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Broken Vows #1
Cruel Deception
Charlotte had just undergone a mastectomy.
Marriage was the last thing on her mind.
But to honor her grandfather’s dying wish, she agreed to marry the second grandson of New York’s most powerful mafia family.
It was supposed to be cold. Strategic. Loveless.
Until the veil lifted at the altar—
And it wasn’t her fiancé standing there.
It was Cassian Moretti.
Her fiancé’s older brother.
The man she kissed once to escape danger.
The man who never forgot.
He’d kidnapped his own brother.
Planted a bomb beneath the church.
And told the Marry us, or watch it burn.
So she became his.
Not out of love—
But out of fire, obsession, and control.
He locked her away.
Mocked her mastectomy scars.
Told her she looked like a man.
Only touched her in the dark—never face-to-face.
She was his wife.
His prisoner.
His punishment.
Until she left.
No warning.
No note.
Just silence.
Now, he’s tearing through cities—
Destroying anyone who might know where she’s gone.
Because losing her
Was the one wound
He’ll never survive.
Marriage was the last thing on her mind.
But to honor her grandfather’s dying wish, she agreed to marry the second grandson of New York’s most powerful mafia family.
It was supposed to be cold. Strategic. Loveless.
Until the veil lifted at the altar—
And it wasn’t her fiancé standing there.
It was Cassian Moretti.
Her fiancé’s older brother.
The man she kissed once to escape danger.
The man who never forgot.
He’d kidnapped his own brother.
Planted a bomb beneath the church.
And told the Marry us, or watch it burn.
So she became his.
Not out of love—
But out of fire, obsession, and control.
He locked her away.
Mocked her mastectomy scars.
Told her she looked like a man.
Only touched her in the dark—never face-to-face.
She was his wife.
His prisoner.
His punishment.
Until she left.
No warning.
No note.
Just silence.
Now, he’s tearing through cities—
Destroying anyone who might know where she’s gone.
Because losing her
Was the one wound
He’ll never survive.
270 pages, Kindle Edition
Published July 7, 2025
About the author
O.S. Feathers
17 books261 followersO.S Feathers writes dark, twisty love stories about morally questionable men and the fierce, brilliant women who bring them to their knees, sometimes literally. She has a soft spot for arranged marriages, possessive antiheroes, and heroines who know how to shoot or at least threaten with style.
She drinks too much coffee, lives for slow-burn tension, and has never met a knife-to-throat scene she didn’t love. When she’s not writing, she’s probably researching obscure Russian swear words, rewriting a spicy chapter for the third time, or convincing her characters that therapy is not, in fact, the enemy.
If you like your love stories messy, dangerous, and just a little unhinged, she’s got you.
She drinks too much coffee, lives for slow-burn tension, and has never met a knife-to-throat scene she didn’t love. When she’s not writing, she’s probably researching obscure Russian swear words, rewriting a spicy chapter for the third time, or convincing her characters that therapy is not, in fact, the enemy.
If you like your love stories messy, dangerous, and just a little unhinged, she’s got you.
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March 2, 2026
I’m not saying this book was written by AI, but… actually, no, that is what I’m saying. Because I need someone to explain to me how this passed the human review stage with filler like:
All that filler… just for her evil father to show up. I'm crying, but not in the way the author intended.
The plot setup is promising: arranged marriage, mafia romance, a little twist with Cassian marrying her instead of his brother Luca to “save” her from abuse. I was here for it. Cassian, our dark prince, is gentle with her, helps her avenge her childhood abusers, and literally protects her from everyone, including her evil family. So why does Charlotte keep sabotaging him? Why is she so allergic to logic?
Cassian has like two rules: don’t leave the house without telling him first, and because psycho Luca is still obsessed with you and we don’t want you dead, DONT TALK TO HIM. Charlotte hears: field trip at Luca's! time to go find mommy! Girl, what are we doing?
And speaking of plot threads:
Long-lost brother? ✅
Missing mother? ✅
Grandfather’s dying wish? ✅
Evil dad reappearing? ✅
Luca still trying to steal her back? ✅
Oh yeah, and she had cancer and a double mastectomy. This book does have everything.
Let’s talk about her brother, Vincent, for a second. He reappears after 10 years, acts mysterious, tells her to kill her husband, and Charlotte suddenly trusts him more than her actual husband who has, to date:
- Saved her life repeatedly (I think 5 times in the first book)
- Helped her get revenge on her rapists
- Never touched another woman after they got married
- Been endlessly patient with her trauma and body insecurities
AND YET. She believes every random accusation about him. Shoots him at one point. And of course when he gets a little dark and unhinged toward the end after her betrayal of SHOOTING HIM, everyone’s shocked.
His behavior at the end was not okay obviously. There’s one sex scene toward the end that is completely out of character and honestly disturbing, but tbh that felt more like GPT's memory problems and it forgetting who Cassian was supposed to be as a character. This book could definitely use a human editor.
I’m convinced the writing process for some of the pages was:
“Hey ChatGPT, what would give maximum shock value in chapter 13?”
“Kill the ex.”
“Perfect. On it.”
Now onto the spice. I don’t mean to keep beating this AI drum but...
This is text-to-speech erotica. I know the prompt was “write me a spicy scene using only short declarative sentences.”
And then there’s this:
In short, this book had potential, but it got swallowed up in melodramatic plot layering, and wildly inconsistent character logic due to over reliance on AI. I think if we remove a few pages of that (as per my examples above), and get some more of the author's own voice in, this book could have been so much better.
Cassian deserved better. Honestly, so did Charlotte, but not in the way she thinks.
"Bang. Bang. Bang.
My blood was turning to ice.
Someone was at the door.
Another crash.
Another bang.
It burst open.
My heart dropped.
Him."
All that filler… just for her evil father to show up. I'm crying, but not in the way the author intended.
The plot setup is promising: arranged marriage, mafia romance, a little twist with Cassian marrying her instead of his brother Luca to “save” her from abuse. I was here for it. Cassian, our dark prince, is gentle with her, helps her avenge her childhood abusers, and literally protects her from everyone, including her evil family. So why does Charlotte keep sabotaging him? Why is she so allergic to logic?
Cassian has like two rules: don’t leave the house without telling him first, and because psycho Luca is still obsessed with you and we don’t want you dead, DONT TALK TO HIM. Charlotte hears: field trip at Luca's! time to go find mommy! Girl, what are we doing?
And speaking of plot threads:
Long-lost brother? ✅
Missing mother? ✅
Grandfather’s dying wish? ✅
Evil dad reappearing? ✅
Luca still trying to steal her back? ✅
Oh yeah, and she had cancer and a double mastectomy. This book does have everything.
Let’s talk about her brother, Vincent, for a second. He reappears after 10 years, acts mysterious, tells her to kill her husband, and Charlotte suddenly trusts him more than her actual husband who has, to date:
- Saved her life repeatedly (I think 5 times in the first book)
- Helped her get revenge on her rapists
- Never touched another woman after they got married
- Been endlessly patient with her trauma and body insecurities
AND YET. She believes every random accusation about him. Shoots him at one point. And of course when he gets a little dark and unhinged toward the end after her betrayal of SHOOTING HIM, everyone’s shocked.
His behavior at the end was not okay obviously. There’s one sex scene toward the end that is completely out of character and honestly disturbing, but tbh that felt more like GPT's memory problems and it forgetting who Cassian was supposed to be as a character. This book could definitely use a human editor.
I’m convinced the writing process for some of the pages was:
“Hey ChatGPT, what would give maximum shock value in chapter 13?”
“Kill the ex.”
“Perfect. On it.”
Now onto the spice. I don’t mean to keep beating this AI drum but...
"He pulled off his belt — not to strike — but to discard it."
"Then his trousers."
"Then his shirt."
"And he was naked."
"I didn’t look away."
"God, I couldn’t look away."
This is text-to-speech erotica. I know the prompt was “write me a spicy scene using only short declarative sentences.”
And then there’s this:
"I shook my head."
"Not yet."
"He stood. My heart cracked."
"He was walking away."
"But then he returned."
"With something in his hand."
"A black silk blindfold"
In short, this book had potential, but it got swallowed up in melodramatic plot layering, and wildly inconsistent character logic due to over reliance on AI. I think if we remove a few pages of that (as per my examples above), and get some more of the author's own voice in, this book could have been so much better.
Cassian deserved better. Honestly, so did Charlotte, but not in the way she thinks.
August 12, 2025
I choose the bear
September 9, 2025
Sometimes I think I must be some sort of masochist! the self inflicted pain and suffering I’ve endured reading the absolute pile of dog shite that TikTok has tricked me into reading, and this book was one of them. AVOID, AVOID , AVOID like the plague!!
September 7, 2025
I honestly don’t even know how to rate this book. It was just pure chaos — way too many unresolved secrets that made it drag and feel all over the place. I’m hoping it gets better, but I’m putting this series on hold for now because I literally can’t deal. Every character needs psychiatric help…
August 29, 2025
This book was honestly so weird to me. It started off with a strong idea, but about halfway through it completely shifted, and the whole thing just felt odd. The story follows Charlotte, whose grandad has died. One of his wishes was that she marry into the Moretti family, so her dad arranges for her to marry Luca Moretti. At this point, Charlotte has just broken up with her cheating boyfriend and is also recovering from a double mastectomy after battling cancer. She’s in remission now but feels very self-conscious about her body.
The opening is dramatic—Charlotte is running from mafia men, stumbles into a club, lands in a stranger’s lap, and kisses him so they won’t catch her. She steals his bike keys, takes his bike, and leaves. That stranger turns out to be Cassian Moretti, Luca’s older brother. When Charlotte finally meets Luca, Cassian is there and declares, “From that kiss, you were mine.” From then on, the plot spirals. On her wedding day, Luca doesn’t show up, and Cassian forces her to marry him instead, even threatening that he planted a bomb at the altar.
From Charlotte’s perspective, the whole situation is confusing. Everyone—her dad, her brother Vincent, Luca, even Cassian’s own family—warns her that Cassian is a bad man. He’s cold and cruel, and yet she’s drawn to him. She keeps making reckless mistakes, and he keeps swooping in to save her. Her main goal throughout is to find her mother, who abandoned her years ago, and Luca tempts her with promises that he knows where her mother is. She follows him, only for Cassian to rescue her again.
Their relationship has brief tender moments. When they finally sleep together, Cassian blindfolds himself so Charlotte won’t feel self-conscious about her scars, which was actually really sweet. But the drama keeps building. When she disobeys him and runs to Luca, Cassian punishes her by locking her in a dungeon. He only intended to leave her there for hours, but he was shot and left unconscious, so she ended up trapped for three days. Later, in a heated moment, she accidentally shoots him, thinking she’s killed him. He survives, but it breaks him, and afterward he becomes deliberately cruel—forcing her to strip, chaining her, calling her degrading names, humiliating her, and forcing himself on her.
Then the book shifts again. Cassian’s sister reveals their family’s tragic backstory. Their father had an affair with a woman named Serafina, who turned out to be Charlotte’s mother. Serafina manipulated Cassian’s father into abusing his wife, Jade, chaining her, humiliating her, and treating her like a servant. Cassian grew up witnessing this cruelty, which shaped his bitterness. When Charlotte learns the truth—that her mother is Serafina and that she chose to leave for that toxic life—she finally understands Cassian’s trauma and tries to reach him emotionally.
For a moment it seems like they’ll break through. But then miscommunication ruins it all again. Charlotte finds texts that make it look like Cassian is having an affair. He denies it at first, then cruelly claims he is, taunting her. She finally walks away. The book closes with a surprise POV switch to Cassian. We see he was never cheating—he’d actually been going to therapy to try and be better for her. He’s heartbroken, regrets everything, and loves her deeply. She’s been missing for 20 days, and he’s destroyed without her. And that’s where it ends.
For me, this just didn’t work. The writing was messy and badly needed editing. Scenes often started one way and ended in a completely different, inconsistent tone. The push-pull dynamic dragged on endlessly, with characters constantly changing their minds. Charlotte herself was frustrating—her decisions often made no sense, and she came across as naïve to the point of being unlikeable. The book is supposed to be a dark romance, and I get where the “dark” part comes in, but the execution was all over the place. I think the story is split into three books following these characters, but honestly, it all could’ve been condensed into one. I won’t be continuing the series—it was just too weird and disjointed for me.
This entire review has been hidden because of spoilers.
July 8, 2025
Dark, deep, and left me wanting more
This is the first book I’ve read from OS Feathers - I picked a doozy! I did enjoy the book, but it was a wild ride.
First things first, mind the TW - this book doesn’t sugarcoat anything and you feel the pain of our main characters, deeply. Her crummy family really take the cake, but you have to see where she has come from to get where she needs to go, in my opinion.
I didn’t realize this was a duet, but I am eagerly anticipating the book two release - I am rooting for Charlotte and Cassian.
This is the first book I’ve read from OS Feathers - I picked a doozy! I did enjoy the book, but it was a wild ride.
First things first, mind the TW - this book doesn’t sugarcoat anything and you feel the pain of our main characters, deeply. Her crummy family really take the cake, but you have to see where she has come from to get where she needs to go, in my opinion.
I didn’t realize this was a duet, but I am eagerly anticipating the book two release - I am rooting for Charlotte and Cassian.
August 24, 2025
Tiktok hypes it up too much. very basic and repetitive. It got old very fast. writing errors, the plot was jumpy and wasn't sticking with what was already wrote a few seconds prior. It could of been a good book but it definitely needed to be proof read and errors fixed.
September 14, 2025
This books plot had the same amount of holes as Swiss cheese. I have no clue why I read the whole series hoping it would get better. I would say that it felt like a really bad wattpad book…but that would be a disgrace to wattpad books.
August 31, 2025
This was either a fan fiction novel turned book or AI wrote it. Why are the sentences so short?
Why are the scenes jumping around so much?
The idea of the storyline is good but written so so poorly.
Tbh I’ll be continuing the series cause I want to know what the ending is.
Why are the scenes jumping around so much?
The idea of the storyline is good but written so so poorly.
Tbh I’ll be continuing the series cause I want to know what the ending is.
September 7, 2025
I fell like a 12 yr old would write better books than this.
Like the starting was okay but it somehow started getting worse and worse and just when I thought it COULDNT get worse than THIS SOMEHOW THE AUTHOR ALWAYS PROVED ME WRONG I just hope I never come across this book again.
Like the starting was okay but it somehow started getting worse and worse and just when I thought it COULDNT get worse than THIS SOMEHOW THE AUTHOR ALWAYS PROVED ME WRONG I just hope I never come across this book again.
September 24, 2025
Well def doesn’t live up to the hype
This had the bones to be amazing. The FMC is weak, all she does is cry and whine, never trying to better herself always the victim. The MMC is traumatized and that’s obvious. So much potential wasted with this book.
This had the bones to be amazing. The FMC is weak, all she does is cry and whine, never trying to better herself always the victim. The MMC is traumatized and that’s obvious. So much potential wasted with this book.
August 18, 2025
4.5 ⭐️
This book broke me. I thought to myself, even though all of this is happening, I know there will be a happy ending…instead I was given a broken heart and an ache that will stay until I’m okay again. Cassian and Charlotte’s love is so cruelly broken it left me in complete sorrows and tears. I have no words.
“I can’t breathe without you,” I say, voice raw, like sandpaper on an open wound. “I—I loved you so much I don’t even know who I was before you.”
“Come back. Come back. Come back.” 💔
This book broke me. I thought to myself, even though all of this is happening, I know there will be a happy ending…instead I was given a broken heart and an ache that will stay until I’m okay again. Cassian and Charlotte’s love is so cruelly broken it left me in complete sorrows and tears. I have no words.
“I can’t breathe without you,” I say, voice raw, like sandpaper on an open wound. “I—I loved you so much I don’t even know who I was before you.”
“Come back. Come back. Come back.” 💔
August 18, 2025
The beginning of this book started off okay, then it went downhill. Reading it felt like watching someone give up on their work as they did it? There are tons of plot holes, contradicting information and story lines, and too many “plot twists”. It was as if the other was trying to throw every plot twist and dark romance trope into one story. Also, the MFC was stupid as hell?? She did the dumbest things without thinking anything through and constantly bit the hand that fed her? About halfway through, you can tell that the story was just thrown together and no care went into it. There was some good ideas, but very poor execution.
August 19, 2025
Honestly I have no clue how I made it through this book. There is absolutely no character development and it’s all the same thing over and over again. I opened the second and immediately regretted it.
August 22, 2025
I’ve been in a reading slump for over a month, but yesterday I picked up Cruel Deception—and I couldn’t put it down. I read the entire book in just one day. This story completely shattered my heart in the best way possible. It’s emotional, gripping, and exactly what I needed to fall back in love with reading.
June 6, 2026
⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️.4|🌶🌶
“Your pain is not yours anymore. It’s mine. Like the rest of you.”
“When I put that ring on your finger, you didn’t just become my wife. You became mine. All of you. Your breath, your rage. Your joy... and your grief.”
“You don’t get to carry it alone anymore.”
“Your pain is not yours anymore. It’s mine. Like the rest of you.”
“When I put that ring on your finger, you didn’t just become my wife. You became mine. All of you. Your breath, your rage. Your joy... and your grief.”
“You don’t get to carry it alone anymore.”
June 27, 2026
Just hooting and hollering on paper, never putting my brain through this torture again.
Writing quality: chopped
Plot: even worse
Like genuinely it was so bad I want to give it a 0, but that’s not possible so I give it a 1.
Writing quality: chopped
Plot: even worse
Like genuinely it was so bad I want to give it a 0, but that’s not possible so I give it a 1.
March 14, 2026
Charlotte was going to marry into the Morreti family to fulfill her grandfather's dying wish. Little did she know the horrors that awaited her being tied to Cassion
August 20, 2025
a must read !!!
Finished this book in one day !!! 10/10 a must read you will not be disappointed!!!
I need book two asap
Finished this book in one day !!! 10/10 a must read you will not be disappointed!!!
I need book two asap
August 14, 2025
Ate this book up in 1 day and let me just say WOW, I was very pissed off for what he did and said to her and felt like ripping him apart myself but hopefully in the second book the GROVEL hits of not I’m gonna be sooo disappointed.
July 31, 2025
holy cow
This book was intense! I devoured it and am immediately moving on to the next book!!! I loved everything about it! First book I’ve read by this author and I’m extremely happy I picked it up!!
This book was intense! I devoured it and am immediately moving on to the next book!!! I loved everything about it! First book I’ve read by this author and I’m extremely happy I picked it up!!
July 23, 2025
Oh my god... the emotions this dragged out of me, poor Charlotte deserved so much better all the shit she went through for what, cassian you may have started as a asshole but I'm give credit where credit is due you changed for her but little to late Luca on the 8ther hand what was that identity switch. I'd love to actually murder you. I wish I knew this was a series and would eve in a cliffhanger because now what am I supposed to do? i need closure, and there's 2 more books not out yet
October 21, 2025
2.5-3/5
the FMC behavior throughout the entire book was problematic, she kept making stupid choices over and over again.
despite some of the graphic content, it’s giving a more “realistic” and I say that like I have firsthand knowledge of how the mafia functions lol, but it’s almost refreshing in a sense. I find that in a lot of the mafia series, it doesn’t really give much information about the mafia and how the dynamic is when it comes to women.
i’m currently reading the second one, and lord, she’s already irritating me with her same problematic behavior. from what I got from the first book is that she almost refuses to acknowledge her own behavior and is almost always easily manipulated. low-key wanted to slap some sense in the girl, but I’m hoping that in the second book she grows the bawls to take accountability ffs.
the FMC behavior throughout the entire book was problematic, she kept making stupid choices over and over again.
despite some of the graphic content, it’s giving a more “realistic” and I say that like I have firsthand knowledge of how the mafia functions lol, but it’s almost refreshing in a sense. I find that in a lot of the mafia series, it doesn’t really give much information about the mafia and how the dynamic is when it comes to women.
i’m currently reading the second one, and lord, she’s already irritating me with her same problematic behavior. from what I got from the first book is that she almost refuses to acknowledge her own behavior and is almost always easily manipulated. low-key wanted to slap some sense in the girl, but I’m hoping that in the second book she grows the bawls to take accountability ffs.
This entire review has been hidden because of spoilers.
January 10, 2026
1⭐️
This was bad, I picked it up as a push to get out of my reading slump but this was baddddd.
Damn I wished i hadn’t picked it up.
It reads like a wattpad story and like the reader is an idiot who has the memory of a goldfish.
I don’t even think the story itself is bad but the execution was terrible. If a person wrote this, I’d advise you change your editor
This was bad, I picked it up as a push to get out of my reading slump but this was baddddd.
Damn I wished i hadn’t picked it up.
It reads like a wattpad story and like the reader is an idiot who has the memory of a goldfish.
I don’t even think the story itself is bad but the execution was terrible. If a person wrote this, I’d advise you change your editor
August 30, 2025
Just finished this book, pissed me off the whole time. I started hate reading it. Then, I was going to hate read the third book, but I saw spoilers and no longer needed to even proceed.
I deserve compensation for getting through this one.
I deserve compensation for getting through this one.
July 10, 2025
DNF 48%
I really wanted to finish this book, but the writing is trash. The MFC is so flip floppy about everything, and her quest to find her mother like what, it's nonsensical.
I really wanted to finish this book, but the writing is trash. The MFC is so flip floppy about everything, and her quest to find her mother like what, it's nonsensical.
November 7, 2025
very wattpad coded but in a bad way
September 8, 2025
okay so at first i really thought i was gonna give this thing a one star or even a dnf at one point tbh. because OHMYGOD, there are too many cruel and awful things he does to her that i cant even list them all, yeah yeah i know this is a dark romance its expected whatever but...this guy was basically...sadistic and he did like maybe 2..3 good things that gave u hope that oh maybe he has some humanity left but he just kept dashing that hope at every turn and when she "accidentally" shoots him...😬 all hell BREAKS LOOSE. HE goes from mean to full on torture. and lets just say this is where i had to stop and yell at my kindle "HOW STUPID CAN A CHARACTER BE?!" cause ohmygod basically 99% of the book is in her pov which i think made the book a tad worse cause it just made charlotte sound so unbearably naive...every cruel thing he'd do to her shed be like well he didnt do something worse so maybe he has some mercy and kindness in him...like girl i know youve just been surrounded by monsterous men your whole life but come on? SHE WAS THE EQUIVALENT OF "BUT MAYBE I CAN SAVE HIM" i couldnt believe it. and even after all that her biggest line in the sand with him was him cheating...like ok hes treated you like a slave but infidelity is where we have boundaries. But she eventually grows a spine and leaves. and im thinkin 'alright she'll leave, he'll say sorry shell come back, I'lL regret the last 3 hours of my life but no...thats basically where it ends...his POV IS HIM HAVING A MENTAL BREAKDOWN OVER HER BEING GONE FOR 20 DAYS AND NOT BEING ABLE TO FIND HER. 😭 lol the ONLY reason this book got such a high rating from me was bc his groveling when she wasn't even present, begging her to come back, being utterly lost without her was so top tier it almost, ALMOST made up for him being a psychopathic as$hat.
theres not much spice and when there was only like 2 actually "nice" scenes. Also another thing i really hated was everytime he had a cnc sorta situation with her shed always make references to how her body was betraying her and how she hated liking it and stuff..like ok its a cnc book but..come on, he was doing really awful things to do her and shes already a survivor could u not make it sound like she'd enjoy that. She had said earlier in the book she didnt want it that way so i didnt get why she'd enjoy it then.
theres not much spice and when there was only like 2 actually "nice" scenes. Also another thing i really hated was everytime he had a cnc sorta situation with her shed always make references to how her body was betraying her and how she hated liking it and stuff..like ok its a cnc book but..come on, he was doing really awful things to do her and shes already a survivor could u not make it sound like she'd enjoy that. She had said earlier in the book she didnt want it that way so i didnt get why she'd enjoy it then.
This entire review has been hidden because of spoilers.
January 4, 2026
2/5⭐️ 2.5/5🌶
This was.... all over the place. The blurb about her having a mastectomy sparked my interest, and TBH, I thought the FMC would be older, so was a little disappointed she is only 20. But still thought it started well. Then it started jumping from one thing to the next very abruptly. The MCs gave me whiplash with how quickly their behavior and feelings for each other changed without any explanation or buildup to make it make sense. Then they would flip again in the next paragraph.
Action in the book was just as unbelievably hectic. None of the transitions were seamless. Multiple, major things take place within hours of each other. And of course there are a million ways that the FMC has been traumatized by in her past that he needs to protect/avenge her from 🙄
I can even accept the fact that it completely brushed over the realities of her cancer. Other than the repetitive "my scars" commentary, I think there was just a sentence to explain she had cancer and they immediately did a mastectomy. But somehow there are no physician follow-ups or additional treatments? I get that would take away from the tight focus of the story 😀
Then there is the writing. Clunky writing with the tense changing up constantly. And weird phrasing "do you gym?" What?? This combined with the lack of any personal info in the author's bio scream AI written or heavily used, although obviously not to edit. My only ask is that books/authors should be required to state when it is used in the actual content generation. Much like when a ghost writer is used or whatever you call the Richard Patterson "idea" that someone else writes, yet he still gets the marquee billing, process is.
So disappointing since the concept was so unique. And yes, I will probably hate read the other 2, since I snagged this and the 3rd book for free.
This was.... all over the place. The blurb about her having a mastectomy sparked my interest, and TBH, I thought the FMC would be older, so was a little disappointed she is only 20. But still thought it started well. Then it started jumping from one thing to the next very abruptly. The MCs gave me whiplash with how quickly their behavior and feelings for each other changed without any explanation or buildup to make it make sense. Then they would flip again in the next paragraph.
Action in the book was just as unbelievably hectic. None of the transitions were seamless. Multiple, major things take place within hours of each other. And of course there are a million ways that the FMC has been traumatized by in her past that he needs to protect/avenge her from 🙄
I can even accept the fact that it completely brushed over the realities of her cancer. Other than the repetitive "my scars" commentary, I think there was just a sentence to explain she had cancer and they immediately did a mastectomy. But somehow there are no physician follow-ups or additional treatments? I get that would take away from the tight focus of the story 😀
Then there is the writing. Clunky writing with the tense changing up constantly. And weird phrasing "do you gym?" What?? This combined with the lack of any personal info in the author's bio scream AI written or heavily used, although obviously not to edit. My only ask is that books/authors should be required to state when it is used in the actual content generation. Much like when a ghost writer is used or whatever you call the Richard Patterson "idea" that someone else writes, yet he still gets the marquee billing, process is.
So disappointing since the concept was so unique. And yes, I will probably hate read the other 2, since I snagged this and the 3rd book for free.
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