DNF 11%
It's the wild wild west of grammar, punctuation and sentence structure in this book. At 11% in, I reported thirty-five errors to Amazon.
There are some basic rules the author doesn't understand: First, any number under 100 is typed out (exceptions exist). Second, the author doesn't understand how to format terms of endearment correctly. And third, this author hasn't met a comma splice that she doesn't love.
And don't even get me started on the very stupid nicknames that the MMC's give the FMC after only being in her presence for like two minutes. I've started to realize that the less mature authors use nicknames as crutches and this book further solidifies that point.
The places, people, and city weren't developed. I didn't feel like I was seeing London from the FMC's eyes. While the FMC was working, I didn't feel like I was with her. There was a lack of depth, imagery, and maturity in the writing.
Oh, and within thirty seconds of meeting the FMC, one of the MMC's threatens sexual punishment against her.
As a new author, Elizabeth fell into the trap of not knowing how to move the plot forward without rewinding the chapter. For example, if we read a scene from the FMC's POV, we had to relive that scene from one of the MMC's POVs. It was unnecessary.