Originally, I quit this novel a third of the way in. Then I took another look and read the whole thing after all. I *like* it and appreciate the author's insights into human motivations, behaviors and dynamics. No tropes of the thriller genre! The return of the father (fresh from his third prison stint, this one lasting 17 years) seems almost like a fairy tale (he cooks! he washes dishes and helps out with the heroine's teenage son, who needs a father, and the "cool" felon of a grandfather fills the bill). Still, this man is flawed enough to keep it real.
I think third person (or even omniscient) Point of View would have worked better than dad's and daughter's alternating first POV narrative, but when I set aside any pet peeves or personal objections, and just get into the story, it was a fun place to be for a few hours of my life.
I love that this is, at heart, a fairy tale. No, nothing in the synopsis would give that away. There are no fairies, gnomes, magic wands, any of that. But there is a certain element of telling the Universe your heart's desire and having it granted. If this had been labeled New Age or Happily Ever After, I might not have given it a second glance, but the characters are real people, flawed humans who make mistakes and wish for forgiveness and a chance to make amends. That, I can't resist.
Is it predictable? Sure. But there are surprises. Normally in chick lit, if the heroine tries an online dating service, the reader is subjected to one bad-date cliche after another. Not here. One date, one guy, and we're spared the tropes and over-done attempts at humor that continue to plague other books in the women's fiction and humor genres.
I was pleasantly surprised, too, that the plot never devolved into a thriller. We know from the first lines Jake (the boyfriend) speaks that he's nothing but trouble. I expected him to cause far more damage, but again, the reader is spared a bunch of contrived horrors like we'd get in the thriller genre (which I avoid for that reason).
We know the dad who comes knocking after seventeen years in prison is going to make himself useful and endear himself to his daughter. The fun is in seeing how he does that, and what his missteps will be. I was relieved that no worst-case scenarios deliver the wearying messagethat life is so cruel and people never change.
Why do I think of this as a fairy tale? Just because good things happen to people who decide to forgive, offer second chances, and make amends for their own transgressions? Well, yes. Sort of. This is not a tightly plotted, tautly crafted tale, but a somewhat episodic story where some bad stuff happens, but people decide to take responsibility for their own mistakes and forgive others theirs, and overall, this is rewarded. It's so simple, really, yet so rare, in today's market.
I love happy endings, second chances, and stories that make us feel good without being total fantasy.
What I wrote before is still true, but once I made up my mind to accept Ronnie's point of view instead of thinking "This sounds like a woman trying to write a man's POV," I was able to enter into the story and enjoy it. Also, while first-person POV is apparently everyone else's favorite, I believe this novel would have sounded more authentic in third person, Deep Point of View. Maybe even (gasp!) omniscient. Today's omniscient narrative isn't what it was in 19th Century literature.
And here is the original review:
This is a novel that millions of women may love, but I'm just not one of them. The narrator talks about herself, her family, her job, and it might sound witty and amusing to most people, but for me she's overly chatty. At first I was nodding:
"...with a stick of butter, salt, pepper, and onions, I can totally make something nice happen to a pork loin. And if I put it on some great Fiest ware, I almost look like I know what I'm doing."
She spends so much time telling us about this pork loin, I knew something terrible had to happen to it.. There, she does not disappoint. But it's a stretch for us to believe she doesn't just set the hot Fiesta ware full of meat *down safe* on the table before going to answer the door. This sounds super-trivial, I know, but the opening pages of a novel help me decide if I want to spend several hours of my life in this person's head, The prologue didn't hook me, but I kept going anyway, because I love the synopsis and the father's thoughts on moving in with his daughter: "She'll be thrilled, right?"
I was looking forward to her father's point of view, but his "voice' does not ring true as that of a felon, a guy who's been in prison for years. Maybe first person POV was a bad choice here.. Ronnie tells us he's sort of a jailhouse therapist: "I know women so well, and I've done so much reading, dudes just started coming to me and talking to me about their problems, especially with the ladies, and pretty soon I was up to my ears in cigarettes and candy bars that I was taking trade."
Am I the only woman reader who'll pause at all this inner monologue and think it doesn't sound like a guy should sound? Far be it from me to say that men must fit certain stereotypes, but "voice" matters, and I've read a lot of guy novels, written by guys, and fell in love with the voice immediately.
Speaking of inner monologue, there's far more of that than there is action. It takes pages and pages of Nicki describing her house hunt, her boyfriend, her son, her friend, before we get to her dad's chapter. He takes several pages to get to the part we already know from the back cover: he's about to get out of jail. Pages, pages, and more pages until Ronnie is at Nicki's door, waiting for her to answer his knock.
I might come back to this and read all the way to the end, but with so much competition for my attention from other novels, I probably will not. This is the sort of story I skim in search of the quirky humor that the synopsis promised.
The author is successful and highly accomplished, one of the writers for the TV show Mad Men, which I've tried watching but didn't care to get past episode one, so my opinion is worth every penny you paid for it. Millions of people love this sort of thing. I'm drawn more to writers like Sean Costello ("Squall" is hilarious and the POV is spot-on for every single character); Sam Neumann, Tigg Carson, Milo James Fowler, John L. Monk, and women who also happen to be scientists: E.E. Giorgi, Amy Rogers, Dr. Gina DeMarco (hilarious!) or women who almost became scientists: Tam Linsey, A.R. Taylor ("Sex, Rain and Cold Fusion" had me laughing out loud). Most of these Indie Authors haven't show up at NetGalley, which is why I've been writing hundreds of reviews at Perihelion Science Fiction ezine, goodreads and Amazon, and my blog, rather than finish every book that I selected via NetGalley. I'm sorry to be so remiss, but at the other sites, I'm not held accountable when I download sample chapters of an ebook and decide not to keep reading.
I'm fine with an opinionated narrator, and especially with an unreliable narrator. I hoped to see her suffer a bit of a come-uppance on this assertion: "Very few men have the strength to be with a woman who wants them but doesn't need them." She tells the reader she's successful and doesn't "need" a man, which is a good message, but in a novel, the reader tends to expect the heroine's assumptions and assertions to be challenged.