I'm amazed that a book with 503 pages had no advancement in plot, until the last five pages.
The FMC is lauded as being a first class undercover agent; having skills that no one else around her has. Yet, she messes up her assignment ALL the time and doesn't know how to cover her tracks. This is just another example of an author that wants to have a kickass FMC, but makes her dumb as rocks. At no point did I believe that she was some super agent sent to take down an organization. We don't see her do anything that makes her doing a job of an undercover agent believable.
Every day, the FMC spirals due to being home, yet she proclaims that she is a government agent capable of doing the best work. Every day we have to listen while she hypes herself up for her assignment.
Within the first 3 chapters, the FMC has a severe case of BBS and she literally does not pick up on ANY of the clues her bathroom hookup was saying. She kept "pushing those thoughts aside." *rolls eyes*
Jordan and Simon were soooooooo very annoying. They ruined every chapter they were featured in. Simon was the "new friend in the academy" trope; he gets white girl wasted, talks like a freshman girl, and is just the happiest person eveh. It's a cut and paste from every other academy/college dorm mate character. Jordan was just another example of how these "agents" are just children playing adult games. While undercover, HE CALLS THE FMC BY HER GIRL NAME and not her new name. Like, what? The banter between him and the FMC is childish and doesn't enhance the story at all. FMC also put a hard boundary down: "don't call me Livy, it hurts too much." Jordan doesn't care. He thinks its cute and funny when Olivia gets angry. He also has some of the WORST lines in the book. For example: “Eh, suit yourself. When you do want to tell me more, just ring-a-ling-a-ding me.” Who in the ever loving fuck says that?
The author deploys book stuffing techniques. First, the header of each chapter takes up 2/3 of the page. And second, the book is full of flashbacks that do not add anything to character development, plot or theme. Because they don't add anything of substance to the story, they were only there to up the word count so the book would be longer.
There is a TON of repetition of phrases, ideas, terms, and information.
Color me shocked that the author has an extensive catalog and she is making basic editing and formatting errors. Author states that she has several editors looking at her work, but she must not listen to their feedback or maybe they don't understand standard formatting and grammar. The author chooses to capitalize terms of endearments or even insults. Like, sir or even dude. Yes, the author called someone Dude.
As with most KU authors, this author doesn't know how to format terms of endearment correctly. PSA to the author: terms of endearment are not capitalized unless their placement in a sentence warrants it.
Correct: "Here, drink this dear."
Not correct: "Here, drink this Dear."
FMC's name: Olivia
Nicknames: sunshine, little ghost, crumpet, liv, livy, Oliver, Oli, Agent Princess, spitfire, trouble.
old chap - 15 times (in like 4 chapters)
crumpet - 9 times (in like 2-3 chapters)