DNF 51%
Disclaimer: These are my personal thoughts and opinions. Others may enjoy this book differently.
For those who’d rather skip my longer review, here are the main points explaining why I DNF’d the book and why it didn’t work for me. I’m really sorry to have to write this kind of review, especially since this book was one of my most anticipated reads of the month, but it literally left me disappointed.
1. writing style & narrative are too simple for an academic setting. This doesn’t mean that I generally dislike this type of writing, in this case, it felt overly simplistic. The dialogues are also weak and don’t fit the characters, whether university students or faculty members. More than once I cringed because the dialogues didn’t match the weight of the scene and came across as flat in both content and tone.
2. worldbuilding ? I’m not sure what exactly I was expecting, given that the story is set in a university, but I would have appreciated more details about Parker’s background or even about the university itself. Aside from the initial setup, however, most of the narrative revolves around the romance between the two protagonists. Perhaps if I had continued, I would have discovered more, but who knows?
3. conflicts are shallow and don’t have time to properly develop. Throughout the whole story, I came across maybe two or three conflict situations, and none of them left any real impact on me;
4. characters are underdeveloped and lack depth. They didn’t leave much of an impression on me, mostly because of the way the story was presented. Parker is genuinely a good hybrid, but unfortunately, his character doesn’t go much beyond that. Olivia, on the other hand, gave me the impression of being too absorbed in her own ballet world, and aside from the ball and her sisters, she didn’t seem to care much about what was happening around her, which doesn’t make much sense if you’re attending a paranormal university. I can at least give some credit to the secondary characters like Zant, who felt more promising;
5. the romance didn’t leave a significant impact due to all the previously mentioned issues, which is really a shame because, as it was presented, the story had the potential to be unique and engaging.
Here’s the detailed explanation (with some spoilers) of why this book didn’t work for me and why I had to put it on my DNF list.
Putting this book on my DNF list breaks my heart because it was a read I had been looking forward to this month. Maybe I fell into the trap of its beautiful aesthetic or the promising plot, but my expectations were sadly let down… I tried to push through the story, hoping it might improve or that my opinion would change, but nothing did. So here’s a detailed explanation (yes, because I need to vent about these points) of the reasons why, personally, this book didn’t entertain me and why I had to stop reading it.
Writing style: the story is set in an academic environment, yet the narrative feels far too simple and lacks evocative detail. The writing reminded me a lot of Kennedy’s style in the Off-Campus series, but at least Kennedy used her style to her advantage and made it enjoyable, something that didn’t happen here. I’m not saying that this type of style shouldn’t be used, but the way it was executed here left the story feeling flat.
The way info dumps were handled, always explained by a character rather than discovered firsthand, made exploring this world uninteresting. Most of the dialogues were weak, and moments that demanded depth or emotional weight were glossed over or skipped entirely.
Even the scenes suffered the same treatment. SPOILER What I particularly struggled with was the way the scene where the protagonist, Olivia, is attacked by a vampire (he bites her without her consent) was written and developed. Here’s the context: Olivia and her sisters come from the human world and have never encountered supernatural beings except for their parents. When they arrive at DO, their father doesn’t want them to join the Blood Donor Center because he’s afraid they’ll meet the same fate as their mother. However, by doing so, they become easy targets for vampires. When Olivia is saved by Parker (MMC) and later discusses it with her sisters, the event is narrated in a surprisingly calm way, as if nothing significant had happened. Even when Olivia mentions it to the director, who says she will file a report, the matter is never revisited except for a two-line remark. Shouldn’t there be a proper procedure for those who opt out of the program rather than leaving them as targets? Not to mention that the vampire who attacked Olivia is a council member, which makes the situation even worse. Eventually, the situation is “resolved” in a less bureaucratic way, but the combination of Olivia’s apparent indifference and the system’s lack of care left me very perplexed.END SPOILER
The problem is that there are so many scenes like this throughout the story, where there should be more room for character thoughts and refinement, yet the narrative stays at a very basic level, instead prioritizing the romantic aspect of the two protagonists.
Another scene that left me speechless (and not in a good way) was the fake dating, a central part of the story’s development. Not only are the two characters “discovered,” or at least suspected of having a fake relationship, just two weeks after announcing it, but they continue to talk about it openly, bringing it up without even trying to hint at it or use another way to address the topic. Excuse me, but you’re in a school of werewolves and vampires—if there were only humans around, this would have been discovered immediately. The point of the story was clearly to revolve around the fake relationship trope, but it was discovered before even 40% of the book. It frustrates me because the story could have been interesting to continue, but I just can’t get through this type of writing and presentation.
Worldbuilding: I’m not exactly sure what I was expecting, given that the story is set in a university, but I would have appreciated more details about Parker’s background and about the university itself. While I enjoyed the presentation and the way Doxlothia University manages its students and activities, I still didn’t have a clear understanding of what kinds of lessons are actually taught or what practical, work-related purposes they serve. Aside from the initial setup, most of the narrative revolves around the romance between the two protagonists. The classes seem similar to those in the human world, but I had hoped for more unique or distinctive activities that could make the setting truly stand out. Perhaps if I had continued, I would have discovered more, but who knows?
Conflict & Pacing: the conflicts never really feel like conflicts because they aren’t given enough time or space to develop. Key plot points—Olivia’s attack, the fake dating, and the Blood Donor Program issue—are handled too quickly, leaving the story flat and unengaging. The pacing is inconsistent, with some moments rushed and others dragging, while the tone and mood often fall flat when suspense or danger is expected. Overall, the promising premise doesn’t live up to its potential, making it hard to stay invested and contributing to my decision to DNF.
Characters: starting with the secondary characters, there isn’t much to say.
Olivia’s sisters
had a very brief engagement in the story, and while I generally liked them, they seemed a bit lost in this world. I wonder if they will get more development later in the series.
Zant
, the vampire and Parker’s best friend, I actually liked. He’s stereotypical, but personally, I found him enjoyable.
Octavia
, despite her brief appearance, was also a pleasant and interesting character. As for the
father of the Osborne sisters
, honestly, he came across as somewhat hypocritical. Sending his daughters into a world he knows personally “to protect them,” without giving them even basic information, was hard to swallow for me. Also, why all three of them, if in the end only one actually wanted to go?
Olivia
: I thought I would like Olivia, since she seemed to have the most open mind toward the world she was entering and appeared to have clear ideas. However, her development was practically nonexistent. She is supposed to be the sister who protects the others, yet she comes across as reluctant to accept help and stubborn in her choices. Since she isn’t part of the Blood Donor Program by her father’s decision, shouldn’t there be another way to manage the situation and prevent her from being an easy target? The solution comes through the fake dating, but does it guarantee full protection for Olivia’s sisters as well? From how it’s presented, it seems that the only “protected” one is Olivia herself.
Additionally, she feels too caught up in the ball—both as a personal escape and as a way to feel closer to her mother. Aside from the ball and her sisters, Olivia didn’t seem to care much about what was happening around her, which doesn’t make much sense if you’re attending a paranormal university.
Parker
: honestly, I didn’t understand how he ended up as the captain of the Rage (a sport inspired by hockey) or as a born alpha when it’s clear he’s a lone wolf. Maybe his development will come later, but for now, he just seems like a good guy trying to juggle his responsibilities as a student and a pack member. The only thing that really sets him apart is that he’s a hybrid; aside from that, he feels remarkably human.
The Romance: the idea of “fated mates” doesn’t bother me, as it’s common in paranormal romance, but the way Parker and Olivia’s relationship developed felt too quick. They meet, fake-date, and soon after become intimate, leaving little room for a natural slow burn. Some shy, hesitant moments would have made their connection feel more authentic.
In the end, despite its intriguing premise and visually appealing presentation, this book didn’t manage to hold my attention. While there were a few enjoyable moments and secondary characters I liked, the story overall fell flat for me. It’s disappointing, as it had the potential to be engaging and unique, and it frustrates me even more because it includes all the tropes that usually interest me, but I just couldn’t find anything that made the reading enjoyable.
Thank you to S.L. Cokeley for the ARC in exchange for an honest review.