Okay, this book had the potential to be really great, but it fell flat due to [no?] editing.
I want to say I found grammatical issues, spelling issues and missing quotations in over half of the book. I started highlighting them after a time.
"Individuality seized to exist." Ceased?
“I thought Unfortunates was supposed to be mean,”
“You're brother, and you can't hide away forever,” he says, his voice broken. [[was supposed to be your]]
“and he’s using his knowledge of that to care to keep me away,” ??
“and it's come for blood,” he gasps, guiding us in a dead sprint down the alleyway, [[its]]
"Black ink marks his skin, the clear image of an unknown image encasing his chest." what the heck is this supposed to mean?
"Just as he had before, he holds the pistil to them."
The good:
I LOVE that there was art throughout the book. Omg, can we please start doing this in more fantasies? That was incredible.
“Everything after that night was only her. I will live for her, and I will die for her, as long as it means she gets some peace in this world,” and “One kiss and I can never walk away. One kiss and I am yours until the day my heart stops,” SWOON
The bad:
I feel like the characters lacked depth. The world was really great, and the premise of the story feels cool and unique, but again it just fell flat by not enough explanation. I was so confused by a lot of the dialogue in this book too. I could rant forever but I think I'm just going to go read other low star reviews to feel seen.
-spoilers below-
The amount of times she called a character "the blonde" "the dark haired man" when they know each other. At that point, it doesn't really make sense to keep calling them "the blonde".
"I grab the blonde's shoulder,"
"watching the dark-haired man pause, his jaw clenched."
"I turn to face the blonde, watching his kind expression pan down to me."
"I force my hand up to the blonde, mocking my hand into the form of a gun,"
Just to name a few... there's a lot more.
Lastly, at 98% the term "winnowed" gets thrown into the book with no explanation. Forest, who's somebody who shouldn't know much about Marked powers, is like "omg, he winnowed! He used the last of his power to take us somewhere else". Like girl, how do you know that? Also, I was like, ARE YOU KIDDING ME? Is this is a fanfiction? How the heck are you going to throw a term from ACOTAR, winnowed, into this book like that. Come on. Couldn't think of any other word????