I'm realizing that I rate self published novels along a different metric than enterprise published novels. Probably because enterprise novels already have a baseline for editing/etc, so I don't usually have to get distracted by the writing for things like that.
Anyway, given that, Artificial Evil is pretty solid self published 3. No spelling or formatting errors (that I noticed), but it could stand a once over for consistency and tone. Things like the spelling of "mould," which, to its credit, was consistent throughout the novel, but made no sense within the larger content of the book. Characters magically appeared out of nowhere (most glaringly, the protagonist's mother lacks a name til it's casually dropped about 6 pages in to her existence, but in such a manner that it's assumed that we already know it.) Most of the characters lack any real interpersonal development - it's very obvious that Gerry and Petal are destined for some sort of romantic interest in each other, but it's danced around and never solidified until it's thrust in our face at the very end. Complicated plot dumps are also a hindrance, especially when they're dumped in the middle of key action sequences. And, of course, it comes with my number one complaint about self published kindle novels: it doesn't resolve. The final chapters very obviously build to an immediate sequel, introducing new characters and elements at a point where the book, if it were actually its own entity, would be resolving what we've spent the last 330 pages engaging in. Here, as everywhere, I find that to be a trite and misleading attempt to get readers to buy more material. (If you'd like to release a novel in sections, that's one thing, but please be upfront about the fact that your 3 part "series" is not, in fact, a series, so much as 3 parts of the same book.)
But the pacing is good, the story is interesting, and nothing about this novel is so completely unlikeable or uncouth as to render it unreadable. I know that doesn't sound like high praise, but for self published works, it can be.
All in all, I'd describe this as a sci-fi beach read. If anything, it's several steps above Confessions of a Shopaholic.
Postscript, apologies to Barnes for using this review and taking his work to task over issues that I have with most of the self publishing industry, not specifically his work. I think I threadjacked my own thread.