I’ve gotten to chapter ten and I’m really really curious if chat gpt helped her write this. It does not sound like a 30 year old wrote this, nor does it sounds like it was written recently. It sounds like a 20-year-old several years ago wrote some of it and a 70-year-old wrote other parts of it and then someone 30 sprinkled in. That’s the best way I have to describe it.
I’m not one to dnf but I’m getting very very close with this one.
It’s cringy, in your face, repetitive, lacks the swoon of it all, the verbiage of things actually makes me reread just to say “what the crap” and show my friends…. This book confuses them as well.
Also …. “was she singing along to an upbeat tune?” Partched. “ so buzz me if you arrive early” who says that? Text me- she means text me ( turning on her laptop) firing up the software-
When referring to her phone she still says “smart phone” I’m sorry lovely lady but that term got retired like nearly 12 years ago. “Mom you don’t page me in the middle of a hockey game why are you paging me now” oh and you can’t video chat on landlines fyi. Who has a land line these days? My great grandma doesn’t even have a landline anymore more “move it along stat” . Playing the wordle app with my brother. Bird watching When talking about how to do somthing eco friendly on a budget she refers to it as: good for both pocket books and the planet….. what 20-30 year old calls a wallet a pocket book?
Sure any of these can sound normal but combined with all the things that keep being said it just feels old, outdated mic of lingo, which isn’t bad but it also just doesn’t fit the characters and their age
Also if you are going into this for the Hockey romance of it all- don’t bother. There are many many very good books out there that are actual hockey romance books. Wow the main dude might be a hockey player. You don’t get much of that other than intentions of him being a hockey player. This is his last season and this is his last season and this is his last season. This is his last season and this is his last season and he has to make a good one to make it a good one has a good one and she was at my game. I have to train because I have to make this a good last year. No that was not an accident it’s just about all you get from the hockey side of it other than him being a hockey player. That’s the most you get a hockey in this. It doesn’t act like a hockey player.
Pre read : (chapter 2): just started this and I’m SO hooked!!!! 😍 The narrators are amazing and it’s seriously FUN!!!! :D I’d just finished a dark mafia romance and then, totally by accident, I clicked this and wow… so glad I did!!!! 😂 I’ve actually laughed out loud?! It gives me that “listening to my best friend” vibe and I can’t stop!! 😭💖 And the BEST part? Dual narration done right: the guy for the guys, the woman for the women ❤️🙌 None of that cringe chapter-to-chapter swapping nonsense. 💋♥️ And I may be bias, but we get a ginger FMC!!!!
(Still chapter 2): K, it’s a little bit too insta-cheesy, attraction served on a platter, and a bit much—it could really hit with some people. But coming from the books I just finished, it feels very… there… in your face. And mentally, I’m softly pushing it back, asking for some space, because I’m not used to things just being like bam! In your face… you don’t have to work for it, it’s just served up. Not sure if I’m feeling like it’s cheap or not, but we’ll see how this goes. I think part of me just needs to adjust to a story that doesn’t make me work for every connection—it’s weirdly refreshing, but also a little jarring
(I’m to mid Chapter 6 ) I don’t know how to properly explain it other then muuuuuuuuultiple portions of this really feel like it was written by my grandma? But the author is 30?
The FMc was talking about the weird things that happened on buses like watching Michael Scott clips on full volume or clipping your toenails and the MMC was like: “ the driver?” FMC: “I don’t know how a driver would do thatI mean in the passengers “ and he says mentally “wow she’s gonna be hard to keep up with, but I’m up for a challenge” I’m sorry but what in that conversation makes you feel like she’s hard to keep up with? I feel like that’s a very logical conclusion that it would be the passengers and not the bus driver? How slow are you dude?
The way boss babe and slay is use is a little cringy and feels forced