The demon crept into his mind, recalling for Arden all the burdens and terrible twists of his life. His Talismans had been stolen before he even knew they existed. He was frozen permanently at a vulnerable stage and then given the paradox of being instinctively drawn to war when he must be a man of peace. Every move Arden made had been foreseen and thwarted years in advance. The sorcerers knew and were coming for him. The demon reminded him of all of this, swallowing the future king down into the abyss of his own mind. Unless he broke free from every prison, he would never become the Legend Maker.
...but my critique is the same. Great stories! Bery imaginative and has great potential for multiple prequels. GET AN EDITOR! Can't say much more than that.