everyone else, no. Thank God, they mostly start chuckling later on in the book.
There is still the misuse of the present tense of lie (to lie down), vs the past tense (lay). The book is written in the past tense. It jolts me out of the story every time because the rest of the book is virtually error free (which is to be commended). I thought for sure it had to be me, so I copied and pasted a few sentences into Word and sure enough, squiggly line under the word lie.
All in all, I had suchhhhhh high hopes for this one but they didn't pan out. Really, only two things saved this from being one star - Devin and Nikolai.