TIME OF DEATH: 12:26 28/11/25
Boring as fuck, though being plotless is not the worst thing about this; a word to the wise for anyone out there considering writing an "erotic" book is to please practice writing sex scenes first, not only for the sake of their quality, because a man going in dry and jackrabbiting a woman against a desk is erotic in the way that a smear test is*, but also to develop both the vulnerability and frankness that is necessary to write sex scenes well, i.e. not in the way they are written here. This book purports to be "porn with plot" but we are nearly halfway gone and there is one sex scene, only the one I have described already. Not only that, but the sexual interactions are written in this shaky, self-conscious, hesitant manner, the prose halting and uncertain of itself, wanting to be seen as erotic but too afraid to be perceived as dirty. Having read Evocation and Ascension by the same author, I recognise this as a hold-over. This, and the perception of same-sex sexual interactions as inherently dirtier, more clandestine, more kinky; the characters, who are all made of cardboard, and therefore have absolutely zero chemistry, will share vague "heated glances" with characters of the same sex, while loudly confessing their urgent sexual feelings for characters of the opposite sex, pursuing them, "I've never felt this way about anyone", etc. Across this body of work, it seems to be a trend that heterosexual sex is normal, the foundation of the real relationships, whereas anything gay is an add-on, never held up with the same import, to be dabbled in as a salacious side quest before we return to the proper pairings, which are the m/f ones. Put simply, it is an afterthought.
*I suppose this might be my lesbianism talking, but even if I imagine Finley as a woman with a strap, I'm left 🤷🏻♀️. No self-respecting lesbian would ever fuck her girl this way. Or be such a useless dom. I understand that Eileen and Finley are stuck on this estate and can't go to a munch or anything but surely there is internet here, and so surely they could have gone on fetlife and asked the community for some tips on how to develop their D/s dynamic instead of muddling through cluelessly the way they are now. "My safe word is geranium," Eileen says, because that's what a person who knows absolutely nothing about kink thinks a safe word should be. It's like in movies how they show blind people touching people's faces, even though blind people never do that and mostly think it's weird. To be fair, this book was already on thin ice anyway with m/f kink, male dom female sub, which I do not like ([Miranda Priestly voice] a man in a dominant role over a woman in a submissive role?? groundbreaking 🙄), but lost me completely during a scene where Adam and Nicola are watching Finley do some non-sexual D/s touching with Eileen; the description in this scene is focused on Eileen, making her the focal point. Adam says, with no additional context, "I'd like to try that out," and Finley says okay, let's go, and without prompting, Adam just gets up and starts acting in a dominant role towards Eileen. This seemed insane to me. Because of the way the scene was framed, it seemed obvious to me like he was asking to be in Eileen's position; what he wanted to try out was being a submissive. But no. He just jumps up, has a quick personality transplant, and sticks his fingers in her mouth. No self-reflection, no inner monologue about what role he would like to play, not even a cursory glance. It is just assumed he is dominant, despite his personality up to this point, what little of it there is, leaning much more towards the receptive and desiring approval, because this book thinks man = dominant and woman = submissive. Which is funny, really, because this book is sold as "queer". Queer does not mean "non-straight". It is a political identity. That's another thing you should probably learn about before you write a book like this.
Oh, and I was going to mention how these "Scottish" characters talk like Americans, because I can promise you that not a single soul in Scotland knows what the fuck a "Midwestern accent" is, but I don't have time. Just assume, as always, that the Scottish elements of this were handled horrendously.
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