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Broken Vows #1
Cruel Deception
Charlotte had just undergone a mastectomy.
Marriage was the last thing on her mind.
But to honor her grandfather’s dying wish, she agreed to marry the second grandson of New York’s most powerful mafia family.
It was supposed to be cold. Strategic. Loveless.
Until the veil lifted at the altar—
And it wasn’t her fiancé standing there.
It was Cassian Moretti.
Her fiancé’s older brother.
The man she kissed once to escape danger.
The man who never forgot.
He’d kidnapped his own brother.
Planted a bomb beneath the church.
And told the Marry us, or watch it burn.
So she became his.
Not out of love—
But out of fire, obsession, and control.
He locked her away.
Mocked her mastectomy scars.
Told her she looked like a man.
Only touched her in the dark—never face-to-face.
She was his wife.
His prisoner.
His punishment.
Until she left.
No warning.
No note.
Just silence.
Now, he’s tearing through cities—
Destroying anyone who might know where she’s gone.
Because losing her
Was the one wound
He’ll never survive.
Marriage was the last thing on her mind.
But to honor her grandfather’s dying wish, she agreed to marry the second grandson of New York’s most powerful mafia family.
It was supposed to be cold. Strategic. Loveless.
Until the veil lifted at the altar—
And it wasn’t her fiancé standing there.
It was Cassian Moretti.
Her fiancé’s older brother.
The man she kissed once to escape danger.
The man who never forgot.
He’d kidnapped his own brother.
Planted a bomb beneath the church.
And told the Marry us, or watch it burn.
So she became his.
Not out of love—
But out of fire, obsession, and control.
He locked her away.
Mocked her mastectomy scars.
Told her she looked like a man.
Only touched her in the dark—never face-to-face.
She was his wife.
His prisoner.
His punishment.
Until she left.
No warning.
No note.
Just silence.
Now, he’s tearing through cities—
Destroying anyone who might know where she’s gone.
Because losing her
Was the one wound
He’ll never survive.
270 pages, Kindle Edition
Published July 7, 2025
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About the author
O.S. Feathers
12 books111 followersO.S Feathers writes dark, twisty love stories about morally questionable men and the fierce, brilliant women who bring them to their knees, sometimes literally. She has a soft spot for arranged marriages, possessive antiheroes, and heroines who know how to shoot or at least threaten with style.
She drinks too much coffee, lives for slow-burn tension, and has never met a knife-to-throat scene she didn’t love. When she’s not writing, she’s probably researching obscure Russian swear words, rewriting a spicy chapter for the third time, or convincing her characters that therapy is not, in fact, the enemy.
If you like your love stories messy, dangerous, and just a little unhinged, she’s got you.
She drinks too much coffee, lives for slow-burn tension, and has never met a knife-to-throat scene she didn’t love. When she’s not writing, she’s probably researching obscure Russian swear words, rewriting a spicy chapter for the third time, or convincing her characters that therapy is not, in fact, the enemy.
If you like your love stories messy, dangerous, and just a little unhinged, she’s got you.
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August 5, 2025
I’m not saying this book was written by AI, but… actually, no, that is what I’m saying. Because I need someone to explain to me how this passed the human review stage with filler like:
All that filler… just for her evil father to show up. I'm crying, but not in the way the author intended.
The plot setup is promising: arranged marriage, mafia romance, a little twist with Cassian marrying her instead of his brother Luca to “save” her from abuse. I was here for it. Cassian, our dark prince, is gentle with her, helps her avenge her childhood abusers, and literally protects her from everyone, including her evil family. So why does Charlotte keep sabotaging him? Why is she so allergic to logic?
Cassian has like two rules: don’t leave the house without telling him first, and because psycho Luca is still obsessed with you and we don’t want you dead, DONT TALK TO HIM. Charlotte hears: field trip at Luca's! time to go find mommy! Girl, what are we doing?
And speaking of plot threads:
Long-lost brother? ✅
Missing mother? ✅
Grandfather’s dying wish? ✅
Evil dad reappearing? ✅
Luca still trying to steal her back? ✅
Oh yeah, and she had cancer and a double mastectomy. This book does have everything.
Let’s talk about her brother, Vincent, for a second. He reappears after 10 years, acts mysterious, tells her to kill her husband, and Charlotte suddenly trusts him more than her actual husband who has, to date:
- Saved her life repeatedly (I think 5 times in the first book)
- Helped her get revenge on her rapists
- Never touched another woman after they got married
- Been endlessly patient with her trauma and body insecurities
AND YET. She believes every random accusation about him. Shoots him at one point. And of course when he gets a little dark and unhinged toward the end after her betrayal of SHOOTING HIM, everyone’s shocked.
His behavior at the end was not okay obviously. There’s one sex scene toward the end that is completely out of character and honestly disturbing, but tbh that felt more like GPT's memory problems and it forgetting who Cassian was supposed to be as a character. This book could definitely use a human editor.
I’m convinced the writing process for some of the pages was:
“Hey ChatGPT, what would give maximum shock value in chapter 13?”
“Kill the ex.”
“Perfect. On it.”
Now onto the spice. I don’t mean to keep beating this AI drum but...
This is text-to-speech erotica. I know the prompt was “write me a spicy scene using only short declarative sentences.”
And then there’s this:
In short, this book had potential, but it got swallowed up in melodramatic plot layering, and wildly inconsistent character logic due to over reliance on AI. I think if we remove a few pages of that (as per my examples above), and get some more of the author's own voice in, this book could have been so much better.
Cassian deserved better. Honestly, so did Charlotte, but not in the way she thinks.
"Bang. Bang. Bang.
My blood was turning to ice.
Someone was at the door.
Another crash.
Another bang.
It burst open.
My heart dropped.
Him."
All that filler… just for her evil father to show up. I'm crying, but not in the way the author intended.
The plot setup is promising: arranged marriage, mafia romance, a little twist with Cassian marrying her instead of his brother Luca to “save” her from abuse. I was here for it. Cassian, our dark prince, is gentle with her, helps her avenge her childhood abusers, and literally protects her from everyone, including her evil family. So why does Charlotte keep sabotaging him? Why is she so allergic to logic?
Cassian has like two rules: don’t leave the house without telling him first, and because psycho Luca is still obsessed with you and we don’t want you dead, DONT TALK TO HIM. Charlotte hears: field trip at Luca's! time to go find mommy! Girl, what are we doing?
And speaking of plot threads:
Long-lost brother? ✅
Missing mother? ✅
Grandfather’s dying wish? ✅
Evil dad reappearing? ✅
Luca still trying to steal her back? ✅
Oh yeah, and she had cancer and a double mastectomy. This book does have everything.
Let’s talk about her brother, Vincent, for a second. He reappears after 10 years, acts mysterious, tells her to kill her husband, and Charlotte suddenly trusts him more than her actual husband who has, to date:
- Saved her life repeatedly (I think 5 times in the first book)
- Helped her get revenge on her rapists
- Never touched another woman after they got married
- Been endlessly patient with her trauma and body insecurities
AND YET. She believes every random accusation about him. Shoots him at one point. And of course when he gets a little dark and unhinged toward the end after her betrayal of SHOOTING HIM, everyone’s shocked.
His behavior at the end was not okay obviously. There’s one sex scene toward the end that is completely out of character and honestly disturbing, but tbh that felt more like GPT's memory problems and it forgetting who Cassian was supposed to be as a character. This book could definitely use a human editor.
I’m convinced the writing process for some of the pages was:
“Hey ChatGPT, what would give maximum shock value in chapter 13?”
“Kill the ex.”
“Perfect. On it.”
Now onto the spice. I don’t mean to keep beating this AI drum but...
"He pulled off his belt — not to strike — but to discard it."
"Then his trousers."
"Then his shirt."
"And he was naked."
"I didn’t look away."
"God, I couldn’t look away."
This is text-to-speech erotica. I know the prompt was “write me a spicy scene using only short declarative sentences.”
And then there’s this:
"I shook my head."
"Not yet."
"He stood. My heart cracked."
"He was walking away."
"But then he returned."
"With something in his hand."
"A black silk blindfold"
In short, this book had potential, but it got swallowed up in melodramatic plot layering, and wildly inconsistent character logic due to over reliance on AI. I think if we remove a few pages of that (as per my examples above), and get some more of the author's own voice in, this book could have been so much better.
Cassian deserved better. Honestly, so did Charlotte, but not in the way she thinks.
August 12, 2025
I choose the bear
September 9, 2025
Sometimes I think I must be some sort of masochist! the self inflicted pain and suffering I’ve endured reading the absolute pile of dog shite that TikTok has tricked me into reading, and this book was one of them. AVOID, AVOID , AVOID like the plague!!
September 7, 2025
I honestly don’t even know how to rate this book. It was just pure chaos — way too many unresolved secrets that made it drag and feel all over the place. I’m hoping it gets better, but I’m putting this series on hold for now because I literally can’t deal. Every character needs psychiatric help…
July 8, 2025
Dark, deep, and left me wanting more
This is the first book I’ve read from OS Feathers - I picked a doozy! I did enjoy the book, but it was a wild ride.
First things first, mind the TW - this book doesn’t sugarcoat anything and you feel the pain of our main characters, deeply. Her crummy family really take the cake, but you have to see where she has come from to get where she needs to go, in my opinion.
I didn’t realize this was a duet, but I am eagerly anticipating the book two release - I am rooting for Charlotte and Cassian.
This is the first book I’ve read from OS Feathers - I picked a doozy! I did enjoy the book, but it was a wild ride.
First things first, mind the TW - this book doesn’t sugarcoat anything and you feel the pain of our main characters, deeply. Her crummy family really take the cake, but you have to see where she has come from to get where she needs to go, in my opinion.
I didn’t realize this was a duet, but I am eagerly anticipating the book two release - I am rooting for Charlotte and Cassian.
August 29, 2025
This book was honestly so weird to me. It started off with a strong idea, but about halfway through it completely shifted, and the whole thing just felt odd. The story follows Charlotte, whose grandad has died. One of his wishes was that she marry into the Moretti family, so her dad arranges for her to marry Luca Moretti. At this point, Charlotte has just broken up with her cheating boyfriend and is also recovering from a double mastectomy after battling cancer. She’s in remission now but feels very self-conscious about her body.
The opening is dramatic—Charlotte is running from mafia men, stumbles into a club, lands in a stranger’s lap, and kisses him so they won’t catch her. She steals his bike keys, takes his bike, and leaves. That stranger turns out to be Cassian Moretti, Luca’s older brother. When Charlotte finally meets Luca, Cassian is there and declares, “From that kiss, you were mine.” From then on, the plot spirals. On her wedding day, Luca doesn’t show up, and Cassian forces her to marry him instead, even threatening that he planted a bomb at the altar.
From Charlotte’s perspective, the whole situation is confusing. Everyone—her dad, her brother Vincent, Luca, even Cassian’s own family—warns her that Cassian is a bad man. He’s cold and cruel, and yet she’s drawn to him. She keeps making reckless mistakes, and he keeps swooping in to save her. Her main goal throughout is to find her mother, who abandoned her years ago, and Luca tempts her with promises that he knows where her mother is. She follows him, only for Cassian to rescue her again.
Their relationship has brief tender moments. When they finally sleep together, Cassian blindfolds himself so Charlotte won’t feel self-conscious about her scars, which was actually really sweet. But the drama keeps building. When she disobeys him and runs to Luca, Cassian punishes her by locking her in a dungeon. He only intended to leave her there for hours, but he was shot and left unconscious, so she ended up trapped for three days. Later, in a heated moment, she accidentally shoots him, thinking she’s killed him. He survives, but it breaks him, and afterward he becomes deliberately cruel—forcing her to strip, chaining her, calling her degrading names, humiliating her, and forcing himself on her.
Then the book shifts again. Cassian’s sister reveals their family’s tragic backstory. Their father had an affair with a woman named Serafina, who turned out to be Charlotte’s mother. Serafina manipulated Cassian’s father into abusing his wife, Jade, chaining her, humiliating her, and treating her like a servant. Cassian grew up witnessing this cruelty, which shaped his bitterness. When Charlotte learns the truth—that her mother is Serafina and that she chose to leave for that toxic life—she finally understands Cassian’s trauma and tries to reach him emotionally.
For a moment it seems like they’ll break through. But then miscommunication ruins it all again. Charlotte finds texts that make it look like Cassian is having an affair. He denies it at first, then cruelly claims he is, taunting her. She finally walks away. The book closes with a surprise POV switch to Cassian. We see he was never cheating—he’d actually been going to therapy to try and be better for her. He’s heartbroken, regrets everything, and loves her deeply. She’s been missing for 20 days, and he’s destroyed without her. And that’s where it ends.
For me, this just didn’t work. The writing was messy and badly needed editing. Scenes often started one way and ended in a completely different, inconsistent tone. The push-pull dynamic dragged on endlessly, with characters constantly changing their minds. Charlotte herself was frustrating—her decisions often made no sense, and she came across as naïve to the point of being unlikeable. The book is supposed to be a dark romance, and I get where the “dark” part comes in, but the execution was all over the place. I think the story is split into three books following these characters, but honestly, it all could’ve been condensed into one. I won’t be continuing the series—it was just too weird and disjointed for me.
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September 14, 2025
This books plot had the same amount of holes as Swiss cheese. I have no clue why I read the whole series hoping it would get better. I would say that it felt like a really bad wattpad book…but that would be a disgrace to wattpad books.
August 31, 2025
This was either a fan fiction novel turned book or AI wrote it. Why are the sentences so short?
Why are the scenes jumping around so much?
The idea of the storyline is good but written so so poorly.
Tbh I’ll be continuing the series cause I want to know what the ending is.
Why are the scenes jumping around so much?
The idea of the storyline is good but written so so poorly.
Tbh I’ll be continuing the series cause I want to know what the ending is.
August 18, 2025
4.5 ⭐️
This book broke me. I thought to myself, even though all of this is happening, I know there will be a happy ending…instead I was given a broken heart and an ache that will stay until I’m okay again. Cassian and Charlotte’s love is so cruelly broken it left me in complete sorrows and tears. I have no words.
“I can’t breathe without you,” I say, voice raw, like sandpaper on an open wound. “I—I loved you so much I don’t even know who I was before you.”
“Come back. Come back. Come back.” 💔
This book broke me. I thought to myself, even though all of this is happening, I know there will be a happy ending…instead I was given a broken heart and an ache that will stay until I’m okay again. Cassian and Charlotte’s love is so cruelly broken it left me in complete sorrows and tears. I have no words.
“I can’t breathe without you,” I say, voice raw, like sandpaper on an open wound. “I—I loved you so much I don’t even know who I was before you.”
“Come back. Come back. Come back.” 💔
August 24, 2025
Tiktok hypes it up too much. very basic and repetitive. It got old very fast. writing errors, the plot was jumpy and wasn't sticking with what was already wrote a few seconds prior. It could of been a good book but it definitely needed to be proof read and errors fixed.
September 7, 2025
I fell like a 12 yr old would write better books than this.
Like the starting was okay but it somehow started getting worse and worse and just when I thought it COULDNT get worse than THIS SOMEHOW THE AUTHOR ALWAYS PROVED ME WRONG I just hope I never come across this book again.
Like the starting was okay but it somehow started getting worse and worse and just when I thought it COULDNT get worse than THIS SOMEHOW THE AUTHOR ALWAYS PROVED ME WRONG I just hope I never come across this book again.
September 24, 2025
Well def doesn’t live up to the hype
This had the bones to be amazing. The FMC is weak, all she does is cry and whine, never trying to better herself always the victim. The MMC is traumatized and that’s obvious. So much potential wasted with this book.
This had the bones to be amazing. The FMC is weak, all she does is cry and whine, never trying to better herself always the victim. The MMC is traumatized and that’s obvious. So much potential wasted with this book.
August 22, 2025
I’ve been in a reading slump for over a month, but yesterday I picked up Cruel Deception—and I couldn’t put it down. I read the entire book in just one day. This story completely shattered my heart in the best way possible. It’s emotional, gripping, and exactly what I needed to fall back in love with reading.
August 20, 2025
a must read !!!
Finished this book in one day !!! 10/10 a must read you will not be disappointed!!!
I need book two asap
Finished this book in one day !!! 10/10 a must read you will not be disappointed!!!
I need book two asap
August 14, 2025
Ate this book up in 1 day and let me just say WOW, I was very pissed off for what he did and said to her and felt like ripping him apart myself but hopefully in the second book the GROVEL hits of not I’m gonna be sooo disappointed.
July 31, 2025
holy cow
This book was intense! I devoured it and am immediately moving on to the next book!!! I loved everything about it! First book I’ve read by this author and I’m extremely happy I picked it up!!
This book was intense! I devoured it and am immediately moving on to the next book!!! I loved everything about it! First book I’ve read by this author and I’m extremely happy I picked it up!!
July 23, 2025
Oh my god... the emotions this dragged out of me, poor Charlotte deserved so much better all the shit she went through for what, cassian you may have started as a asshole but I'm give credit where credit is due you changed for her but little to late Luca on the 8ther hand what was that identity switch. I'd love to actually murder you. I wish I knew this was a series and would eve in a cliffhanger because now what am I supposed to do? i need closure, and there's 2 more books not out yet
August 18, 2025
The beginning of this book started off okay, then it went downhill. Reading it felt like watching someone give up on their work as they did it? There are tons of plot holes, contradicting information and story lines, and too many “plot twists”. It was as if the other was trying to throw every plot twist and dark romance trope into one story. Also, the MFC was stupid as hell?? She did the dumbest things without thinking anything through and constantly bit the hand that fed her? About halfway through, you can tell that the story was just thrown together and no care went into it. There was some good ideas, but very poor execution.
August 19, 2025
Honestly I have no clue how I made it through this book. There is absolutely no character development and it’s all the same thing over and over again. I opened the second and immediately regretted it.
July 10, 2025
DNF 48%
I really wanted to finish this book, but the writing is trash. The MFC is so flip floppy about everything, and her quest to find her mother like what, it's nonsensical.
I really wanted to finish this book, but the writing is trash. The MFC is so flip floppy about everything, and her quest to find her mother like what, it's nonsensical.
November 7, 2025
very wattpad coded but in a bad way
September 8, 2025
okay so at first i really thought i was gonna give this thing a one star or even a dnf at one point tbh. because OHMYGOD, there are too many cruel and awful things he does to her that i cant even list them all, yeah yeah i know this is a dark romance its expected whatever but...this guy was basically...sadistic and he did like maybe 2..3 good things that gave u hope that oh maybe he has some humanity left but he just kept dashing that hope at every turn and when she "accidentally" shoots him...😬 all hell BREAKS LOOSE. HE goes from mean to full on torture. and lets just say this is where i had to stop and yell at my kindle "HOW STUPID CAN A CHARACTER BE?!" cause ohmygod basically 99% of the book is in her pov which i think made the book a tad worse cause it just made charlotte sound so unbearably naive...every cruel thing he'd do to her shed be like well he didnt do something worse so maybe he has some mercy and kindness in him...like girl i know youve just been surrounded by monsterous men your whole life but come on? SHE WAS THE EQUIVALENT OF "BUT MAYBE I CAN SAVE HIM" i couldnt believe it. and even after all that her biggest line in the sand with him was him cheating...like ok hes treated you like a slave but infidelity is where we have boundaries. But she eventually grows a spine and leaves. and im thinkin 'alright she'll leave, he'll say sorry shell come back, I'lL regret the last 3 hours of my life but no...thats basically where it ends...his POV IS HIM HAVING A MENTAL BREAKDOWN OVER HER BEING GONE FOR 20 DAYS AND NOT BEING ABLE TO FIND HER. 😭 lol the ONLY reason this book got such a high rating from me was bc his groveling when she wasn't even present, begging her to come back, being utterly lost without her was so top tier it almost, ALMOST made up for him being a psychopathic as$hat.
theres not much spice and when there was only like 2 actually "nice" scenes. Also another thing i really hated was everytime he had a cnc sorta situation with her shed always make references to how her body was betraying her and how she hated liking it and stuff..like ok its a cnc book but..come on, he was doing really awful things to do her and shes already a survivor could u not make it sound like she'd enjoy that. She had said earlier in the book she didnt want it that way so i didnt get why she'd enjoy it then.
theres not much spice and when there was only like 2 actually "nice" scenes. Also another thing i really hated was everytime he had a cnc sorta situation with her shed always make references to how her body was betraying her and how she hated liking it and stuff..like ok its a cnc book but..come on, he was doing really awful things to do her and shes already a survivor could u not make it sound like she'd enjoy that. She had said earlier in the book she didnt want it that way so i didnt get why she'd enjoy it then.
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September 4, 2025
Primero de todo, la historia es tan angustiante que tardas HORAS en acabar de leerla por todo lo que ocurre con la protagonista y cómo él la trata. Si eres sensible, ni se debe de leer sin saber las advertencias.
Segundo, mis comentarios :)
-Ella tuvo cáncer y a partir de eso tuvieron que quitarle los pechos. Ella decide no ponerse implantes.
-Él la humilla en el momento en el que se vuelve malo de verdad (cap 20) con todo tipo de insultos referidos a su apariencia tras un CÁNCER y llamándola ZORRA
-La familia de ella, TODOS, son unos psicópatas te pongas como te pongas. Y él suficiente tiene con ser un sociópata, me da igual que fuese a terapia para ser capaz de separar a la madre de ella de ella. ME DA IGUAL, si tienes traumas y eres incapaz de gestionarlos NO hagas pagar a alguien inocente que no sabe nada por ello.
Tercero, siguen los comentarios :) :)
-No puedo con él en todo el libro desde que la fuerza a casarse, es que soy incapaz a soportarlo. Me da igual que al final él tenga ese trauma porque la madre de ella era la amante del padre y torturaban a la madre de él, es que me da igual, es un monstruo por volcar sus traumas familiares con una chica que no tiene absolutamente nada que ver y jugar con ella al tira y afloja.
-Ella no le perdona, pero le dice que lo entiende. Para mí es suficiente si no fuera por lo que pasa después que se vuelven locos y se acuestan y él vuelve a humillarla de nuevo. Lo siento, pero después de una vio***** y una humillación como esa lo último que haría sería empatizar con él de esa manera, aunque sea de su parte.
Hay más cosas que me gustaría decir, como que quise vomitar todo el libro pero sobre todo con el final que me eché a llorar de la angustia que era leer algo como eso, pero es que no quiero.
Segundo, mis comentarios :)
-Ella tuvo cáncer y a partir de eso tuvieron que quitarle los pechos. Ella decide no ponerse implantes.
-Él la humilla en el momento en el que se vuelve malo de verdad (cap 20) con todo tipo de insultos referidos a su apariencia tras un CÁNCER y llamándola ZORRA
-La familia de ella, TODOS, son unos psicópatas te pongas como te pongas. Y él suficiente tiene con ser un sociópata, me da igual que fuese a terapia para ser capaz de separar a la madre de ella de ella. ME DA IGUAL, si tienes traumas y eres incapaz de gestionarlos NO hagas pagar a alguien inocente que no sabe nada por ello.
Tercero, siguen los comentarios :) :)
-No puedo con él en todo el libro desde que la fuerza a casarse, es que soy incapaz a soportarlo. Me da igual que al final él tenga ese trauma porque la madre de ella era la amante del padre y torturaban a la madre de él, es que me da igual, es un monstruo por volcar sus traumas familiares con una chica que no tiene absolutamente nada que ver y jugar con ella al tira y afloja.
-Ella no le perdona, pero le dice que lo entiende. Para mí es suficiente si no fuera por lo que pasa después que se vuelven locos y se acuestan y él vuelve a humillarla de nuevo. Lo siento, pero después de una vio***** y una humillación como esa lo último que haría sería empatizar con él de esa manera, aunque sea de su parte.
Hay más cosas que me gustaría decir, como que quise vomitar todo el libro pero sobre todo con el final que me eché a llorar de la angustia que era leer algo como eso, pero es que no quiero.
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November 26, 2025This was the second book I picked up after Darkest Oblivion, and I went in genuinely hoping this one would redeem things. But I couldn’t even get a quarter of the way through. More than once I caught myself thinking, “Wait… is this AI?” The scene where the FMC’s ex is berating her over her mastectomy while also wanting her back had me blinking at the page like I misread.
The MMC was written way more clearly than the FMC, which made me wonder if O.S. Feathers leans heavily into a male-centered style. And again, there were just too many major plots stuffed together. The arranged-marriage storyline alone had real potential — especially because the MMC actually cared about her and was protecting her from the original arranged husband — but it got drowned by all the extra plot threads.
The grandfather’s wish needed way more explanation. The missing mother could’ve been a strong emotional anchor, but it just felt like another tossed-in detail. And the evil father subplot honestly didn’t add anything; if anything, it just cluttered the story more.
Overall, the writing felt rushed — worse than a Wattpad story written by a teenager, and I don’t say that lightly. It’s disappointing because the ideas could’ve worked if they were developed instead of piled on. At this point, I’m genuinely wondering if parts were drafted with AI or if proofreading was skipped entirely, because some of the sentences were rough in a way that shouldn’t happen. Let’s be real: these things should’ve been caught.
And I used AI to fix my comment,so there is no excuse for not proofreading or using AI to check your work.
The MMC was written way more clearly than the FMC, which made me wonder if O.S. Feathers leans heavily into a male-centered style. And again, there were just too many major plots stuffed together. The arranged-marriage storyline alone had real potential — especially because the MMC actually cared about her and was protecting her from the original arranged husband — but it got drowned by all the extra plot threads.
The grandfather’s wish needed way more explanation. The missing mother could’ve been a strong emotional anchor, but it just felt like another tossed-in detail. And the evil father subplot honestly didn’t add anything; if anything, it just cluttered the story more.
Overall, the writing felt rushed — worse than a Wattpad story written by a teenager, and I don’t say that lightly. It’s disappointing because the ideas could’ve worked if they were developed instead of piled on. At this point, I’m genuinely wondering if parts were drafted with AI or if proofreading was skipped entirely, because some of the sentences were rough in a way that shouldn’t happen. Let’s be real: these things should’ve been caught.
And I used AI to fix my comment,so there is no excuse for not proofreading or using AI to check your work.
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September 14, 2025
huh?
I understand the concept of writing a character that has a lot of demons and it’s not really trying to excuse the behavior. But it really just felt like a lot of parts were skipped. At the beginning, it describes the FMC has almost like a mini thief, but she does not do anything like that other than steal the motorcycle. Then you got the MMC, who is literally obsessed with her, but we don’t realize he’s obsessed with her until he brings her SPOILER
Back the rapists for her birthday. And to be honest, even the dialogue with the rapist seemed really odd and repetitive and lame. And then you have the bullying which was over the top in cruel, and she literally forgave him as soon as she knew his story, which was absolutely insane.
And then you have her vow to literally leave him because how he talk to her, and the next chapter literally being she left him. No writing on how it happened, which I’m assuming it is what will happen in the second book? Just simply, I’ve got to leave you and then a paragraph later him acknowledging that she left him.
And also had some plot errors like her being shocked that her father and her ex-boyfriend/bodyguard knew about her surgery, but then later on talks about how her ex-boyfriend treated her poorly once she had her double mastectomy, adding that with some grammar issues, I can see why this book doesn’t have a lot of reads.
I understand the concept of writing a character that has a lot of demons and it’s not really trying to excuse the behavior. But it really just felt like a lot of parts were skipped. At the beginning, it describes the FMC has almost like a mini thief, but she does not do anything like that other than steal the motorcycle. Then you got the MMC, who is literally obsessed with her, but we don’t realize he’s obsessed with her until he brings her SPOILER
Back the rapists for her birthday. And to be honest, even the dialogue with the rapist seemed really odd and repetitive and lame. And then you have the bullying which was over the top in cruel, and she literally forgave him as soon as she knew his story, which was absolutely insane.
And then you have her vow to literally leave him because how he talk to her, and the next chapter literally being she left him. No writing on how it happened, which I’m assuming it is what will happen in the second book? Just simply, I’ve got to leave you and then a paragraph later him acknowledging that she left him.
And also had some plot errors like her being shocked that her father and her ex-boyfriend/bodyguard knew about her surgery, but then later on talks about how her ex-boyfriend treated her poorly once she had her double mastectomy, adding that with some grammar issues, I can see why this book doesn’t have a lot of reads.
September 30, 2025
One of the worst written stories I've read so far. Here are some of the reasons why...
FMC is being chased by mafia men. Runs into club and kisses a dangerous looking man to hide and steals his bike as well.
Grandfather dies and wants FMC to marry to a random mafia dude. She goes signs some marriage contract without blinking.
The guy (MMC) she kissed ends up being her fiancé's older brother. Now that she kissed him apparently she is his now?
The MMC kidnaps his own brother on the day of the wedding to marry her and threatens her to say I do with a bomb under the altar.
The MMC hates her coz the FMC's mother did something to him and his family so now he is taking revenge from her.
Literally all the men in this book are abusive assholes. And the FMC is a damsel in distress.
Keeps her locked in like a slave and chains her, calls her a man because she got her breasts removed due to cancer and fucks her in the dark coz she turns him off. I thought her ex bf was an ass but the MMC is a bigger ass.
This was when I had enough...Because she learns why he hates her because her mother did awful things to his family but how is that okay to be abused and raped? She just brushes it off? 💀
This isn't Dark Romance, it's not romance at all. This MMC isn't redeemable. Weak ass FMC who cries all the time and is always doing dumb shit.
FMC is being chased by mafia men. Runs into club and kisses a dangerous looking man to hide and steals his bike as well.
Grandfather dies and wants FMC to marry to a random mafia dude. She goes signs some marriage contract without blinking.
The guy (MMC) she kissed ends up being her fiancé's older brother. Now that she kissed him apparently she is his now?
The MMC kidnaps his own brother on the day of the wedding to marry her and threatens her to say I do with a bomb under the altar.
The MMC hates her coz the FMC's mother did something to him and his family so now he is taking revenge from her.
Literally all the men in this book are abusive assholes. And the FMC is a damsel in distress.
Keeps her locked in like a slave and chains her, calls her a man because she got her breasts removed due to cancer and fucks her in the dark coz she turns him off. I thought her ex bf was an ass but the MMC is a bigger ass.
This was when I had enough...Because she learns why he hates her because her mother did awful things to his family but how is that okay to be abused and raped? She just brushes it off? 💀
This isn't Dark Romance, it's not romance at all. This MMC isn't redeemable. Weak ass FMC who cries all the time and is always doing dumb shit.
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August 1, 2025
I saw this book on TikTok. The plot is good, I liked the characters but feel that the book needs a good developmental editor to go over, some of the tensing is all over the place, and there seemed to be a ton of metaphors, and descriptive words which probably don’t need to be there.
Cassian is cold, dangerous but softer with Charlotte, making the perfect mafia husband, but at times it felt like maybe the author forgot that and made him to soft in parts.
Charlotte comes across as tough, and a loner who just wants to find out what happened to her mother. She has a lot of demons in her past, and she may put on a mask to act stronger than she is, but inside she is scared and needs help.
I really enjoyed seeing the way Cassian and Charlotte were together, he has the “touch her you d.e” vibe to a T! I really think this would be great book with a bit of help on the editing side.
This writer has great potential.
Cassian is cold, dangerous but softer with Charlotte, making the perfect mafia husband, but at times it felt like maybe the author forgot that and made him to soft in parts.
Charlotte comes across as tough, and a loner who just wants to find out what happened to her mother. She has a lot of demons in her past, and she may put on a mask to act stronger than she is, but inside she is scared and needs help.
I really enjoyed seeing the way Cassian and Charlotte were together, he has the “touch her you d.e” vibe to a T! I really think this would be great book with a bit of help on the editing side.
This writer has great potential.
August 10, 2025
SO many plot holes.
This book has many good ideas but is executed so poorly with an ungodly amount of plot holes and contradictions. There are many small issues that overall build up to make this book unbearable. I stopped at about 50% because I couldn’t handle it anymore. The author should definitely have an editor or someone revise this, rework it, then rerelease it.
She is sent away by her father as a child to live in a falling apart house in squalor where she has to steal and scheme to live - but then recognizes tom ford suits and high class things. On the wedding night there are two separate cars mentioned while talking about the one they get in. She is sent away young, and is in poverty, but then discusses spending her birthday with her father and college friends - when she was no contact with her dad, and was too poor for college.
Again, great ideas, poor execution - would love to give this book another chance if it was rereleased with fixes.
This book has many good ideas but is executed so poorly with an ungodly amount of plot holes and contradictions. There are many small issues that overall build up to make this book unbearable. I stopped at about 50% because I couldn’t handle it anymore. The author should definitely have an editor or someone revise this, rework it, then rerelease it.
She is sent away by her father as a child to live in a falling apart house in squalor where she has to steal and scheme to live - but then recognizes tom ford suits and high class things. On the wedding night there are two separate cars mentioned while talking about the one they get in. She is sent away young, and is in poverty, but then discusses spending her birthday with her father and college friends - when she was no contact with her dad, and was too poor for college.
Again, great ideas, poor execution - would love to give this book another chance if it was rereleased with fixes.
August 10, 2025
This book is so… I don’t know. I like that it had me instantly hooked and it’s definitely interesting, but I very much dislike how the author didn’t remember her own plot. In one sentence she says ‘I go to the bed in just a nightgown, no panties no anything blah blah’ and then two sentences later it’s ’he lifted me and I could feel his rough jeans against my panties’ 😐 like girl. Also this book just in general feels like it’s written on crack, good ideas and good plot but not so great execution.
Also. I very much dislike Charlotte. Maybe have a brain? Maybe try using it???? Bc wdym cassian is doing everything to make you comfortable and then the second your brother says ‘he has mom. Kill him’ you don’t think twice that maybe this dude isn’t what your fuckass family is trying to make him out to be? Omfg I’m so pissed off. Mind you this happened 5 minutes after he opened up to her for the first time ever.
Also. I very much dislike Charlotte. Maybe have a brain? Maybe try using it???? Bc wdym cassian is doing everything to make you comfortable and then the second your brother says ‘he has mom. Kill him’ you don’t think twice that maybe this dude isn’t what your fuckass family is trying to make him out to be? Omfg I’m so pissed off. Mind you this happened 5 minutes after he opened up to her for the first time ever.
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