This was definitely reheated Emily Henry nachos. And day-old Lunchable ones at that.
Both the writing style and characters felt very young YA, borderline middle-grade. I liken it to how you read Twilight for the first time at 12 and thought it was the pinnacle of literature because it used big words like “irrevocably,” but then you read it as an adult and you’re like, “what the actual fuck is this.”
Yeah, this was kinda like that.
It wasn’t outrageously offensive by any means, but it was incredibly overwritten and relied too heavily on the use of a thesaurus.
I’m seeing this a lot in newer writers; they think that writing in an overly-written, purple, flowery prose will elevate their story, but instead it just distracts. Good writing is one you never think about. When there are lines like:
“Faye intones, regal as always.”
Or
“I have to yield to a conglomerate of pedestrians.”
it gets distracting. It’s trying too hard. Keep it simple, stupid and use similes and metaphors only during special moments. And also, close the thesaurus tab, I beg.
It was also so obvious how much clear self-insert this was, which I vehemently despise (I use big words because I’m cool and I can, okay) Our fmc loved dystopian YA books as a kid, liked to buy physical trophies of her Kindle reads, and is now a published romance author.
Sound familiar? Yeah I didn’t think so either.
I was waiting for Declan to admit he’s always thought about filming challenges for YouTube and creating a “healthy” candy.
As for the relationship, it was FARR too rushed and not built out enough. Much like everything in this book, there was too much and not enough work done to flesh it out.
The two mcs talk about what bird they are one chapter and the next, they’re in love, ready to wed immediately like some kind of Mormon, military couple.
She also does the absolutely annoying, makes me want to hurl myself out of a window thing of making her FMC ask questions like, “why won’t he talk to me, why wasn’t I enough for him, why did he suddenly end things” when it was HER fault to begin with and I ask why? Why must we keep doing this?
And the “best friendships” which I’m sorry, was reheated Happy Place scrambled eggs. One of the friends uses “Blair” in almost every text or call and it drove me crazy. Also, the first time they meet (in person) she goes, “Blair, like Gossip Girl without the ‘e’?”
How the hell would she know that? She said her name out loud. Is there a text bubble above her head or something??
Everything was extremely tell-don’t-show. And because of that, the characters often felt two-dimensional.
We’re told Lottie’s backstory; we’re told Blair’s mom’s backstory; we’re told how much Blair loves Declan. Honestly, the only thing we’re ever shown is how annoying and self-centered Blair is.
I loved Lottie’s backstory and I went into this book with the hope that we’d get this rich, emotional dynamic between Blair, her mom, and Lottie and see why it was so important for these three women of a different generation to connect as a family.
We got like 3 interactions with Lottie max? She felt like a throwaway character designed only as a plot device for Blair to arrive home (and while, yes, technically that was the point) it shouldn’t feel like the point. In a story like this, one with both a romance and a general fiction plot, both need to be thorough and developed.
Last thing, I’m sorry to say, is because Haley is loaded, it’s very clear she doesn’t know how to write a struggle character. Financially, everything is tied up very easily in this book. Financial issues are solved by simply selling something to someone else or getting settlement money.
#SoRelatable
Thank you to Edelweiss for a free ARC in exchange for an honest review.