2.5 stars, 2 chilis
I was so very excited to be approved for an arc of this book— human girl is transported into a demon world where she's lost all her memories and has to work in Hel's Circus to try and get a ticket home? Grumpy Demon MMC? IT'S PIERCED??
Sign me right up.
The bones of this story were so, so good, the idea, the concept, the plot, the characters, the setting— so good.
This is just one opinion, but I felt it needed some major developmental edits. A lot of the world building is done through Gemma having a Q&A with almost every character she meets, which became a little bit tedious for me as a reader because, rather than experiencing the story, I was just being told it.
There are also a number of plot things that just didnt make sense to me at all. Luc, the King of Hel, takes an item from the MMC Draven that was a family heirloom. As a reader, I did not feel the explanation for this made sense. it was already in his family, it wasn't adding anything extra or making more of this item exist for him to be allowed to keep it AND it would have allowed him to do his job better— a job that he worked FOR LUC.
I also didn't totally understand or believe the motivations for why Gemma seems to kind of be allowed to do whatever she wants.
Gemma seems to basically be able to walk into the office for the King of Hel any time she wants and just speak to him whenever. There is a scene towards the end of the book where she essentially interrupts a meeting of world leaders to ask Luc a question (that she already had an answer to??) that 100% could have waited until it was over and it just felt so strange that she was able to just.. call him for kind of nothing...
One major thing that stood out to me was that the plot climax is fully resolved by about 80% and then there is about 20% of the book that felt like a very long, drawn out epilogue. It wasn't necessarily that these things weren't interesting or important, but I think parts of them could have been put earlier, or really condensed. There were quite a few scenes of groups gathering to just have a fun conversation but didn't seem to have a point to drive the plot forward until the very end of the scene.
This one is just a major pet peeve, but it did impact the believably of the relationship for me a lot and it's that Draven, at one point, comes to accuse Gemma of something with really no proof whatsoever. He threatens her and verbally and physically assaults her and then when she's basically crying and having a panic attack he kisses her and then they have sex??? Without him apologizing or admitting what he did was really messed up and kind of abusive?? Afterwards, it's noted that he finished inside her and he gets up to clean himself off and NO MENTION THAT HE DOES SO FOR HER?? Idk, that last part might seem small, but it bothered me a lot, like girl, do better, he needs to clean up his mess.
anyway, I still finished it, the bones of the story were fun, but I think it could have been so much more. So many scenes felt too long or "what's the point of this??" just to give a little bit of world building or one tiny thing at the end to drive the plot, so it felt very disjointed and made the pacing difficult to follow.
If you read it, I hope you love it because there really is a good story in there.
tropes if you'd like to have them:
hate to love
found family
forced proximity
kink friendly
queer world
amnesia
isekai/displaced
pierced peen
I was gifted an eARC of Dance for Demons through Haus of Fables— thank you so much for the opportunity to read this eBook!