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439 pages, Kindle Edition
Published June 13, 2025
Harry Potter meets City of Gods and Monsters
This was a solid 3.5/5 stars, and if I had to guess, I think this will be a classic case of: "The first book was good, the second book was better."
Where I struggled:
☆ Continuity errors - there were so many areas that needed to be cleaned up. Things like 'One moment the character is described as sitting, then standing, back to sitting', Hair up one minute, down the next, then back up. In one scene, the characters are described as being 'within inches' of each other (enough to tuck hair behind an ear), and yet we spend a page continuously noting them taking more and more steps towards each other (when uh... there should be literally nowhere to go / no way to get any closer). The kind of errors that would have most likely been cleared up if sent through an editor.
☆ Overused descripters - usually the same ones used repeatedly and truthfully, unnecessarily. (I'd love to know how many times the word dangerous is used in relation to our MMC throughout the book).
☆ Skipped over information - Things like, our character removing something very important and handing it to someone for inspection, and it's not described as being given back. Or, our 'main' cast of characters briefly interacting with another group, and then in the next scene we have 'didn't we decide to stay away from this bad crowd??' (like chill, you met once. briefly. And you didn't talk....? But sure, it's a witch hunt)
☆ Disconnected internal thought processes- There were a lot of moments where internally, the main character has suddenly come to a conclusion despite us, as a reader, not having all the information to understand how we came to that conclusion, as it does not match the external actions that just occurred. Several chapters end with a very ominous, matter-of-fact conclusion that left me in a state of 'wait, what? How'd we get to that all of a sudden?'
☆ Choppy world building - The author was setting up a large world with heavy lore, and while I caught on to the ideas of it quickly, that does not mean it felt smooth. At all.
☆Zero to a hundred plot - I'm talking, we're on like day two of school, and somehow everybody is already full steam ahead, we're all best friends, and we're all 100% on board with a crazy plan. There's no buildup whatsoever.
☆The use of my least favorite statement to ever exist in works of fiction - "I let go of a breath I didn't even realize I was holding" -- or some variation, used multiple times.
So - did I have a lot to pick apart when it came to this debut novel? Absolutely. Did I also read it in under 24 hours? You're damn right. That kindle was permanently attached to my hand until I finished it, and I'm more than eager to jump into book two because, while there were definitely some issues, the author also does a lot of things right, and those things very much outshine the bad.
What this story gets right:
☆Mood/Atmosphere - The author makes you really feel your surroundings. While there is a lot of fluff at times, she still sets a beautifully haunting gothic scene.
☆The betrayal hook - I kid you not when I say I have a list of questions/theories on my phone's notepad about situations unfolding. Do I doubt the loyalties of some of the friends? You bet your ass. Do I have a specific suspicion about our MMC and the connection to the FMC? Sure do, (I lowkey don't think I'm right, but I'd be shook if I was!) and books SHOULD do this to you, especially when there are three books to go. It's these kinds of hooks that keep you wanting to push forward.
☆Found Family - I love stories with a good, sturdy found family (It's my favorite thing about Kayla Edwards series, despite me having a lot of similar issues with that series that I do with this one). I think there's a snake in our midst, though.
☆The slow burn - Tension and yearning are better than any smut scene, and I will die on this hill. I want to feel it. I want to be screaming at the characters to cross the line, and this story delivers on that tenfold.
Am I starting book two as soon as I submit this review?
Why yes, yes I am.