Ah, Group 7. The virality you had...
I have a billion thoughts on this book that I'm saving for a full length YT video, but in short, the most obvious problem is that this book did not have any editors or beta readers lay eyes on it before it was indie published. The typos, the formatting, the syntax, the dialogue, the pacing...every rookie mistake you can make in a book was made.
The power system is confusing, information is not conveyed organically but through info dumping, and there are a number story choices that echo or rather replicate the X-Men and My Hero Academia so closely that you don't even have to squint to see them. It's almost 1 to 1 if you get what I mean, even with lines saying stuff about how "The Olympics are obsolete due to hero entrance exams for Chronos Academy taking their place" which is also something said in chapter 22 of My Hero Academia in regards to their UA Sports Festival.
You're not allowed to figure out anything for yourseld. Everything is told to you straight up, straight out, or foreshadowed in a way that you can guess what happens immediately.
Characters lack a great deal of relatability simply because...there are two characters that really do anything at all in this book, and every other character is mostly talked ABOUT and not really engaged with.
I don't want to discount Ian Boggs' passion for storytelling. It's there. You know it's there. But passion alone doth not a story make. He wrote it in a month and it reads like a book written in a month. So I hope he receives genuine constructive criticism and hires an editor before he releases the second part which is already in the works. This book is a really good example of why you just shouldn't rush a passion project even if there is demand for it. Traditionally published ESTABLISHED authors with experience take AT LEAST a year to write and edit a book. At least. It's okay to take your time. It's okay if it takes longer than you expected. Taking a year to work on a book that is polished and edited with maybe a few disgruntled and impatient fans is far better than doing too much all at once and releasing a book that is essentially a first draft and disappointing a huge number of fans and losing them longterm instead.
***EDIT*** So Mister Boggs just justified his typos and said they were intentional, since first editions of books like Harry Potter and the Great Gatsby had them, and look how much those editions are selling for? Basically he thinks he's doing us a favor and presupposing his book will gain the same level of recognition very, very quickly so his first editions value will go up. No???? Those books received editing. They saw editors. Those typos were genuine mistakes. Boggs' typos make some passages unreadable, and I think it's really unfair to his biggest fans who bought the book right away to say "oh well ACTUALLY you got an unfinished product, so if you want an edited version you have to buy that." Pretty slimy.